Bye
Leaving, going, gone.37 total reviews
Comment from SeanFox16
So simple yet so beautiful. Saying goodbye is always so difficult to do. The artwork is perfect for this too. I remember when I was a child I hated saying goodbye to anyone, especially when we had family round to visit. I wished the days would never end, but unfortunately they always did.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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So simple yet so beautiful. Saying goodbye is always so difficult to do. The artwork is perfect for this too. I remember when I was a child I hated saying goodbye to anyone, especially when we had family round to visit. I wished the days would never end, but unfortunately they always did.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and then taking the time to review and your kind comments.
Comment from Janet Foor
Perfect picture for your 1-6-1 poem.
Why?
I am going to cry.
Bye!
explained beautiful in:
Leaving, going, gone.
Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Perfect picture for your 1-6-1 poem.
Why?
I am going to cry.
Bye!
explained beautiful in:
Leaving, going, gone.
Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and then taking the time to review and your kind comments. And of course your good wishes.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Good symmetry, nice rhymes, natural flow of thoughts and related visual imagery; I liked the speed, movement, ups and downs, feelings and enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Good symmetry, nice rhymes, natural flow of thoughts and related visual imagery; I liked the speed, movement, ups and downs, feelings and enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
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Comment from Pantygynt
Yes indeed, the one on the right certainly looks as though she is about to burst into tears. The one-six-one format is an interesting rhyming exercise, and one that, because it is required to be so brief, must be difficult to work into a poem that says something worth while. Well done here.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Yes indeed, the one on the right certainly looks as though she is about to burst into tears. The one-six-one format is an interesting rhyming exercise, and one that, because it is required to be so brief, must be difficult to work into a poem that says something worth while. Well done here.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
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Comment from tfawcus
Powerful use of punctuation here to enhance the meaning. These refugee children must indeed be asking why, as they are whisked away from their homes. Their tears of separation are heart-breaking.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Powerful use of punctuation here to enhance the meaning. These refugee children must indeed be asking why, as they are whisked away from their homes. Their tears of separation are heart-breaking.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well constructed poem that captures its theme uniquely.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
All I can say is "See ya!"
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Well constructed poem that captures its theme uniquely.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
All I can say is "See ya!"
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and then taking the time to review, I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from sunnilicious
Daddy must have gone to work. That could be a heart-wrenching tragedy to children. Why can't they at least get out for the ice cream truck. Good photo for added irony. Good work.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Daddy must have gone to work. That could be a heart-wrenching tragedy to children. Why can't they at least get out for the ice cream truck. Good photo for added irony. Good work.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
You have the correct amount of syllables and the presentation is nice. Good luck in the contest. I think you have a good chance of winning.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Hello,
You have the correct amount of syllables and the presentation is nice. Good luck in the contest. I think you have a good chance of winning.
Gypsy
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and then taking the time to review, I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from mbagby23
The syllable count is correct. When I look at the picture I wonder where could they be going. Maybe to a better home o a new family. Saying goodbye to what they once knew. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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The syllable count is correct. When I look at the picture I wonder where could they be going. Maybe to a better home o a new family. Saying goodbye to what they once knew. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
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Comment from l.raven
this can be sad....kids hate saying good bye to the ones they love...but sometimes you have to leave...only to return...very well written...and the perfect picture...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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this can be sad....kids hate saying good bye to the ones they love...but sometimes you have to leave...only to return...very well written...and the perfect picture...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review. I appreciate your kind thoughts.
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you are so very welcome...xxoo love
