Uninvited Guests
A poem about a mess10 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is great! A brilliant contest entry and the untidiness and mess was oozing from the page with every line. I feel like I need to get some cleaning done now! Best Regards, Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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This is great! A brilliant contest entry and the untidiness and mess was oozing from the page with every line. I feel like I need to get some cleaning done now! Best Regards, Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Ha. Have to laugh or I might cry. LOL. Truly appreciate you reading.
Comment from BeasPeas
Congratulations for placing in the contest. That sounds like a good plan, when one house gets filled up with stuff, move to another one. Good rhyming throughout and amusing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Congratulations for placing in the contest. That sounds like a good plan, when one house gets filled up with stuff, move to another one. Good rhyming throughout and amusing. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thanks. Much appreciated.
Comment from marybell1
I loved reading your poem "Uninvited guests" . It sounded a real mess I wouldn't know where to start a clean up. Your poem rhymed well and I loved your photo.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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I loved reading your poem "Uninvited guests" . It sounded a real mess I wouldn't know where to start a clean up. Your poem rhymed well and I loved your photo.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and your thoughtful review.
Comment from suemac
Fun poem, I liked it, I am not much good at poetry but I understand this poem it is what I think poems are about the rhyming.One line that is not quite a match for the others,possibly intentional but here goes;
'Pulling out my hair ,place getting under my skin.' only a suggestion,hope you don't mind, 'insane' would rhyme with ' again' if you could fit it in somehow, or 'brain'.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Fun poem, I liked it, I am not much good at poetry but I understand this poem it is what I think poems are about the rhyming.One line that is not quite a match for the others,possibly intentional but here goes;
'Pulling out my hair ,place getting under my skin.' only a suggestion,hope you don't mind, 'insane' would rhyme with ' again' if you could fit it in somehow, or 'brain'.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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hanks much for reading and the great suggestion which I will check out asap!
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a terrifically messy poem. lol. Let's hope it's not really that messy. lol. You incorporated quite the mess don't think it could get any better my friend. Good luck.
~Kerry~
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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This is a terrifically messy poem. lol. Let's hope it's not really that messy. lol. You incorporated quite the mess don't think it could get any better my friend. Good luck.
~Kerry~
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and your thoughtful review.
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Your welcome
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
All the space, jam packed, everything scattered at sixes and sevens, this has a nice depiction, I liked the scenic projection and circumstantial existence in description.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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All the space, jam packed, everything scattered at sixes and sevens, this has a nice depiction, I liked the scenic projection and circumstantial existence in description.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and your thoughtful review.
Comment from Teresa Williams
That's cute! I am LOL! I know the feeling; and I thoroughly enjoyed the story within the poem. It's so difficult to withstand a messy person, especially when one can be so much of a "neat-nik", so to speak. Me, I love order and a place for everything...I think the greatest fear would be that I can become like the disheveled, and lose my OCD tendencies, of which I am most accustomed! Great poem! --Teresa Williams
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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That's cute! I am LOL! I know the feeling; and I thoroughly enjoyed the story within the poem. It's so difficult to withstand a messy person, especially when one can be so much of a "neat-nik", so to speak. Me, I love order and a place for everything...I think the greatest fear would be that I can become like the disheveled, and lose my OCD tendencies, of which I am most accustomed! Great poem! --Teresa Williams
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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I wish I was a neat freak but I am not and they are even too messy for me!-LOl. Thanks so much for reading and your thoughtful review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahaha, no, I'm sorry Anonymous Poet, there's nothing for rent here.
Besides, you wouldn't want to live in the part of Ohio I live in. There are more pigs, chickens, horses and other farm animals than there are people.
If they ever decided to revolt against mankind, we'd all be doomed!
The nearest grocery store is over fifteen miles away and there's nothing around for miles but plowed fields, barns, and farmland.
In addition, my daughter lives here with me too, and she's just as messy.
Cute poem, though.
I wish you lots a' luck.
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2017
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Hahaha, no, I'm sorry Anonymous Poet, there's nothing for rent here.
Besides, you wouldn't want to live in the part of Ohio I live in. There are more pigs, chickens, horses and other farm animals than there are people.
If they ever decided to revolt against mankind, we'd all be doomed!
The nearest grocery store is over fifteen miles away and there's nothing around for miles but plowed fields, barns, and farmland.
In addition, my daughter lives here with me too, and she's just as messy.
Cute poem, though.
I wish you lots a' luck.
~Dean :)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2017
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Oh Noooooo. LOL. The farm animals would be OK. I get along with my goats more than my family sometimes-Haha. Thanks for reading. Much appreciated.
Comment from Badger_29
This is so much fun to red. It bounces along with an up-beat tempo. And, I am certain that most readers can identify with this situation. You have not only followed the writing prompt, but have added another very enjoyable element, the unwanted guest. I loved the "fish-fry" comment. Benjamin Franklin said,
"Dirty laundry and company smell after three days"
Blessings,
Brother Badger
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2017
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This is so much fun to red. It bounces along with an up-beat tempo. And, I am certain that most readers can identify with this situation. You have not only followed the writing prompt, but have added another very enjoyable element, the unwanted guest. I loved the "fish-fry" comment. Benjamin Franklin said,
"Dirty laundry and company smell after three days"
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2017
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Ha-so true. I became tired of crying and screaming so decided to make light of the situation for the contest. LOL. Thanks so much for your thoughtful review which gave me a smile too.
Comment from robyn corum
Yep, I get it. I figured out a long time ago, that it's not stuff that matters, it's relationships. I had to learn to let SOME things go. It made my life MUCH more peaceful. I used to want to live in a museum and now I live in a well-loved home. *smile* Good luck!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2017
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Yep, I get it. I figured out a long time ago, that it's not stuff that matters, it's relationships. I had to learn to let SOME things go. It made my life MUCH more peaceful. I used to want to live in a museum and now I live in a well-loved home. *smile* Good luck!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2017
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Ah, to retire-guess it will never be as I support my grown children, but I can't keep up the fight everyday I guess. So for now I will make light of a bad situation and see if it at least gets a place in the contest voting-haha. Thanks so much for reading!
