Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

I can just imagine their eyes lighting up at the sight of the ball.
Excellent haiku Patty, ..it bounces they run, completes it brilliantly.
Have a lovely evening

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

hi; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. My pups are a great source of inspiration. The go absolutely crazy as soon as I get the ball out. They watch intently as I place some treats inside, and when I roll it across the carpet, its all out play as they wait for the treats to come out through the top. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your words show the world from the viewpoint of your pups. It bounces, they run, is a perfect last line. I can see the pups running clearly, reminds me of my mini dachshund running after his ball.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

Hi; thank you for stopping by to read and review. This was a fun little write. My dogs have a great time with their snack ball, and I love to watch them. Your kind words are greatly appreciated,
~patty~

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This 5 7 5 poem seems to be about 2 puppies chasing after a ball.
I like the alliteration with the 'b'' sound in all three lines. The artwork looks for me more of a Christmas ornament that has fallen off the tree to a carpeted floor.
You are right; Haiku's are about nature; senryus are about human nature. gyiji are about religion. But they all have the same syllable count.

Keep writing.

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

thank you for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece about my dogs and their snack ball. It was a fun write,
~patty~

reply by dragonpoet on 18-Apr-2017

My pleasure.

Joan

Comment from Nikki-Nicole

Excellent

This is a good Haiku.
Amusing.
It consists of three lines.
Each line has a syllable count: 5-7-5
Total syllable count: 17
Great artwork: The image is a perfect match for this poem.
Thanks for sharing your Haiku.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

thank you for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece about my dogs and their snack ball. It was a fun write,
~patty~

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh how dogs just love playing with the ball! Your pups sound like a lot of fun Patty, never a dull moment. 'Four little black eyes twinkle'. Perfect! Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

thank you for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece about my dogs and their snack ball. It was a fun write,
~patty~

Comment from MaggieF

Excellent

Interesting picture. Good subtle alliteration. I like be the idea of your wee dogs waiting for you to throw the ball, 'the ball is in play' there is a great feeling of fun in this poem. I have three rough collies who love nothing better than chasing after a ball. MaggieF

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

Hi Maggie; thank you for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece about my dogs and their snack ball. It was a fun write,
~patty~

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Oh, rats, you didn't post a picture of Howie and Bernie (I love those names). Well, I guess in keeping with the Haiku, you chose this one. I'll just use my imagination, Patty.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

thank you so much. Don't worry - you will see more pictures of the little monsters!
~patty~

Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

Hi patty, I had to read others' reviews to know what that 'thing' is. Now I 'get it'. Your Haiku is cute. Animals are as individual as people. Some things that make noise my dog will not even walk by. He hates any loud noises.
I liked the line
" Four little black eyes twinkle". Stirred my clueless imagination !!!!!
Good poem, Trisha

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

Hi Trisha; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate that you investigated to find out what the 'thing' was. This was a fun little write inspired by my furry friends. They couldn't have any chocolate on Easter - so they had doggy treats. They just had to work at it!
~patty~

reply by Bucketlist on 18-Apr-2017

I'm at the age when the brain and sharpness part ways LOL You are so welcome

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

The play trick is on and the puppies come and they run the moment the ball bounces, the fun goes on, puppies madness continues; I liked this specialised haiku, enjoyed the visual imagery.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed my haiku. I am always inspired by my dogs - they just have too much fun!
~patty~

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

A very descriptive haiku about the fun of the run when the ball is in play. Love your central line, puts a smile on my dial.Who knew there were so many parts to the haiku forms. Interesting notes Patty, nicely done,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

Hi Valda; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad my little poem about my dogs and their snack ball. Thank you for letting me know what made you smile,
~patty~