Tanka (After Long Commute)
Cooking goes faster with two cooks.76 total reviews
Comment from MaggieF
Good picture. You are right when I used to work by the time it got home and I to the kitchen I was exhausted and looked for any excuse not to cook! I love the feeling of harmony in this poem, and love 'Together we cook our meal'MaggieF
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Good picture. You are right when I used to work by the time it got home and I to the kitchen I was exhausted and looked for any excuse not to cook! I love the feeling of harmony in this poem, and love 'Together we cook our meal'MaggieF
Comment Written 01-May-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Yes, Maggie, many people have remarked that they love my poem's feeling of harmony. Thank you for your review.
Comment from valmay
I loved the sense of sharing that shone through these few words. The end of a long day brings different stresses, what a wonderful reaction, just to be understanding and lend a helping hand and a sympathetic ear. Well done. Also the gas burner shone nicely too.
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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I loved the sense of sharing that shone through these few words. The end of a long day brings different stresses, what a wonderful reaction, just to be understanding and lend a helping hand and a sympathetic ear. Well done. Also the gas burner shone nicely too.
Comment Written 01-May-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Valmay, for your review. Yes, the end of the day brings different stresses. I am glad you felt my poem's sense of sharing.
Comment from Hitcher
A nice use of the Tanka form friend, and nice that you are allowed in the kitchen to help your wife : ) When my wife is cooking, she owns the space that is the kitchen and rarely allows anyone in that space, she is a very good cook though so I tend to say nothing and enjoy, ha ha. When I cook any and all may lend a hand...but they seldom do : )
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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A nice use of the Tanka form friend, and nice that you are allowed in the kitchen to help your wife : ) When my wife is cooking, she owns the space that is the kitchen and rarely allows anyone in that space, she is a very good cook though so I tend to say nothing and enjoy, ha ha. When I cook any and all may lend a hand...but they seldom do : )
Comment Written 01-May-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Hitcher, for your encouraging review and engaging comments.
Comment from donette1914
very well done and a cute little story and how together you cook a meal with arugula. very nice artwork and it was a pleasure to read your work. very well penned poem and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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very well done and a cute little story and how together you cook a meal with arugula. very nice artwork and it was a pleasure to read your work. very well penned poem and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Thank you, Donnete, for your review of my cute little story. I appreciate it.
Comment from moonsunrise
I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Great visual and yes, after a long commute just cooking a meal can feel insurmountable. Great solution: Improvise, compromise and yes together cook and enjoy your meal.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Great visual and yes, after a long commute just cooking a meal can feel insurmountable. Great solution: Improvise, compromise and yes together cook and enjoy your meal.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Yes, improvise and compromise. That's how to get cooking done. Thank you for your review, moonsunrise.
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Your welcome.
Comment from catch22
Hi SC, this is an interesting poem about the give and take in a relationship, where two individuals come together after having separate days to perform a simple acitvity together--like cooking dinner. THey each have their own personalities and preferences in life, but together, they make it work. You've managed to use good word economy in this write and made the pivot very subtle.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Hi SC, this is an interesting poem about the give and take in a relationship, where two individuals come together after having separate days to perform a simple acitvity together--like cooking dinner. THey each have their own personalities and preferences in life, but together, they make it work. You've managed to use good word economy in this write and made the pivot very subtle.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Catch22, for your detailed. nuanced review. You are right on the money on this poem. Thanks.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Hey, buddy - are you back in the groove from vacation? Cooking with two - may be a good idea you, but not for me and my other. The Kitchen is my realm. Thanks for a fun poem and welcome back.
Bill~
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Hey, buddy - are you back in the groove from vacation? Cooking with two - may be a good idea you, but not for me and my other. The Kitchen is my realm. Thanks for a fun poem and welcome back.
Bill~
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Yes, Bill, I am back and making a sun dried tomato pesto now. Thank you for your review.
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Sounds yummy! Mangia and enjoy~
Comment from FxstsLisa
A very well-written Tanka poem Sis Cat! I could feel the emotion (that I've experienced a lot) from beginning to the end where you help each other make dinner no matter how tired you both are. Also, the poem had some subtle humor in it with the 'parsley' and 'arugula.' Nice work!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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A very well-written Tanka poem Sis Cat! I could feel the emotion (that I've experienced a lot) from beginning to the end where you help each other make dinner no matter how tired you both are. Also, the poem had some subtle humor in it with the 'parsley' and 'arugula.' Nice work!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, 1fxsts99, for your review and for picking up on the subtle humor of my poem. Your comments cheer me.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Sis Cat, Very good. I enjoyed reading your poem and how it brings to life something that can be ordinary and routine -- like cooking dinner -- but something that is really anything but ordinary. I especially liked:
No parsley, you say.
Use arugula, I say.
Together we cook our meal.
(Very good imagery. S, in my house ... if there were no arugula (which I love) and there as no parsley or other items needed to complete the dinner, the take-out menu would quickly appear front and center ... or a bowl of cereal.
Good for you and your health for not letting a missing item or two prevent you from cooking your own dinner. There's always substitutions unless there is/are picky eaters.)
Fantastic artwork choice. This photo is urging me to try to take a similar snapshot.
Cooking, and most things, definitely goes quicker with two cooperative people. A fun poem that made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Hello Sis Cat, Very good. I enjoyed reading your poem and how it brings to life something that can be ordinary and routine -- like cooking dinner -- but something that is really anything but ordinary. I especially liked:
No parsley, you say.
Use arugula, I say.
Together we cook our meal.
(Very good imagery. S, in my house ... if there were no arugula (which I love) and there as no parsley or other items needed to complete the dinner, the take-out menu would quickly appear front and center ... or a bowl of cereal.
Good for you and your health for not letting a missing item or two prevent you from cooking your own dinner. There's always substitutions unless there is/are picky eaters.)
Fantastic artwork choice. This photo is urging me to try to take a similar snapshot.
Cooking, and most things, definitely goes quicker with two cooperative people. A fun poem that made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Thank you, LateBloomer, for your review of my fun poem. Yes, cooking goes quicker with two.
I will keep the blue waters flowing.
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It also helps if both people have the same taste buds! M
Comment from Mastery
Hello, my friend. This is a fine tanka from start to finish. so different because of the subject matter, I believe. I must confess, although I am the cook at my house, I have never heard of the herb arugula. Good write my friend. (as always) Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Hello, my friend. This is a fine tanka from start to finish. so different because of the subject matter, I believe. I must confess, although I am the cook at my house, I have never heard of the herb arugula. Good write my friend. (as always) Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Bob, for your review of my different tanka. Arugula is a peppery herb. You might order a salad of one. Thanks again.
