Did He Say Yes?
It's difficult when she isn't sure.20 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I enjoyed the humor in this contrasting the Agnes character and the replies from Mr. Darcy straight from Jane Austen's book. There is just one spacing problem with one of Mr. Darcy's quotes. Great entry!
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I enjoyed the humor in this contrasting the Agnes character and the replies from Mr. Darcy straight from Jane Austen's book. There is just one spacing problem with one of Mr. Darcy's quotes. Great entry!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
Comment from morgan60621
The private dialogue you have described in this story is so cute. I can see the young man and his perhaps bride to be sitting and teasing each other on their wedding day. The sense of the dialogue and the picture you chose to together very well.
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The private dialogue you have described in this story is so cute. I can see the young man and his perhaps bride to be sitting and teasing each other on their wedding day. The sense of the dialogue and the picture you chose to together very well.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
Comment from Rasmine
You did well meshing it together. :P Good luck in that contest. I don't know if I would give it a try--I don't know if I would find it fun, but maybe.
Have a good weekend and happy Easter!
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You did well meshing it together. :P Good luck in that contest. I don't know if I would give it a try--I don't know if I would find it fun, but maybe.
Have a good weekend and happy Easter!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for sharing your entry in the What did you say dialogue contest. You have managed to create a conversation between two legendary characters. He did say yes, and the wedding would take place. You did a good job with this. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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Thank you for sharing your entry in the What did you say dialogue contest. You have managed to create a conversation between two legendary characters. He did say yes, and the wedding would take place. You did a good job with this. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Writing dialog only can be very challenging indeed.
You tackle the issue well.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
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Writing dialog only can be very challenging indeed.
You tackle the issue well.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
Comment from fafa
Your history flows well and generates good adequacy to the context of the contest, it is of hoping that you should be fine in this type of situation, it makes me happy that you have shared it, a big one embraced and congratulations.
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Your history flows well and generates good adequacy to the context of the contest, it is of hoping that you should be fine in this type of situation, it makes me happy that you have shared it, a big one embraced and congratulations.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
Comment from emptypage
I think you aren't supposed to add tags or names before/after the sentences spoken for this contest. The point is to let the dialogue be so good that it is clear at all times who is speaking.
You need to revamp, I think, if you have time. The subject is interesting, but there are rules. Go for it before time runs out!
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I think you aren't supposed to add tags or names before/after the sentences spoken for this contest. The point is to let the dialogue be so good that it is clear at all times who is speaking.
You need to revamp, I think, if you have time. The subject is interesting, but there are rules. Go for it before time runs out!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
Comment from Tpa
I thought your writing was enjoyable. There were some light moments that brought smiles to this reader. Unable to comprehend Darcy final contribution of him "going away."
GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST
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I thought your writing was enjoyable. There were some light moments that brought smiles to this reader. Unable to comprehend Darcy final contribution of him "going away."
GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Pride and Prejudice is one of my favourite classic books, we did the play at school and I will never forget it, 'Did he say yes' is so very appropriate as within the flowery language it's difficult to know the answer as the conversation is often indirect! A joy to read, love Dolly x
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Pride and Prejudice is one of my favourite classic books, we did the play at school and I will never forget it, 'Did he say yes' is so very appropriate as within the flowery language it's difficult to know the answer as the conversation is often indirect! A joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
Comment from apky
Well, I can only say that you did Pride and Prejudice proud!
You made the social mores of the time poignant,
clearly portraying the role of both women and men and their
ultimate goals in society.
Well done!
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Well, I can only say that you did Pride and Prejudice proud!
You made the social mores of the time poignant,
clearly portraying the role of both women and men and their
ultimate goals in society.
Well done!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
