Shall We Dance?
A poem inspired by Pierre-Auguste Renoir, the Impressionist31 total reviews
Comment from estory
I think its a nice job with this format, you created the acrostics, and had a nice kind of two stepping rhythm, a bit of a waltz as the words swirled around in their meter and rhyme scheme. estory
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I think its a nice job with this format, you created the acrostics, and had a nice kind of two stepping rhythm, a bit of a waltz as the words swirled around in their meter and rhyme scheme. estory
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I truly appreciate your sharing my poem. I think you might be right about the poem having the same rhythm as a waltz.
Comment from HarryT
Nice use of the painting and the description conveys the feeling of the male dancer. Clearly, he is love with his partner. Excellent rhyming. An outstanding effort with the acrostic facet.
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Nice use of the painting and the description conveys the feeling of the male dancer. Clearly, he is love with his partner. Excellent rhyming. An outstanding effort with the acrostic facet.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I am thrilled you like my acrostic so much, Harry. It was a joy to write because Renoir's paintings all tell stories. Thank you so much for the high praise and the stellar bonus of stars.
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Yes, I love impressionists painting and your poem capture the Renoir so well. Loved it.
Comment from LaRosa
Renoir's painting of the Dance at Bougival is so visually expressive of all the sweet intimacy you voice in your poem.
La femme demure, suitor captive, in and outside of the real world, as 'friends converse, drink wine." Her 'lips smirk...with coy delight'.
Really nicely expressed.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Renoir's painting of the Dance at Bougival is so visually expressive of all the sweet intimacy you voice in your poem.
La femme demure, suitor captive, in and outside of the real world, as 'friends converse, drink wine." Her 'lips smirk...with coy delight'.
Really nicely expressed.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed my interpretation of "Dance." It was fun to write as Renoir always tells a story in his paintings. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from Oatmeal
Very well written work. This is my favorite style. The theme flowed well all through your poem. The poem rhymed beautifully. The theme was well chosen. Telling things very plain and comprehensible.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Very well written work. This is my favorite style. The theme flowed well all through your poem. The poem rhymed beautifully. The theme was well chosen. Telling things very plain and comprehensible.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Oatmeal, for your very comprehensive review and kind praise.
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You are welcome.
Love you,
Camille
Comment from I.am.Kim
Nice, romantic.. Very well written, a lovely poem. I also like the artwork you chose to go along with it. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. Have a wonderful day!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Nice, romantic.. Very well written, a lovely poem. I also like the artwork you chose to go along with it. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. Have a wonderful day!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Renoir paints such wonderful paintings, and this one just said, "Use me to illustrate your poem." Thanks so much, Kim, for sharing it and your kind praise.
Comment from Pantygynt
An ekphrastic acrostic is that rather drastic?
You stretch the elastic an ic p'raps too far!
Not in the least. I like it.
This is clever. Not normally a lover of acrostics because a lot of writers seem to think the acrostic is all and forget about the poetry bit. You haven't and what is more it tells a story. She loves to dance and flirt. He I fear will soon be hurt.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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An ekphrastic acrostic is that rather drastic?
You stretch the elastic an ic p'raps too far!
Not in the least. I like it.
This is clever. Not normally a lover of acrostics because a lot of writers seem to think the acrostic is all and forget about the poetry bit. You haven't and what is more it tells a story. She loves to dance and flirt. He I fear will soon be hurt.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I truly enjoyed your poetic review, Pantygynt, and am delighted you liked THIS acrostic.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Yeah, baby, let's dance. This is an excellent contest entry. You should do well. It's hard to tell what reviewers want, but I think you're in the running.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Yeah, baby, let's dance. This is an excellent contest entry. You should do well. It's hard to tell what reviewers want, but I think you're in the running.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Thomas, for sharing my poem and your encouraging review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend you painted a very romantic scene in the poem .It is full of emotion and so romantic with beautiful presentation well done my friend regards Jill
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Yes my friend you painted a very romantic scene in the poem .It is full of emotion and so romantic with beautiful presentation well done my friend regards Jill
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed the "dance." Thanks so much for sharing, Jill, and your kind praise.
Comment from nuthead
I love this poem, its interesting form, as well and the delightful, romantic topic.
The visual you painted with these lines is stunning. I can visualize it clearly:
flaring skirt / As white as pristine Swiss Alps snow
Wonderful.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I love this poem, its interesting form, as well and the delightful, romantic topic.
The visual you painted with these lines is stunning. I can visualize it clearly:
flaring skirt / As white as pristine Swiss Alps snow
Wonderful.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much, Shirley, for the wonderful praise of "Shall We Dance?"
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Here is the feeling and emotion of dancing and happiness, love and romance in manifestation, a real sense and sentiment exposed and expressed the stand of enjoyment; I liked and enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Here is the feeling and emotion of dancing and happiness, love and romance in manifestation, a real sense and sentiment exposed and expressed the stand of enjoyment; I liked and enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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I am thrilled you sensed that gaiety of both dancing and romance I was trying to convey. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise.
