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Comment from Asem.inspirations
I like the thoughts. The poem is strong and the finish is even stronger.
"The places that I left behind
On my journeys to the places
I am now,
The last place that I would look for you,
The first thing that comes to mind
When you say this
Could be anyplace.
This give me a deep feeling of leaving the past behind but that person is someone who could not be -- just left there in those yesterdays, maybe even too special to forget and there is that wish to see them again -- anywhere.
Sometimes I say to my fellow Poets, I might not get exactly what you may want me to get because sometimes I let my mind take me to what I want your piece to mean to me. Either way it is a beautiful piece, beautiful poem.
You usually get me. You get my poetry and I love the way you describe my poems in your reviews. I don't want to let you down in my description of yours but I will always be honest and I will always be a loyal fan...
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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I like the thoughts. The poem is strong and the finish is even stronger.
"The places that I left behind
On my journeys to the places
I am now,
The last place that I would look for you,
The first thing that comes to mind
When you say this
Could be anyplace.
This give me a deep feeling of leaving the past behind but that person is someone who could not be -- just left there in those yesterdays, maybe even too special to forget and there is that wish to see them again -- anywhere.
Sometimes I say to my fellow Poets, I might not get exactly what you may want me to get because sometimes I let my mind take me to what I want your piece to mean to me. Either way it is a beautiful piece, beautiful poem.
You usually get me. You get my poetry and I love the way you describe my poems in your reviews. I don't want to let you down in my description of yours but I will always be honest and I will always be a loyal fan...
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the great review and for your support of the poem. Place is another big part of life, and I tried to build this poem around the word 'place' and let it take you to all kinds of places and emotions while in those places, and finding people there too. Glad you enjoyed it so much estory
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You have many other poems I started to read last night at work. They are extraordinary. I will complete my readings later on at work tonight an put in my other reviews.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'Anyplace' is a good poem.
My favorite line: 'The many places in the corners of my mind'
The author's notes are appreciated.- Thank you!
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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'Anyplace' is a good poem.
My favorite line: 'The many places in the corners of my mind'
The author's notes are appreciated.- Thank you!
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the great review and for enjoying the poem. This poem can take you anyplace. and noplace. it's all in your mind. the construction is kind of open ended, and the style very obtuse, so that the reader can be anywhere they want. estory
Comment from Gert sherwood
You know estoty
I like the way you used the word 'place':of
HOW one can design and create, and build the most wonderful place in the world. And how it takes people to make the dream or reality.
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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You know estoty
I like the way you used the word 'place':of
HOW one can design and create, and build the most wonderful place in the world. And how it takes people to make the dream or reality.
Gert
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and for enjoying this minimalist free verse piece. That word 'place' can take you anyplace. If you want to go. estory
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You are welcome estory
Grty
Comment from tfawcus
So many philosophical poems concentrate on time, and it is interesting to read one that explores the concept of place. We do, after all, move through our lives one place at a time, whether that be in our head or in terms of physical position. Many are the times when the place we hold in our heads is not the same pace as the one we actually find ourselves in - the difference between dreams and reality! This is, I think, one of the defining aspects of humanity - that we are able to transport ourselves elsewhere by the use of imagination. A most interesting poem and one that I much enjoyed!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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So many philosophical poems concentrate on time, and it is interesting to read one that explores the concept of place. We do, after all, move through our lives one place at a time, whether that be in our head or in terms of physical position. Many are the times when the place we hold in our heads is not the same pace as the one we actually find ourselves in - the difference between dreams and reality! This is, I think, one of the defining aspects of humanity - that we are able to transport ourselves elsewhere by the use of imagination. A most interesting poem and one that I much enjoyed!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and for your interesting comments. I am glad that this open ended minimalist piece was able to take you to so many places, to get you to think about the many kinds of places that exist in our souls and minds, and the differences between the two. estory
Comment from Dean Kuch
'The repetitions of the word 'place' create a sense of music in the language. It is also quite surreal, dream-like, creating a place in between places, a hope, a memory, an ambition of place...' This poem...musical, estory?
It didn't read very lyrically or musically to me.
Mater-of-fact, perhaps, but definitely not musical.
Of course, that's merely my opinion, and we ALL know what they say about opinions, do we not?
One thing this poem is.
It's intriguing, thought provoking, and interesting, and that's more than I can say for some.
Thanks for sharing, enjoy your weekend.
~Dean
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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'The repetitions of the word 'place' create a sense of music in the language. It is also quite surreal, dream-like, creating a place in between places, a hope, a memory, an ambition of place...' This poem...musical, estory?
It didn't read very lyrically or musically to me.
Mater-of-fact, perhaps, but definitely not musical.
Of course, that's merely my opinion, and we ALL know what they say about opinions, do we not?
One thing this poem is.
It's intriguing, thought provoking, and interesting, and that's more than I can say for some.
Thanks for sharing, enjoy your weekend.
~Dean
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review and for your interesting comments. Music I guess is a matter of opinion. Repetitions of sound, repetitions of patterns, these are the building blocks of minimalism, in the art of Orozco, Frank Stella, Piet Mondrien, and the music of Steve Reich and Phil Glass, Brian Eno and Robert Fripp. These have been some of my most important influences. This is not lyrical poetry, but a music, sometimes a mechanical music, That comes from repititions of patterns. But I am glad the poem got you thinking of places, what they mean, what they meant, where they are and where they are not. estory
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You bet.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this lovely free verse that speaks to the places we've been, the places we will go, and the place we stand in now. Your words move with a nice rhythm and rhyme and do indeed create a place between places,
~patty~
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you for sharing this lovely free verse that speaks to the places we've been, the places we will go, and the place we stand in now. Your words move with a nice rhythm and rhyme and do indeed create a place between places,
~patty~
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review and for your enjoying this poem, and letting it take you to so many places. Glad you found the music in it, it is a different kind of making music in language. estory
Comment from loismddavis
a well written piece of free verse which you have explained in a very long description. I like free verse best of any genre of poetry and though your poem
could not be faulted for technique I did not find it very interesting
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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a well written piece of free verse which you have explained in a very long description. I like free verse best of any genre of poetry and though your poem
could not be faulted for technique I did not find it very interesting
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review and for giving it a vote for technique and construction. it is meant to be a piece about place and time, memory and hope, and being inbetween places and times. estory
Comment from kahpot
An excellent read and after reading your notes we can put this poem in a picture, all the places we will, want and have been very well done thanks for sharing****kahpot
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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An excellent read and after reading your notes we can put this poem in a picture, all the places we will, want and have been very well done thanks for sharing****kahpot
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review and for your support of this minimalist free verse piece. It is a very different concept of making music in language, and in subject. it is meant to be obtuse enough to be anyplace, and noplace, in between places, on the way, and passed them. It is about memory and hope story it is
Comment from emptypage
I love the repetition. Though it works best in poetry, I often use it in prose with surprisingly good effect. Your repetition is well-placed, well-spaced, and makes its point.
I wish I could learn to do that.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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I love the repetition. Though it works best in poetry, I often use it in prose with surprisingly good effect. Your repetition is well-placed, well-spaced, and makes its point.
I wish I could learn to do that.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and for your support of this piece. I have read some very interesting minimalist prose pieces, built around repetitions. I think its easy enough to do in poetry, just start with a word or a phrase and repeat the patterns, vary the patterns, up the tempo, and slow it down. There are some other examples in my portfolio, if you want to check them out: Stars, Garble, Waiting, R Train, and then there are other poets, like Jack Anderson, who wrote some amazing minimalist prose poetry, Magnets, The Mysterious Sound, Scenario For a Long Movie, and The Peace of the Evening, come to mind. estory
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Haha, I'll look at more, but you haven't seen my "poetry." I'm much better with prose. Re: the review, you are very welcome. Feel free to nominate me for reviewer of the month!
