Family Poems and Stories 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Mother's Day"...musings on us
77 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
I know .Even before i read your notes I sensed the duality in feelings .i can easily relate to it for I too have the same kind of mixed feelings about my mother whom I am looking after now. but I have come to the conclusion that many such mothers were not great because they were unhappy or just weak.
i liked this verse very much .it is a very good tribute to motherhood. and i liked the line "their hearts have a dimple...
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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I know .Even before i read your notes I sensed the duality in feelings .i can easily relate to it for I too have the same kind of mixed feelings about my mother whom I am looking after now. but I have come to the conclusion that many such mothers were not great because they were unhappy or just weak.
i liked this verse very much .it is a very good tribute to motherhood. and i liked the line "their hearts have a dimple...
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments - the duality of loving your mother isn't always easy to accept. I'm glad you liked that line - I loved the turn of phrase,
~patty~
Comment from emptypage
I definitely can relate to the mixed feelings. I mostly had bad ones with my mother, except for the last year before she died. By then she had lost her mind and couldn't remember she hated me...so???
Good work on matching the requirements asked of the form.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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I definitely can relate to the mixed feelings. I mostly had bad ones with my mother, except for the last year before she died. By then she had lost her mind and couldn't remember she hated me...so???
Good work on matching the requirements asked of the form.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Hi Marla; I had you and a few others here on FanStory when I wrote this. I have learned a great deal about others as I've posted stories about my childhood - I'm sure you have, too. The subject of mothers seems to resonate with a lot of us. Thank you for your time to read and review - I appreciate it,
~patty~
Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
Yes, not everyone has a perfect relationship with their mothers, a few may even have received little love as they grew. I grew up having mixed feelings about my mother, but today I think I understand her more. I am not very attached to people, and I don't think I can say there unconditional love between us, even though she likes to say there is.
Your poem has a good flow and rhyming. The message comes across.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Hi,
Yes, not everyone has a perfect relationship with their mothers, a few may even have received little love as they grew. I grew up having mixed feelings about my mother, but today I think I understand her more. I am not very attached to people, and I don't think I can say there unconditional love between us, even though she likes to say there is.
Your poem has a good flow and rhyming. The message comes across.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review of this poem. It was a challenging poetic form and a therapeutic write,
~patty~
Comment from Janilou
Your feelings being conflicted came through strongly in the words to the poem. As a mother of five children, I know I have made some mistakes I dearly wish I could go back and change, but I am lucky that I have a good relationship with all of my adult children. Some mothers do not ever deserve to receive their children's unconditional love, but I do believe it leaves an emptiness inside any child who does not receive that unconditional love from their mother or their father.
A thought-provliking piece. I didn't find anything to correct.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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Your feelings being conflicted came through strongly in the words to the poem. As a mother of five children, I know I have made some mistakes I dearly wish I could go back and change, but I am lucky that I have a good relationship with all of my adult children. Some mothers do not ever deserve to receive their children's unconditional love, but I do believe it leaves an emptiness inside any child who does not receive that unconditional love from their mother or their father.
A thought-provliking piece. I didn't find anything to correct.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review of this poem. It was a challenging poetic form and a therapeutic write,
~patty~
Comment from RobertaLee
It is a rather sad thought that introduces ambivalence about the one who chose to birth us instead of not; and certainly hard on the heart. Aside from another unusual form the sorrow you feel does come through. You challenge yourself in many ways and I thank you for introducing such a variety of forms.
Smiles and blessings.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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It is a rather sad thought that introduces ambivalence about the one who chose to birth us instead of not; and certainly hard on the heart. Aside from another unusual form the sorrow you feel does come through. You challenge yourself in many ways and I thank you for introducing such a variety of forms.
Smiles and blessings.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for continuing to read the poems I posted this week. With each new poetic form comes a thought I want to express. Mother's Day is better for me now - I celebrate my motherhood and that of my daughter. My mom passed away almost twenty years ago, and while I forgive the tragic mistakes she made, I can't forget,
~patty~
Comment from rspoet
You've done the Memento form quite well
in syllables and rhymes
Everyone has different experiences and relationships with parents
as you indicate in the author notes
Sometimes there are things, unknown to us, that influence behavior
An excellent poem and photograph
That's quite a group of birch logs
with Christmas candles in the background
I used the make those as a kid
Nicely done
RS
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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You've done the Memento form quite well
in syllables and rhymes
Everyone has different experiences and relationships with parents
as you indicate in the author notes
Sometimes there are things, unknown to us, that influence behavior
An excellent poem and photograph
That's quite a group of birch logs
with Christmas candles in the background
I used the make those as a kid
Nicely done
RS
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. This poetic form was a challenge, but the duality of the material itself was the tricky part,
~patty~
Comment from RGstar
I think here we have a different Mother's day, yet, the importance is as meant, and always glad to see one honoring the mothers.
I have never seen this form, so good to keep learning.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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I think here we have a different Mother's day, yet, the importance is as meant, and always glad to see one honoring the mothers.
I have never seen this form, so good to keep learning.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Hi again, yes this was yet another form I picked up. I also have a book of standard poetic forms from the masters, and I will be starting to work with them soon. Thank you for your continued support,
~patty~
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Remember, it is not the form itself that will increase your skill if no challenge to write them, it is the practice of mind with the different variations, the building of words, most importantly expression of your theme.
Good the excersise, and always worth trying new forms, for it gives flexibility.
Good luck.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment from ronnie k
Mothers Day, I enjoyed and I am given that needed reminder that a mothers love is a gift that needs to be return, daily, often and always ".....next door are above" Happy Mothers Day"
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Mothers Day, I enjoyed and I am given that needed reminder that a mothers love is a gift that needs to be return, daily, often and always ".....next door are above" Happy Mothers Day"
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you for your encouraging review of this Memento poem. It was a tough write, but I'm glad I was able to pull it all together,
~patty~
Comment from kathleenspalding
OOOooo. Yes, very cutting edge and so true. No one is all treacle, LOL! And a lot, unfortunately, are zero treacle. (My favorite healing phrase - We are all in a state of becoming. That gives us and the offenders a chance to grow and change.) This Memento poem is well written and flows well. Great job!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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OOOooo. Yes, very cutting edge and so true. No one is all treacle, LOL! And a lot, unfortunately, are zero treacle. (My favorite healing phrase - We are all in a state of becoming. That gives us and the offenders a chance to grow and change.) This Memento poem is well written and flows well. Great job!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you for your encouraging review of this Memento poem. It was a tough write, but I'm glad I was able to pull it all together,
~patty~
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You're welcome, and congratulations, you made it look easy!
Comment from jusylee72
Love with dimples was a quite a descriptor when talking about mothers who weren't quite perfect. I liked that. While it isn't your everyday Mother's day poem I found your truthful words interesting.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Love with dimples was a quite a descriptor when talking about mothers who weren't quite perfect. I liked that. While it isn't your everyday Mother's day poem I found your truthful words interesting.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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thank you for your encouraging review of this Memento poem. It was a tough write, but I'm glad I was able to pull it all together,
~patty~
