2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "haibun (moving means)"A collection of Japanese poetry
25 total reviews
Comment from Realist101
As someone who has moved too many times, this is something I can really relate to GR. I hate moving. But, when you complain about authority, authority will run you ragged! Lol! Nice post! :)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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As someone who has moved too many times, this is something I can really relate to GR. I hate moving. But, when you complain about authority, authority will run you ragged! Lol! Nice post! :)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for reading, my friend :)
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and Poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>Haiga class starts on May 1st <>
Comment from Ulla
Hola quapa, moving house is never an easy task. And good for you that you've thrown out what's not essential. It's so easy to collect things over the years. Great haiku as well. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Hola quapa, moving house is never an easy task. And good for you that you've thrown out what's not essential. It's so easy to collect things over the years. Great haiku as well. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Gracias, bonita :)
Gypsy
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for sharing this haibun that deals with letting go. Moving is always hard and downsizing can be traumatic. However, it is best to remember that you can't take it with you anyway. Your prose flow well and are wrapped up in the words of your poem. I enjoyed the piece and the picture of the box helped to make the presentation,
~patty~
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for sharing this haibun that deals with letting go. Moving is always hard and downsizing can be traumatic. However, it is best to remember that you can't take it with you anyway. Your prose flow well and are wrapped up in the words of your poem. I enjoyed the piece and the picture of the box helped to make the presentation,
~patty~
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much, Patty
Comment from Hitcher
I think we have all been there at some point friend, but I think it is a lot harder for you ladies to give up all those little once upon a time treasures. my darling wife is exactly the same : )
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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I think we have all been there at some point friend, but I think it is a lot harder for you ladies to give up all those little once upon a time treasures. my darling wife is exactly the same : )
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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thank you, honey
Comment from Joan E.
First, best wishes with the remains of the move. I admired your focusing on letting go of the past and your concept of "love in a box". Big hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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First, best wishes with the remains of the move. I admired your focusing on letting go of the past and your concept of "love in a box". Big hugs- Joan
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Thank you, sweetie pie, you are very kind.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from l.raven
I Gypsy, I know just what you are saying...I hate moving...
but think I may soon...I so glad you are almost unpacked...
you just have to take one box at a time...and stop when your tired...very well written sweet angel...love to ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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I Gypsy, I know just what you are saying...I hate moving...
but think I may soon...I so glad you are almost unpacked...
you just have to take one box at a time...and stop when your tired...very well written sweet angel...love to ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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luv ya, Linda :) thank you for reading and reviewing my little haibun
gypsy hugs
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you are so welcome you...smiling big back at ya...love xxoo
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sometimes, moving can be the most liberating thing a person can do. After working sixteen-hour days, sometimes seven days a week for many years, I walked out of the house, got in my truck and never went back. Not even for my clothes. The ex was set for life, and I had just given up everything I had worked, saved, and invested for over thirty years. I gave her everything, and it was the best investment I ever made. Financially broke and starting over, but for the first time in my whole life I was totally my own person. We are trained to be creatures of habit, which makes us afraid to take chances, but now I know that change is good or at least it can be. Thanks for sharing another fine poem. Wishing you the best! and hope you like the new home. :-)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Sometimes, moving can be the most liberating thing a person can do. After working sixteen-hour days, sometimes seven days a week for many years, I walked out of the house, got in my truck and never went back. Not even for my clothes. The ex was set for life, and I had just given up everything I had worked, saved, and invested for over thirty years. I gave her everything, and it was the best investment I ever made. Financially broke and starting over, but for the first time in my whole life I was totally my own person. We are trained to be creatures of habit, which makes us afraid to take chances, but now I know that change is good or at least it can be. Thanks for sharing another fine poem. Wishing you the best! and hope you like the new home. :-)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Wow, that must have been hard but I get it. That would be liberating in so many levels... Good for you!
Thank you very much for reading, my friend :)
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and Poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>Haiga class starts on May 1st <>
Comment from damommy
You have a lovely haibun. I can related to it. While I'm not moving, I've been cleaning out. You're so right. It's hard to let things go, but I decided if I haven't seen it/used it in a certain amount of time, it's gone. Once it's gone, it is very liberating.
I like this haibun very much. I wish I understood better how to write one. 8-)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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You have a lovely haibun. I can related to it. While I'm not moving, I've been cleaning out. You're so right. It's hard to let things go, but I decided if I haven't seen it/used it in a certain amount of time, it's gone. Once it's gone, it is very liberating.
I like this haibun very much. I wish I understood better how to write one. 8-)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for reading, my friend :)
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and Poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>Haiga class starts on May 1st <>
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a most enjoyable haibun, Gypsy. I'm willing to bet most people would identify with the sentiments expressed, especially about surplus 'stuff'. We've all got it, Giddy
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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This is a most enjoyable haibun, Gypsy. I'm willing to bet most people would identify with the sentiments expressed, especially about surplus 'stuff'. We've all got it, Giddy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for reading, my friend :)
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and Poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>Haiga class starts on May 1st <>
Comment from Dean Kuch
O-h-h-hhhhh, I really, really love the satori in the last line of your very human-like haiku/senryu, dear Gypsy!
Essentially, that's just what we are doing when we move. We are boxing up all the love and memories associated with our old home and bringing them to adorn our new one.
That in and of itself helps a lot to make the new place feel like home.
The prose portion of your haibun is also well written and conveyed.
But that satori...that was the clincher for me!
Well done, and best of luck to you in your contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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O-h-h-hhhhh, I really, really love the satori in the last line of your very human-like haiku/senryu, dear Gypsy!
Essentially, that's just what we are doing when we move. We are boxing up all the love and memories associated with our old home and bringing them to adorn our new one.
That in and of itself helps a lot to make the new place feel like home.
The prose portion of your haibun is also well written and conveyed.
But that satori...that was the clincher for me!
Well done, and best of luck to you in your contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for reading, Dean :) I really appreciate your helpful feedback. :)
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and Poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>Haiga class starts on May 1st <>
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My pleasure, Gypsy.
Have a lovely Easter.
~Dean :)
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a lonely one, Im afraid
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I'm sorry...
