Briarly Hall
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Comment from Realist101
Oh, winter! As I read, I 'felt' the chill in the air. Lol! Nice descriptions and atmosphere in this as well as good dialogue that helps show instead of tell. I would suggest maybe putting spaces in between some of your sentences. ? So close makes it harder to read...all in all great entry. :)
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Oh, winter! As I read, I 'felt' the chill in the air. Lol! Nice descriptions and atmosphere in this as well as good dialogue that helps show instead of tell. I would suggest maybe putting spaces in between some of your sentences. ? So close makes it harder to read...all in all great entry. :)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
Comment from LadyTreana
Once I got past the way the writing was set up, I was able to enjoy reading this story. It peaked my interest and left me wanting more. I hope you will continue building it up.
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Once I got past the way the writing was set up, I was able to enjoy reading this story. It peaked my interest and left me wanting more. I hope you will continue building it up.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
Comment from mbroyles2
You hooked me from the start with the eerie setting and mystery.
Lot's of questions and suspense as I could certainly get a feel of something amiss.
A terrific pace and descriptions.
Wonderful dialogue.
"Why would La Marquise exchange the warmth of southern France for a cold inn deep in the heart of the snowy English countryside. And within earshot of Briarly Hall. And who was her companion male traveller?"
Herein lies the tale.
Great story!
Michael
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You hooked me from the start with the eerie setting and mystery.
Lot's of questions and suspense as I could certainly get a feel of something amiss.
A terrific pace and descriptions.
Wonderful dialogue.
"Why would La Marquise exchange the warmth of southern France for a cold inn deep in the heart of the snowy English countryside. And within earshot of Briarly Hall. And who was her companion male traveller?"
Herein lies the tale.
Great story!
Michael
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
