Grammy's Memoirs 2018
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Educating Patty"Bits and pieces of my life for my grandchildren
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Comment from pbomar1115
You are one tough lady. Your teacher saw something you did not see. God bless him. To see potential in a child and not ignore it is rare today. Coming from a home as you did proved everyone don't flower favorably. You got the right stuff. The story inspires because you turned out all right. What you did with you life is the kind of story people enjoy hearing and reading about. Great story and writing.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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You are one tough lady. Your teacher saw something you did not see. God bless him. To see potential in a child and not ignore it is rare today. Coming from a home as you did proved everyone don't flower favorably. You got the right stuff. The story inspires because you turned out all right. What you did with you life is the kind of story people enjoy hearing and reading about. Great story and writing.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review. Writing this chapter was challenging, but getting it all down on paper gave me a perspective I had been missing. I appreciate you coming along on the journey,
~patty~
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Patty, the six is as much for what you didn't tell, but I could feel, as for what you wrote. I have always tried to prove myself worthy, mostly because I didn't feel I was. I threw my family out of my life exactly a year ago, and have found it so freeing. I have made huge changes and found out there is a whole world out there that doesn't care squat about what my family thinks of me, and have started a new life. I give my writing and friends on Fanstory much of the credit for the courage to really be me. Hugs, my friend. Hang on for the ride up~Debbie
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Patty, the six is as much for what you didn't tell, but I could feel, as for what you wrote. I have always tried to prove myself worthy, mostly because I didn't feel I was. I threw my family out of my life exactly a year ago, and have found it so freeing. I have made huge changes and found out there is a whole world out there that doesn't care squat about what my family thinks of me, and have started a new life. I give my writing and friends on Fanstory much of the credit for the courage to really be me. Hugs, my friend. Hang on for the ride up~Debbie
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi Debbie; your review gave me chills because you have expressed so much love. I appreciate you and all of my FanStory family. I have been given a safe place to write this story and share the pain I've only told to therapists and my husband. Your words mean a great deal,
~patty~
PS: the six star review made me feel wonderful, too.
Comment from royowen
Poor kid, I don't understand violence, my anger never manifested itself in violence, even though I was a heavy drinker, when God got hold of me, He demanded that I stopped drinking, gambling and smoking, and I did, He changed my life completely, I can't emphasise enough the evils of drink (to excess, not moderation) and drugs, (never) kids should never see that behaviour from their father (or mother) my mum could be both physically and verbally violent, but I'm so glad that you were clever enough to succeed in life, but that's only part of success, the real challenge, it, (through God) overcome other things, well done, blessings, Roy.
PS I note you are No 1, reviewer, it's hard work, two years ago, I was No. I reviewer and No 1 Poet, last year No 3 poet. Under pressure, God opened other doors! It caused me to only post three works this year, one needs 6 to rank. I still review, (I like reading) I still write, but don't post. I'm a performing musician, ( songwriter) so I'm doing other things with people with skin on, Heh, heh, if you need to confide Patty, be my guest!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Poor kid, I don't understand violence, my anger never manifested itself in violence, even though I was a heavy drinker, when God got hold of me, He demanded that I stopped drinking, gambling and smoking, and I did, He changed my life completely, I can't emphasise enough the evils of drink (to excess, not moderation) and drugs, (never) kids should never see that behaviour from their father (or mother) my mum could be both physically and verbally violent, but I'm so glad that you were clever enough to succeed in life, but that's only part of success, the real challenge, it, (through God) overcome other things, well done, blessings, Roy.
PS I note you are No 1, reviewer, it's hard work, two years ago, I was No. I reviewer and No 1 Poet, last year No 3 poet. Under pressure, God opened other doors! It caused me to only post three works this year, one needs 6 to rank. I still review, (I like reading) I still write, but don't post. I'm a performing musician, ( songwriter) so I'm doing other things with people with skin on, Heh, heh, if you need to confide Patty, be my guest!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi again, Roy; thank you so much for your kind offer to confide. I'm doing good - valiantly trying to exceed my own expectations, but as you can see from this story - its just my nature.
Writing this chapter was very freeing. I wrestled the demons as I configured the facts into a cohesive story, and when all was said and done, I looked at things differently, and felt as though I was truly ready to move on.
Thank you for coming along on the ride,
~patty~
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I have never written a testimony, (brief excerpts) but never a full blown one, I may hurt too many people, won't do that, lthough you're not hurting anyone with yours. I was a good father, (as the world measures fathers) and now a loving grandfather, (my grandkids seem to like me) God gave me the best wife He could give an undeserving man like me, I am fortunate, one can choose to forgive others their transgressions, and live a full life, or be miserable, not freeing themselves from their chains! I see you're moving on, great choice, writing about it helps. Well done, Patty.
Comment from emptypage
Jesus, Patty, this in horrible. I mean, the writing is excellent, superb, but that man...that monster. OMG, my blood pressure went up as I read.
I'm so sorry this happened to you. And you have proved plenty to the world right here on FS.
That asshole teacher? If he's alive you should send him a letter.
No SPAGs.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Jesus, Patty, this in horrible. I mean, the writing is excellent, superb, but that man...that monster. OMG, my blood pressure went up as I read.
I'm so sorry this happened to you. And you have proved plenty to the world right here on FS.
That asshole teacher? If he's alive you should send him a letter.
No SPAGs.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Hi Marla; thank you so much for your heartfelt review. I did manage to say something to Mr. Stevens about four years later when I went to visit the school. I told him that maybe I would've lived up to my potential if teachers like him had done their jobs. His jaw dropped and he ordered me out of the school - I flipped him the bird as I walked away. Small gesture since the sting of his words still linger.
I'm so proud of US - we managed to live through it and come out the other side,
Love ya,
~patty~
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Yeah...funny how words really hurt longer and harder than most punches.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Patty. This is a very engaging story and well told. You are a good storyteller.
Your imagery is very good indeed. Like here: "His belt was pulled from the loops of his pants. Swinging towards me, I could hear the harsh whistle of the leather.
Suggestion: Don't raise the size of your text like this: ""Patty, come over here darlin'. Come and sit with your daddy." I don't know what your purpose is, but it is actually more distracting than anything for the reader. Mind you, I am not saying it is bad in anyway...just not necessary for dialogue. IOf you are doing it to show him raising his voice for instance, just say he yelled or something. If you pick up any book in a bookstore you will not find yelling handled that way. I hope you don't get offended by this suggestion as you seemed to one other time.
Blessings. Bob
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Hi, Patty. This is a very engaging story and well told. You are a good storyteller.
Your imagery is very good indeed. Like here: "His belt was pulled from the loops of his pants. Swinging towards me, I could hear the harsh whistle of the leather.
Suggestion: Don't raise the size of your text like this: ""Patty, come over here darlin'. Come and sit with your daddy." I don't know what your purpose is, but it is actually more distracting than anything for the reader. Mind you, I am not saying it is bad in anyway...just not necessary for dialogue. IOf you are doing it to show him raising his voice for instance, just say he yelled or something. If you pick up any book in a bookstore you will not find yelling handled that way. I hope you don't get offended by this suggestion as you seemed to one other time.
Blessings. Bob
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Hi Bob; thank you for reading. I had italicized the words - did they look larger to you? Maybe I should not do anything to the font - what do you think?
I appreciate your time and kind words. Your support of my work means a great deal,
~patty~
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You know what, Patty.....now that I take another closer look....perhaps they are just italicized and that is fine. Sorry. Sometimes people on here enlarge some phrasing in hopes of making it stand out better, I think. This is a good story and well written, my friend. Bob
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thank you, Bob
Comment from wondertwin
Extremely well written Patty-even objectively so as I am sure it was difficult to write, but also to step out of 'tunnel vision' and include the surround (for lack of better words).
One descriptive line that I thought suburb was, 'The smile on his lips didn't quite reach his eyes' a window's eye into trust. Excellent!! Blessings, AmyJo
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Extremely well written Patty-even objectively so as I am sure it was difficult to write, but also to step out of 'tunnel vision' and include the surround (for lack of better words).
One descriptive line that I thought suburb was, 'The smile on his lips didn't quite reach his eyes' a window's eye into trust. Excellent!! Blessings, AmyJo
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Hi AmyJo; thank you so much for your warm review and kind words. This was a story that I needed to get out. It hurt a lot to get it written, but I feel so much better. I'm glad you saw the artistic beauty within the pain and hurt.
~patty~
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is an easy said author's biographical events, early school days, mother divorced, father left home for good, despite irregular school attendance, author had high performance in school; later a highly qualified person; how life offered challenges well shown; I liked and enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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This is an easy said author's biographical events, early school days, mother divorced, father left home for good, despite irregular school attendance, author had high performance in school; later a highly qualified person; how life offered challenges well shown; I liked and enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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thank you for stopping by to read and review,
~patty~
Comment from kathleenspalding
Whew! Riveting chapter had me worried, and ended with me being impressed.
Very well written piece. You wove the two incidents together well. Only thing I can suggest is that your school chronology is done by grade, then it goes to your dad coming back in 1969, so if you could say which grade you were in then, that would be helpful in placing your age.
That's it. Great job!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Whew! Riveting chapter had me worried, and ended with me being impressed.
Very well written piece. You wove the two incidents together well. Only thing I can suggest is that your school chronology is done by grade, then it goes to your dad coming back in 1969, so if you could say which grade you were in then, that would be helpful in placing your age.
That's it. Great job!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Hi Kathleen; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I will go in and work on the transition between school years so that it seems clearer. Your warm words of encouragement warmed my heart,
~patty~
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You're welcome :-)
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Patty, Excellent chapter in your book. I'm sorry that you had to be the one to bear your father's anger. 1970 was a bad year for me too. I'll write about it sometime. I'm glad you got all those degrees. You're an excellent poet and writer. Dove
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Dear Patty, Excellent chapter in your book. I'm sorry that you had to be the one to bear your father's anger. 1970 was a bad year for me too. I'll write about it sometime. I'm glad you got all those degrees. You're an excellent poet and writer. Dove
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Dove. I appreciate you continuing to read and review my work. Your kind words are greatly appreciated,
~patty~
Comment from Thomas Bowling
You have written a brave account of a troubled childhood. Thak God you came out of it unscathed except for unpleasant memories.
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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You have written a brave account of a troubled childhood. Thak God you came out of it unscathed except for unpleasant memories.
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Thomas. I have found so much happiness and I'm grateful everyday that the little girl who grew up with those people survived,
~patty~
