What He Would Be Like
found the start of this poem from years ago 10-7-4-6-6-105 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hey Lori(((((((((((((... reads this some time ago, but unfortunately never had the opportunity to review it... yep, been a tad shabby of late... just waiting for the plateau to regain my footing...you know, give me a bit of a breather.
Love the shot of the bald eagle... and I thought it was going to refer to you matching to someone... well, let just call him smooth... but no, your order would be a 'Man' with dark hair, a bit long and tanned skin... a cute smile with a slight dimple... sexy square jaw... eyes of the bluest shade... always hold a twinkle... and of course that six foot tall tag to compliment your five-one... that in itself sounded sexy.
Now you didn't mention the inclusions of tattoos... cause I think you may have ordered up a man cut of my design.
I so hope and wish that there is this specially designed someone for you just waiting to come into your existence... that would make my heart sing knowing my friend had that kind of comfort and companionship in her life... and I guess with all the physical attributes I'd throw in a side order of kind, loving with a truck load of compassion and integrity... someone who could wrap you up in the strength of love that would give a radiant hue to your life... yeah, I'm calling in a few favours with the big fellow to see if we can make this happen... enjoyed reading the positive in this... but also I found it a tad sad thinking of you alone.
With our thoughts we create,
our destiny.
James vx's.
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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Hey Lori(((((((((((((... reads this some time ago, but unfortunately never had the opportunity to review it... yep, been a tad shabby of late... just waiting for the plateau to regain my footing...you know, give me a bit of a breather.
Love the shot of the bald eagle... and I thought it was going to refer to you matching to someone... well, let just call him smooth... but no, your order would be a 'Man' with dark hair, a bit long and tanned skin... a cute smile with a slight dimple... sexy square jaw... eyes of the bluest shade... always hold a twinkle... and of course that six foot tall tag to compliment your five-one... that in itself sounded sexy.
Now you didn't mention the inclusions of tattoos... cause I think you may have ordered up a man cut of my design.
I so hope and wish that there is this specially designed someone for you just waiting to come into your existence... that would make my heart sing knowing my friend had that kind of comfort and companionship in her life... and I guess with all the physical attributes I'd throw in a side order of kind, loving with a truck load of compassion and integrity... someone who could wrap you up in the strength of love that would give a radiant hue to your life... yeah, I'm calling in a few favours with the big fellow to see if we can make this happen... enjoyed reading the positive in this... but also I found it a tad sad thinking of you alone.
With our thoughts we create,
our destiny.
James vx's.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-May-2017
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JJJ
I'm glad it took you till now to review cause you seem to pop up when I need a good feeling coming across the way. Great timing you have there
Bro. As for the tattoos, well I have a few, not so large but they are there and there and there, there, there, there and there. oh and there forgot about the one I got in England. got one in Norway too last year on my trip over to my daughters wedding. Have 3 around my ankle to make up somewhat of a scene, but still not finished as far as I would like but I'm so sensitive now, it's like the nerves are just under the skin to the touch never mind a needle going in and out. Next one I definitely am downing a few t 3's and getting that spray that numbs the skin, use the whole damn bottle if need be.
Crazy about the stats on the guy eh? written many years ago but never finished it till now. well somewhat finished it, could have gone along way with it but chose not too. too depressing. lol
I'm almost ready to try sending photos of home, minus a shot of livingroom and 2nd bedroom and garage. too overwhelmed to notice what I was taking pics of and what I was not of
trying to dig up a lot of my plants to take with me, and boy, my back is hooped. can hardly did up one hard one without shuffling back to couch with ice pack. so damn frustrating not being able to do this shit. so that's where I'm headed right now, to try and finish this deep rooted bush, blooms yellow flowers, that I started mid afternoon. and it's now almost 11pm. love the late gardening by corner apartment halogen lite. lol
lulube thxs for the uplifting review.
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Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Lulube. I really like this form. Did you develop it? I would like to try one. Get back to me on that so I can give you credit if I write one. Content is excellent. Like the rhyme pattern. We all have dreams and as years go by, have we achieved them? Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Lulube. I really like this form. Did you develop it? I would like to try one. Get back to me on that so I can give you credit if I write one. Content is excellent. Like the rhyme pattern. We all have dreams and as years go by, have we achieved them? Marilyn
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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yes I made the style up, I seem to do that a lot I'm not a very good follow the sonnet, kinda girl., In fact my favorite style to use is free style/verse. thxs for your lovely comments in your review.
lulube
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I have named it, "Lulube's form" so when I write one I will state that. Marilyn
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How sweet of you and now I can say I have a poem style in the poetry world of fanstory. and where do you live? I'm outside of Vancouver BC Canada
lulube thank you
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Hi Lulube. I am in central Wisconsin. Once the 30 day challenge is over (April 30th) I'll be experimenting with some of forms I like. Marilyn
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Lulube - hope it does come your way in the near future - you never know!!!! I loved your poem. The dreams of a young girl. We all had them. Crushes oer the ideal man - happy days. Well, I found mine and life goes on. Good Luck to you - Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Lulube - hope it does come your way in the near future - you never know!!!! I loved your poem. The dreams of a young girl. We all had them. Crushes oer the ideal man - happy days. Well, I found mine and life goes on. Good Luck to you - Dorothy xx
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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rub rub eh Dorothy? that's w3hy you write such heartfelt romantic poems
you never know, is right!
thxs for your review.
lulube
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'What He Would Be Like' is a GREAT poem.
I love this!
The wording is strong.
It's profound.
Very Good description of a future husband.
Nice artwork: The image shown supports this poem.
My favorite line: 'One never knows if love will come someday'- I totally agree.
Thanks for sharing your ideal mate poem.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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'What He Would Be Like' is a GREAT poem.
I love this!
The wording is strong.
It's profound.
Very Good description of a future husband.
Nice artwork: The image shown supports this poem.
My favorite line: 'One never knows if love will come someday'- I totally agree.
Thanks for sharing your ideal mate poem.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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thxs so much for your great enthusiastic comments. Glad you liked this. Wasn't sure how to end this being that it was a lost start of a poem, years ago.
lulube
Comment from country ranch writer
Grandpa used to say love comes when you least expect it. Things happen for a reason he'd always preach. He was like the wise old owl he was never wrong.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Grandpa used to say love comes when you least expect it. Things happen for a reason he'd always preach. He was like the wise old owl he was never wrong.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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and my mom has said those words too. I probably say it to Tamara. lol
thxs for your comments. I have not yet got into reviewing but soon. These stupid boxes keep calling me to fill. lol
lulube
