Grammy's Memoirs 2018
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Educating Patty"Bits and pieces of my life for my grandchildren
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Terrific chapter. Your father was a violent alcoholic. I'm surprised he left that day and didn't return. Lucky break for you, tho.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Terrific chapter. Your father was a violent alcoholic. I'm surprised he left that day and didn't return. Lucky break for you, tho.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi Phyllis; thank you for reading and reviewing. I think God knew it was best if he never came back. My brother had serious plans with his shotgun,
~patty~
Comment from nancy_e_davis
And so you did Patty. You rose above the hardships and forged ahead to prove the Teacher was right. You were not living up to your potential. Eventually you did. Good for you dear. Good story. Nancy
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And so you did Patty. You rose above the hardships and forged ahead to prove the Teacher was right. You were not living up to your potential. Eventually you did. Good for you dear. Good story. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi Nancy; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words, and I thank God every day that I didn't end up involved with drugs or alcohol. I just got addicted to school and winning.
~patty~
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'Educating Patty'- Nice title.
Well-written chapter.
Nicely polished.
Love the font color.
Lovely photo: The portrait shown supports the story.
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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'Educating Patty'- Nice title.
Well-written chapter.
Nicely polished.
Love the font color.
Lovely photo: The portrait shown supports the story.
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi Nicole; thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate you stopping by,
~patty~
Comment from Judith Ann
Again, a very well written piece. Your use of dialogue is good. This is often difficult for writers to do, but you've done it nicely. Dialogue adds so much to a story, making it come alive. I am sorry for the rough life you endured. So not fair! --Judith Ann
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Again, a very well written piece. Your use of dialogue is good. This is often difficult for writers to do, but you've done it nicely. Dialogue adds so much to a story, making it come alive. I am sorry for the rough life you endured. So not fair! --Judith Ann
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi Judith; thank you so much for your warm and thoughtful review. I struggle with dialogue and would instead like to 'narrate' my pieces, but I've been encouraged by other FanStorians to intermingle pieces of dialogue within the lines. Thank you so much for the compliment - I needed that! I appreciate you for following this story and the journey,
~patty~
Comment from DLBoo
Good job, nice flow.
I'm sure those lost moments don't really need to be found. I say good riddance to bad garbage. No offence meant.
Take care, Patty.
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Good job, nice flow.
I'm sure those lost moments don't really need to be found. I say good riddance to bad garbage. No offence meant.
Take care, Patty.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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thank you for your kind review. I totally agree with you - I don't think I need to ever recall those lost moments. I don't even care that it was my last interaction with my dad. Writing this chapter did a great deal of healing for me,
~patty~
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello, my friend, this must have been hard to write , your father was wrong trying to use you to get information that he could use against your mother, punishing you was wrong you were the victim caught in a volatile relationship, it is good that you have moved forward although you still have this memory that is all it is remember this and be happy regards Jill
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Hello, my friend, this must have been hard to write , your father was wrong trying to use you to get information that he could use against your mother, punishing you was wrong you were the victim caught in a volatile relationship, it is good that you have moved forward although you still have this memory that is all it is remember this and be happy regards Jill
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi Jill; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Your warm words of encouragement mean a lot to me. Writing this chapter has been very cathartic. Formatting the memory in story form helped me to put a great many things in perspective,
~patty~
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I don't remember the rest of that day. I only know that when I came to, lying under my brother's bed, the voices of my mother and sister were calling to me. The house was in shambles. We never saw my father again.
School was easy compared to the lessons I learned that day. My education about people, and how much you could trust them, was complete. Mr. Stevens' actions on that fateful day in seventh grade only proved the point.
I went on to get degrees in Accounting, Business, an MBA, and a law degree. It seems that I was trying to prove to myself, and the world, that I was living up to my potential.
This was such a brave write. I was singled out in the same way, I was often, often ill and in class would often go into trances. Turns out I wasn't not challenged enough.You have made a wonderful turnaround and that is proving your fathers horrific behaviour is below you, so below you that you made magic happen. You wrote this and showed us a slab of your amazing life and I am sure all fo us can relate in one way or another. Bravo Patty love Meia x
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I don't remember the rest of that day. I only know that when I came to, lying under my brother's bed, the voices of my mother and sister were calling to me. The house was in shambles. We never saw my father again.
School was easy compared to the lessons I learned that day. My education about people, and how much you could trust them, was complete. Mr. Stevens' actions on that fateful day in seventh grade only proved the point.
I went on to get degrees in Accounting, Business, an MBA, and a law degree. It seems that I was trying to prove to myself, and the world, that I was living up to my potential.
This was such a brave write. I was singled out in the same way, I was often, often ill and in class would often go into trances. Turns out I wasn't not challenged enough.You have made a wonderful turnaround and that is proving your fathers horrific behaviour is below you, so below you that you made magic happen. You wrote this and showed us a slab of your amazing life and I am sure all fo us can relate in one way or another. Bravo Patty love Meia x
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi Meia; thank you for your loving and thoughtful review. Writing this chapter helped me to put a lot of things in perspective. Boiling the facts down to portray in story form helped a great deal. Your continued support means so much to me,
~patty~
Comment from apky
I can imagine this being hard to write.
There's nothing that hurts more than "betrayal"
from the people you love and who are supposed to
love you back and protect you. And as if nature
joined in the game just to make it harder,
these happen to be the people you can't run
away from emotionally and biologically.
>>It seems that I was trying to prove to myself,
and the world that I was living up to my potential.<<
I think you could do with a comma after the word "world"
Beautiful writing as always.
Best,
Apky
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I can imagine this being hard to write.
There's nothing that hurts more than "betrayal"
from the people you love and who are supposed to
love you back and protect you. And as if nature
joined in the game just to make it harder,
these happen to be the people you can't run
away from emotionally and biologically.
>>It seems that I was trying to prove to myself,
and the world that I was living up to my potential.<<
I think you could do with a comma after the word "world"
Beautiful writing as always.
Best,
Apky
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi; thank you for your time to read and review. I appreciate you catching the 'nit.' I have gone back and edited. Your kind words and encouraging thoughts mean a great deal to me,
~patty~
Comment from Pearl Edwards
The sad thing is that kids don't want to appear too smart in front of their peers. I bet the memories do haunt you Patty. Very brave of you to be writing and sharing this story. Well written and well done.
cheers,
valda
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The sad thing is that kids don't want to appear too smart in front of their peers. I bet the memories do haunt you Patty. Very brave of you to be writing and sharing this story. Well written and well done.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi valda; I appreciate your time to read and review. I enjoyed school - when I went. I loved to excel, but didn't want to waste my time around the other kids and their antics. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Probably a real good thing you never saw that ignorant piece of garbage again!
However, the memories he engraved in your mind will probably never go away as they are well captured in this writing.
Abuse is something no child should ever have to go through.
However, I could write volumes on the topic featuring a two by four up aside the head. One of my own experiences with the subject, but I will leave those details for another time.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Probably a real good thing you never saw that ignorant piece of garbage again!
However, the memories he engraved in your mind will probably never go away as they are well captured in this writing.
Abuse is something no child should ever have to go through.
However, I could write volumes on the topic featuring a two by four up aside the head. One of my own experiences with the subject, but I will leave those details for another time.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Hi Brett; your review is heartfelt, and I'm sorry that it brought bad memories for you. This piece of my story was probably the hardest to write, because up until that moment, I thought my father loved me. Writing the incident down was very cathartic, and closed the door on that memory. Thank you for reading,
~patty~
