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Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with the contest prompt. Your syllables are correct in each line. Your poem makes a strong statement, too.
suggestions:
space after comma before the word the
not sure about 'the mute town's sighs [does the town own the sighs & how can mute sound--without the apostrophe, I can see how it would work--maybe a dash after sighs like this sighs-- ]
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
By sighs I meant the radiations -even now it is potentially dangerous.
Town's sighs-sighs coming out from the town.Thank you very much for reading and suggesting.the syllable counts restricts our freedom of expression.
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