Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

I like the fact that this Haiku is different from the norm. This is unusual and cool. I love that it is about your gorgeous pups Howie and Bernie, well done all my love Meia x

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

Hi Meia; I'm glad you enjoyed this little haiku about my boys. It was a fun write!
~patty~

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Given that I have a dog in my lap as I read this, I love and "get" your haiku. It is perfectly fine as it. Don't let anyone discourage you. Yours is playful and inventive. It is also a nice gift for your pups, Howie and Bernie. I have written a lot of haiku about my Chihuahua, and I find yours to be a fitting tribute to your friends who run when the ball bounces. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

Hi Andre; I so appreciate your kind words of encouragement. I admire your work very much, and it makes me proud when you like something I wrote,
~patty~

Comment from Thal1959

Excellent

This is all very well done, Patty regarding the verse, rhymes and meter - at least for that meter that a 5-7-5 can obtain. My only trouble was the pic. I have no idea what kind of sphere that is or what it is made of. It looks like glass, so it is hard to discern it as being able to bounce. But that's just me.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

Hi; the snack ball is made of an acrylic plastic. It really bounces on the carpet. On the hardwood floors, it just makes a lot of noise. I appreciate your time to read and review. Your kind words of encouragement mean a lot to me,
~patty~

reply by Thal1959 on 18-Apr-2017

Thanks for the explanation. Not having any pets puts me at a disadvantage.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for sharing your notes about different haiku subjects. I enjoyed your poem about your pups and the action of the ball plus your use of alliteration. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

Hi Joan; thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind remarks and words of encouragement,
~patty~

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Your author notes only served to make me more mystified regarding the rules of haiku, Patty! I've been on this site for almost five years and I still can't seem to 'get' it!

Love the allusions to your poochies, however!

Sonali xx

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Basically a haiku is a three line poem with a syllable count of five in the first line, seven in the second, and five in the third. My author's notes talked about the different forms that encompass different subject matter. For the most part, haikus are about nature. (Hope that helps)
~patty~

reply by Selina Stambi on 17-Apr-2017

It does. I guess I was exaggerating a bit ... for effect you know! xx

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

MPatty,

Well chosen words, colorful arrangement and wonderfully decorated thoughts.
Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental, thought provoking, very enjoyable and thrilling.

There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Hi Camille; thank you for stopping to read and review. This was a fun little write inspired by the puppies. They love the snack ball and wrangling the treats from inside. I'm glad you liked it,
~patty~

Comment from BeasPeas

Exceptional

Patty- this is a short little piece, but it gave me such pleasure to read. This has got to be the best haiku I've ever read and here, lately, on FanStory it's wall-to-wall haiku. Each line of this one is a pleasure and you deserve a sixer for it. Marilyn

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Hi Marilyn; thank you so much for the lovely six stars AND your remarks. I am truly honored by your words. This was a fun write for my puppies. They thought it was time I write something else for them.
~patty~

(its not morning - but this is the only puppy I have)

reply by BeasPeas on 17-Apr-2017

Hi Patty. I tried clicking on the image above, but it won't open. Was there something there for me to see?

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Yes - it should be a puppy with a wagging tail. Darn!

reply by BeasPeas on 17-Apr-2017

Oh! Thank you for sending. It's the thought that counts. It won't open. :(

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

That's a cute poem for the puppies. Good visual imagery. You tell a story in a very short poem. Also, it met the syllable count requirements. Idk what the photo looks like besides a quilt. A ball. Really? Nice work. Have a good day :)

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Hi - the picture is of my puppies' snack ball. The slot in the top is where the yummy morsels will come out when the ball is knocked around. Thank you for your kind words about the poem. It was a fun write,
~patty~

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

i am not sure i get this, is it concerning dogs or people and what are the thing they are running after? sorry ot be a ballbearer but i would sincerely want to know what you mean?
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Hi Rebekka; the picture in the story is a snack ball. The puppy madness refers to my two dogs, Howie and Bernie. When the ball is waiting to be in play, they stare with their little black eyes. When the ball is in play, they run around like wild monkeys.
Thank you for reading,
~patty~

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

Good morning, Patty

As before so few words evoke so many images and feelings. You are the second individual who write Haiku poetry. The other is Dean Kuch. Enjoyed.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017

Hi Ray; thank you so much for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece.
~patty~