Migration
Moving from fixed form to free verse (see note)31 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Smooth interaction between fixed and then into free as you compare the well known migration of the most wonderous of creatures to the assention of Christ. Very nicely done
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Smooth interaction between fixed and then into free as you compare the well known migration of the most wonderous of creatures to the assention of Christ. Very nicely done
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Thanks, Barb. i appreciate your comments. Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
My students both past and present are excelling themselves today. This is a beautiful version you have here and i liked the blank verse version almost as much. The free verse however retains something of the apparently aimless fluttering of the butterfly, a beautiful creature but doomed to such a short life in that state.
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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My students both past and present are excelling themselves today. This is a beautiful version you have here and i liked the blank verse version almost as much. The free verse however retains something of the apparently aimless fluttering of the butterfly, a beautiful creature but doomed to such a short life in that state.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Very many thanks both for the review and the six stars, Jim. I am beginning to think that I, too, prefer the free verse version. Unchaining a fixed form is an interesting approach to creating free verse, for it retains some of the structure while allowing greater freedom of expression.
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If this aspect of the course has proved interesting at least I do not feel I have taken your money under false pretences. For me it has been an adventure, for some perhaps an educative experience, but for you I wondered.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem, when we look at the butterfly that starts as a caterpillar then died and cocooned in a resting place and whrn thr time is right the butterfly starts a new life and flies away and the cycle starts again when the butterfly lays tge eggs. We have to prepare our souls for its migration too.
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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A very well-written free verse poem, when we look at the butterfly that starts as a caterpillar then died and cocooned in a resting place and whrn thr time is right the butterfly starts a new life and flies away and the cycle starts again when the butterfly lays tge eggs. We have to prepare our souls for its migration too.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Very many thanks for your observations about this one, Sandra. Much appreciated, as always. Tony.
Comment from Irish Rain
This is just beautiful. I could never have described it better, 'on wings of butterflies.' Also, 'yearning for migration, as do we'...I think this is exactly what man does, as he seeks all the self-help books, and consults the stars. Beautiful. Blessings...
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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This is just beautiful. I could never have described it better, 'on wings of butterflies.' Also, 'yearning for migration, as do we'...I think this is exactly what man does, as he seeks all the self-help books, and consults the stars. Beautiful. Blessings...
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Many thanks, Janet. Such a pleasure to receive a six star award from you! Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome Mr. Tony!!!
Comment from Mustang Patty
This is a lovely free verse poem and I appreciate you including the other form of the same poem in your author's notes. The writing is full of images and takes the reader on a journey from seeing a glimpse of a butterfly, and remembering so much more. Lastly, we wish to be part of our own migration as we join the masses; going home. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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This is a lovely free verse poem and I appreciate you including the other form of the same poem in your author's notes. The writing is full of images and takes the reader on a journey from seeing a glimpse of a butterfly, and remembering so much more. Lastly, we wish to be part of our own migration as we join the masses; going home. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Patty. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
How beautifully you've used the migration of the butterflies as an example of Christ's resurrection. A bit C. S. Lewis.
You were clever enough to write four wonderful poems in different forms.
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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How beautifully you've used the migration of the butterflies as an example of Christ's resurrection. A bit C. S. Lewis.
You were clever enough to write four wonderful poems in different forms.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Yvonne. Much appreciated. Jim is certainly keeping us busy! Best wishes, Tony
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Isn't he, though. I'm still struggling with the blank verse one.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Wonderful imagery throughout which paints a fantastic picture of these beautiful butterflies.
Really enjoyed your writing in the notes....your a great talent Tony, well done
Have a great day
Mitchell
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Wonderful imagery throughout which paints a fantastic picture of these beautiful butterflies.
Really enjoyed your writing in the notes....your a great talent Tony, well done
Have a great day
Mitchell
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Thanks very much, Mitchell. Appreciated! Tony
Comment from Gloria ....
I really like this poem, Tony. It's filled with strong imagery and linked to the internal thoughts of the poet--you. Just lovely.
I didn't know Jim was teaching a free verse course. That is most cool.
Yes migration into the next life is a pleasant metaphor.
Great job my friend.
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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I really like this poem, Tony. It's filled with strong imagery and linked to the internal thoughts of the poet--you. Just lovely.
I didn't know Jim was teaching a free verse course. That is most cool.
Yes migration into the next life is a pleasant metaphor.
Great job my friend.
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Thanks, Gloria. I'm enjoying the class with Jim. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Dean Kuch
You've always been exceptional at writing blank verse and free verse poetry, Tony.
This lovely poem filled with metaphorical imagery and majesty is certainly no exception.
Simply stunning...
~Dean
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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You've always been exceptional at writing blank verse and free verse poetry, Tony.
This lovely poem filled with metaphorical imagery and majesty is certainly no exception.
Simply stunning...
~Dean
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Thanks very much, Dean. What a very nice thing to say. Best wishes, Tony.
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You're more than welcome. :}
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Interesting. I do like the free verse one the best which surprised me since I am not a huge fan of free verse normally. It flows so much better than the other two. Thanks for sharing these, my friend~Debbie
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Interesting. I do like the free verse one the best which surprised me since I am not a huge fan of free verse normally. It flows so much better than the other two. Thanks for sharing these, my friend~Debbie
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Debbie, for going to the trouble to read all three! I think, on balance, that I agree. Best wishes, Tony
