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Fell down a crevice
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Comment from
RodG
You quickly introduce the protagonist, an injured skier, and present him with a problem: who or what can come to his aid OUT HERE? One small error, a shift in verb tense. "Pushed" should be "push." I especially like your use of interior monologue (his thoughts) to emphasize his state of affairs.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
Thanks for the read and the catch of the error.
Comment from
giraffmang
Hi there,
Nice to go a different way in a competition. I noticed that almost everyone else so far appeared to have taken their cue from the picture rather than the opening line.
Nicely rooted in a real scenario.
Best of luck to you.
GMG
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
Thanks for the read and the comment.
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