Ezekiel's Wheel
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Comment from Oatmeal
Delahay,
Your feelings are expressed well. The flow was very nice. The theme was good. The artwork complemented your poem. There is a problem as I see it. All of the rhyming words are long a sounds. You should throw in some e's or i's. See what you think.
Everything else looks grand. Notify me when or if you have made the changes and I will be back to renew your stars.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Delahay,
Your feelings are expressed well. The flow was very nice. The theme was good. The artwork complemented your poem. There is a problem as I see it. All of the rhyming words are long a sounds. You should throw in some e's or i's. See what you think.
Everything else looks grand. Notify me when or if you have made the changes and I will be back to renew your stars.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your review and suggestions.
Comment from Irish Rain
I absolutely adore that line...'I'd probably just be saved.' Now you know you've reached your limit when you can't even die, ha ha. Love this poem, love the title, fits it well. Blessings....
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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I absolutely adore that line...'I'd probably just be saved.' Now you know you've reached your limit when you can't even die, ha ha. Love this poem, love the title, fits it well. Blessings....
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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.Thank you for your review and your input
D.
Comment from estory
It is told in a tense, frustrated voice, with some great images of that hard pavement and sidewalk, a road to nowhere. It all ends in the grave, with no way out. the rigid construction and tight rhyme scheme and meter lend to that effect estory
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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It is told in a tense, frustrated voice, with some great images of that hard pavement and sidewalk, a road to nowhere. It all ends in the grave, with no way out. the rigid construction and tight rhyme scheme and meter lend to that effect estory
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Not very cheerful I suppose. Thank you for reading and for the review. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
A beautiful piece of work with such good phrases and fine poetry. Every line is a masterpiece but to choose one, this is my favourite, "Life is just a speed bump
Between the cradle and the grave
I wish I had the guts to jump
I'd probably just be saved".
Have a great day. Namaskaram
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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A beautiful piece of work with such good phrases and fine poetry. Every line is a masterpiece but to choose one, this is my favourite, "Life is just a speed bump
Between the cradle and the grave
I wish I had the guts to jump
I'd probably just be saved".
Have a great day. Namaskaram
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading my poem and taking the time to review it. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Lost souls can always find their way back to Him if they pray. He reaches out to the broken and gives them hope. We only need to listen, and take the opportunities that come from out of nowhere. Your poem moves with a nice rhyme and rhythm,
~patty~
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Lost souls can always find their way back to Him if they pray. He reaches out to the broken and gives them hope. We only need to listen, and take the opportunities that come from out of nowhere. Your poem moves with a nice rhyme and rhythm,
~patty~
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and input.
D,
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Ezekiel described his vision of a wheel within a wheel in the Bible. There are some who believe he speaking about a flying saucer. Interesting.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Ezekiel described his vision of a wheel within a wheel in the Bible. There are some who believe he speaking about a flying saucer. Interesting.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and input. D.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write and we are all heading in on directed, but that speed bump has certainly been fun hasn't it? I read your poem twice and it certainly made me think! Love Dolly s
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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A poignant write and we are all heading in on directed, but that speed bump has certainly been fun hasn't it? I read your poem twice and it certainly made me think! Love Dolly s
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and input. D.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem to show our vulnerability to life, we can go wrong quickly and often there is no point of return. The only way is to ask for help and forgiveness to get us back on track.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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A very well-written poem to show our vulnerability to life, we can go wrong quickly and often there is no point of return. The only way is to ask for help and forgiveness to get us back on track.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and input. D.
Comment from royowen
Sometimes it feels a little like that, and it is to a degree, but I also know God has a desire for closeness, beyond our comprehension, and even though He knows us intimately, our guilt and humanity makes us hide, paradoxically we can't! Well done beautifully composed, getting into the mind of its author, nicely rhythmic and smoothly and articulately rhymed in abab in iambic tetrameter quatrains, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Sometimes it feels a little like that, and it is to a degree, but I also know God has a desire for closeness, beyond our comprehension, and even though He knows us intimately, our guilt and humanity makes us hide, paradoxically we can't! Well done beautifully composed, getting into the mind of its author, nicely rhythmic and smoothly and articulately rhymed in abab in iambic tetrameter quatrains, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and input. D.
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Most welcome
Comment from emptypage
Oh, wow. This poem, well-crafted, is certainly very relatable. Unfortunately.
I understand every emotion portrayed there. I still have no words.
Your poem made me feel less alone, though.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Oh, wow. This poem, well-crafted, is certainly very relatable. Unfortunately.
I understand every emotion portrayed there. I still have no words.
Your poem made me feel less alone, though.
Nice job.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and input. D.
