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A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets

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Comment from l.raven
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HI Gypsy, you can almost her the crickets playing there violins...
I love your beautiful poem sweet girl...and I stunning picture...
so very nicely written...love to ya you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
    Thank you, honey. How are you feeling? Thank you for reading. luv ya.
    gypsy
reply by l.raven on 30-Apr-2017
    Hi Gypsy...feeling much better...thank you...and I hope you are getting settled in...God Bless...and you are so welcome...xxoo love
Comment from Joan E.
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I admired the way you appealed to our senses of sight and sound, plus embedded your haiku in the artwork. I was transported to Northern California. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
    I will tell you a secret, the artwork is not embedded. The background color makes it look that way. I'm glad you like it. :)

    Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.

    Gypsy
reply by Joan E. on 29-Apr-2017
    The result is quite effective. More smiles- Joan
Comment from Ulla
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Hola Guapa, this is a wonderful haiku.I love it. Beautiful imagery as only a haiku can paint in such few words. I love it. I'm so looking forward to the book to which I'm contributed a few haiku. Un besito de tu amiga Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
    Gracias guapa :) besitos y abrazos
    Gypsy
Comment from judiverse
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Lovely presentation. I love the gold on black. There's a sense of being alone in this, with the hazy moon and the crickets chirping. This gives a nice, serene picture, and I remember hearing the crickets chirping when I was a child living on the farm. judi

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    I live alone so if you get that feeling you are on the right track :) Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)

    Gypsy hugs
reply by judiverse on 26-Apr-2017
    You're very welcome. May the writing force be with you. judi
Comment from robyn corum
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Gypsy,

Very well done. I like the way you've explained the situation we find ourselves in. So amazing to think that we are done! *smile* It will be nice to hold the book in our hands at last, after all the hard work! Thanks!

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from padumachitta
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Hey Ya..I enjoyed this and have no wonderous other comments:-) I have been and am still sick, been three months now...but had a little more energy today and thought I would drop by and check up on some of my 'pen friends'...padumachitta

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    I hope you feel better soon, padumachitta. Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark Schardine
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You cause us to look into the distance, then hear crickets which we cannot see. It takes time for the mind to conjures up this scene.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Thank you for reviewing my poem, my friend, you are very kind.
    Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi Gypsy ,
So hazy moon in Japan means Spring

I have seen a real hazy moon,
But still wasting for the crickets to chirp

See you when you come back.
Gert

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Thank you for reviewing my poem, my friend, you are very kind.
    Gypsy
Comment from bookishfabler
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First of all you are correct, for some reason your posts are all off kilter on the old Fanstory. I just read this in the New Fanstory and everything is fine, but I still like the old version.
Your Haiku is very tranquil and serene. Very well done
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Thank you for reviewing my poem, my friend, you are very kind.
    Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
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Gyspy, this is a beautiful and evocative haiku. I like how you made it specific to a place, Mount Diablo. Japanese haiku is known to be specific to places like specific rivers and mountains. Since I live in Contra Costa County over which Mount Diablo rises, I can both see, hear, and imagine your haiku. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Thank you for reviewing my poem, my friend, you are very kind.
    Gypsy