Grammy's Memoirs 2018
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Accidental baby"Bits and pieces of my life for my grandchildren
46 total reviews
Comment from LisaD123
This is deeply emotional and heart-wrenching chapter and the reader can fully empathise with the situation presented and the painful complexities of family life. The writing is well-constructed, leaving the reader the space to feel his/her own emotions. Thanks for sharing such a deeply personal and heart-wrenching piece.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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This is deeply emotional and heart-wrenching chapter and the reader can fully empathise with the situation presented and the painful complexities of family life. The writing is well-constructed, leaving the reader the space to feel his/her own emotions. Thanks for sharing such a deeply personal and heart-wrenching piece.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read this piece. This chapter was difficult to write because I don't think I ever laid it all out in black and white. I appreciate your warm review and encouraging words. I hope you will follow along with the rest of the book,
~patty~
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a sad and emotional story to read Patty but even harder for you to re live and write. Though you were smiling in this photo it doesn't sound like there were too many occasions for your smiles in your young life. Thanks for sharing,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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This is a sad and emotional story to read Patty but even harder for you to re live and write. Though you were smiling in this photo it doesn't sound like there were too many occasions for your smiles in your young life. Thanks for sharing,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Hi valda; thank you so much for reading and for your kind and encouraging words. I look back at those times in my life and realize how far I've come. I think reading really did save me, as it took me to completely different placed,
~patty~
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written my friend and a very sad piece of writing they say things happen for a reason sometimes just to make us a little stronger but it still doesn't change the fact they happened and how it affected your life some people find it hard to move forward and even contemplate bad things I admire you for sharing and having the strength to move on regards Jill
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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This is well written my friend and a very sad piece of writing they say things happen for a reason sometimes just to make us a little stronger but it still doesn't change the fact they happened and how it affected your life some people find it hard to move forward and even contemplate bad things I admire you for sharing and having the strength to move on regards Jill
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Hi Jill; this was one of the hardest things I've ever written. I've dealt with these things in therapy, and I've talked about them, but putting it all down on paper was difficult. Thank you for reading along and for your warm review and good thoughts. I am doing better these days, and it did serve to make me stronger,
~patty~
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Your origins here are strikingly familiar for a lot of the kids I used to look after. My brothers used to hide me in weird places. Fights & arguments sadly were such a reality for so many. I can it's been difficult to write as you don't settle on anything for too long and jump about a bit in this instalment.
I was for all intentions, a happy baby. - maybe insert a comma after was. 'for all intentions' is like an side. Not strictly necessary for the sentence.
Thank goodness, no cars were coming - I would suggest removing the comma as the meaning changes. With the comma makes it feel more in the present.
Despite the lack or reading material - lack of reading...
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Hi there,
Your origins here are strikingly familiar for a lot of the kids I used to look after. My brothers used to hide me in weird places. Fights & arguments sadly were such a reality for so many. I can it's been difficult to write as you don't settle on anything for too long and jump about a bit in this instalment.
I was for all intentions, a happy baby. - maybe insert a comma after was. 'for all intentions' is like an side. Not strictly necessary for the sentence.
Thank goodness, no cars were coming - I would suggest removing the comma as the meaning changes. With the comma makes it feel more in the present.
Despite the lack or reading material - lack of reading...
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Hi GMG; thank you so much for the thoughtful and concise review. I appreciate your suggestions and I will get them into the piece immediately. I appreciate that you could see from the writing how difficult this was to write - it really was.
Thanks again for your help,
~patty~
Comment from Asem.inspirations
"This is my story. I intend to leave these chapters for my grandchildren. They should know about Grammy's life, and the roots of the family. History should never be ignored."
I was captured to your story by the very first words. Yes, history should never be ignored. Some say when Your history is as sad or as bad as ours is, never share it. But I feel as you do. Some go into Therapy, needing someone to talk to about it all but for me, writing is what does it, you know the healing. Cataloging it into to poems, stories and chapters is the best way to share the stories with Grand kids and our children. It is an interesting read and it gives them an understanding that they will need about us.
Your story is sad. I couldn't help feeling so sorry for your childhood. I guess I always forget that everyone has their own story to tell. I came to Fan Story this year in January and I believe this is the first time I came upon an Author's story that is so full of misery. Most of my posts are full of my misery. Sure, there are some sprinkles of happier times of love, religion and family but mostly the bitter and sadness.
This is an excellent story. You, of course have written it well. I would be interested in actually reading the rest of this story if it becomes a completed book.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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"This is my story. I intend to leave these chapters for my grandchildren. They should know about Grammy's life, and the roots of the family. History should never be ignored."
I was captured to your story by the very first words. Yes, history should never be ignored. Some say when Your history is as sad or as bad as ours is, never share it. But I feel as you do. Some go into Therapy, needing someone to talk to about it all but for me, writing is what does it, you know the healing. Cataloging it into to poems, stories and chapters is the best way to share the stories with Grand kids and our children. It is an interesting read and it gives them an understanding that they will need about us.
Your story is sad. I couldn't help feeling so sorry for your childhood. I guess I always forget that everyone has their own story to tell. I came to Fan Story this year in January and I believe this is the first time I came upon an Author's story that is so full of misery. Most of my posts are full of my misery. Sure, there are some sprinkles of happier times of love, religion and family but mostly the bitter and sadness.
This is an excellent story. You, of course have written it well. I would be interested in actually reading the rest of this story if it becomes a completed book.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for your warm review. This was probably the most difficult thing I've written. Of course, I have more chapters coming up in this novella that may prove to be even more daunting. I hope you will follow along,
~patty~
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Oh yes, Mustangpatty. I can't wait to read the rest of this novella. I am very interested. You are an excellent writer.
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thank you so much! ~p~
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'Accidental Baby' is a fantastic chapter.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Free of grammatical errors! (As far as I can tell)
I enjoyed reading it.
Beautiful artwork: The image shown fits perfectly with this story. The baby is adorable.
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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'Accidental Baby' is a fantastic chapter.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Free of grammatical errors! (As far as I can tell)
I enjoyed reading it.
Beautiful artwork: The image shown fits perfectly with this story. The baby is adorable.
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for your warm review. This was probably the most difficult thing I've written. Of course, I have more chapters coming up in this novella that may prove to be even more daunting. I hope you will follow along,
~patty~
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Patty,
You did a great job telling your story of when you were little & how you aged through a life of abuse. I am sorry for your pain. I hope now you are in a safe place & are happy. Your picture is really cute. Please write more. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Patty,
You did a great job telling your story of when you were little & how you aged through a life of abuse. I am sorry for your pain. I hope now you are in a safe place & are happy. Your picture is really cute. Please write more. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for your warm review. This was probably the most difficult thing I've written. Of course, I have more chapters coming up in this novella that may prove to be even more daunting. I hope you will follow along,
~patty~
(the picture is of me, and I AM in a very safe and happy place these days.)
Comment from MelB
Despite the lack or reading material, I started to teach myself to read. - o(f)
I'm so sorry for what you went through. Sadly, abuse keeps going through the generations until someone stops the cycle. I think I held my breath when the carriage went down the hill.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Despite the lack or reading material, I started to teach myself to read. - o(f)
I'm so sorry for what you went through. Sadly, abuse keeps going through the generations until someone stops the cycle. I think I held my breath when the carriage went down the hill.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for your warm review. This was probably the most difficult thing I've written. Of course, I have more chapters coming up in this novella that may prove to be even more daunting. I hope you will follow along,
~patty~
thank you for catching the nit - I will fix that right away
Comment from Hitcher
It sounds like you had things a bit rougher than me friend, I never really saw violence in my home and that should be the norm for all children...should be! I think it's brilliant you are writing this down for your grand kids to read one day, too much family history gets lost, forgotten of brushed under the rug these days. good on ya!!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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It sounds like you had things a bit rougher than me friend, I never really saw violence in my home and that should be the norm for all children...should be! I think it's brilliant you are writing this down for your grand kids to read one day, too much family history gets lost, forgotten of brushed under the rug these days. good on ya!!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for your warm review. This was probably the most difficult thing I've written. Of course, I have more chapters coming up in this novella that may prove to be even more daunting. I hope you will follow along,
~patty~
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good story you have penned about your life. That made me sad to read it. It made me think of my home life as a child. My dad abused me, but my mother loved so. It was a strange life at times. Great wording and picture. I love the baby picture. Beautiful baby with great smile! love, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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This is a very good story you have penned about your life. That made me sad to read it. It made me think of my home life as a child. My dad abused me, but my mother loved so. It was a strange life at times. Great wording and picture. I love the baby picture. Beautiful baby with great smile! love, Teri
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for your thoughtful review. With a great deal of help from loving friends, and the wisdom of a few counselors, I was able to leave the horror of my childhood behind. Thank goodness for books!
~patty~
