Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

Very cute haiku flows well and tells a story using very few words. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Thank you for writing and sharing. Good job!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I always appreciate your time and continuous support of my work. I am pleased you enjoyed this piece.

Hope you have a great day,
~patty~😀

reply by kathleenspalding on 17-Apr-2017

You're welcome and thanks, hope you have a good day, too.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Puppies and a rubble ball goes hand in hand. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I always appreciate your time and continuous support of my work. I am pleased you enjoyed this piece.

Hope you have a great day,
~patty~😀

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, my friend,

You are correct, haiku is about human nature too but for traditional haiku must use a seasonal word. Seasonal words are divided into seven sections: the heavens, the seasons, humanities, plants, animals, and observances. Your haiku is about animals and the season is spring. Contemporary haiku doesn't need a kigo.

The way I understand it, all traditional haiku need a kigo but there are hundreds of kigo words to chose from. When you have a human haiku without a kigo then it is a senryu.

I think what you are doing is fabulous. Good luck, honey.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I always appreciate your time and continuous support of my work. I am pleased you enjoyed this piece.

Hope you have a great day,
~patty~😀

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

the ball is in play
four little black eyes twinkle
it bounces, they run

This is a delightful haiku. Puppies are such fun and this was fun to read.

Well done.
blessings
janet

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Janet; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and bright shiny stars,
~patty~

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Patty: what fun! You get to interact with your pups and bond with the ball!
I like the eyes and ball, both round. Have fun. Great haiku.
Happy Easter. flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments on this piece. Your words of encouragement mean a great deal to me,
~patty~😀

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

I think it's an adorable Haiku. I believe it's about nature, because animals are involved, right?
I knew right away who the four little black eyes belonged to. How much fun they must be for you!

Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Rhonda. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your time and bright shiny stars,
~patty~

Comment from Nan Beeson

Excellent

Dear Patty....

I loved your poem about the ball and puppy madness on this Resurrection/Passover Sunday.

Your authors notes were quite an asset to the poem and helped me better understand it.... Thank you for sharing it....Nan:))



the ball is in play
four little black eyes twinkle
it bounces, they run

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Nan; thank you for reading my bit of puppy play on this Easter Sunday afternoon. I appreciate your time and the lovely stars.
~patty~

reply by Nan Beeson on 16-Apr-2017

You are welcome, Patty... I am so glad ig pleased uoyou.

reply by Nan Beeson on 16-Apr-2017

You are welcome, Patty... I am so glad ig pleased uoyou.

Comment from MelB

Excellent

I never knew there were so many different forms of a Haiku. I'm terrible at them, so I avoid writing them. You did a nice job with this and I assume it's about the pups.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi there; YES - it is about the pups. I hadn't written anything about them for over a week, and they were upset. (Or at least they were acting like it.) I appreciate your time to review the piece and for your encouraging words,
~patty~

reply by MelB on 16-Apr-2017

They do like their attention and time! Lol

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend this is a beautiful haiku you paint the scene so well using this form showing your creativity I enjoyed well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Jill; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. As always, I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~

Comment from briannaellison

Exceptional

Great job fitting so much into such a short poem! The imagery really brings this scene to life - I can see the children playing and laughing. Good job and keep it up!
-Brim

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017

Hi Brim; I appreciate your time to read and review. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the poem enough to give it six shiny stars!
~patty~