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Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "haiku (hummingbirds gather)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Janet Foor
A lovely haiku. I have a trumpet vine and the humming birds do love love it. So far it has not been too invasive but I know it can be.
Nectar bar is a perfect satori line.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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A lovely haiku. I have a trumpet vine and the humming birds do love love it. So far it has not been too invasive but I know it can be.
Nectar bar is a perfect satori line.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Janet, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks for mentioning the satori. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Quantum Traveler
A Beautiful well Executed Haiku.
A Well Composed Writing Blended with Brilliance of Image.
One that will Suspend the Reader as does the Hummingbird to Hesitate Sipping the Nectar of Verse.
An Excellent Entry.
Very Well Done...Irish...Very Well Done...Q.T...Phil.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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A Beautiful well Executed Haiku.
A Well Composed Writing Blended with Brilliance of Image.
One that will Suspend the Reader as does the Hummingbird to Hesitate Sipping the Nectar of Verse.
An Excellent Entry.
Very Well Done...Irish...Very Well Done...Q.T...Phil.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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It's grand to receive such a kind review from you for my vine haiku, Phil. Thank you for your generous gold star, kind words, and I always appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts for my writing. Hope you're well.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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I am better...will be in touch...O.T...Phil.
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I'll look forward to it!
Comment from w.j.debi
You have written a delightful haiku. That twist or Ah huh moment in the final line made me smile. I love watching hummingbirds. They get very territorial about their source of food, too. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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You have written a delightful haiku. That twist or Ah huh moment in the final line made me smile. I love watching hummingbirds. They get very territorial about their source of food, too. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thank you, w.j. debi, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks for mentioning the satori...I'm delighted it made you smile.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Harmonic! Beautiful! Earthly poetic Haiku! I liked and enjoyed the artistic musical rhymes, the word visual imagery of hummingbirds gathering for nectar.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Harmonic! Beautiful! Earthly poetic Haiku! I liked and enjoyed the artistic musical rhymes, the word visual imagery of hummingbirds gathering for nectar.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Alcreator Lift Dear, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from mountainwriter49
HI, Kar,
You're a master of the well executed nature haiku. Your haiku is in fine form. It juxtapositions two concrete images, humming birds and trumpet vine, thus forming a vivid image for the reader to ponder. Also, it captures an observable moment in time--nothing imagined or abstract here. The satori is perfect! Nectar Bar! Love it!
An excellent entry for the HC book.
Ray
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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HI, Kar,
You're a master of the well executed nature haiku. Your haiku is in fine form. It juxtapositions two concrete images, humming birds and trumpet vine, thus forming a vivid image for the reader to ponder. Also, it captures an observable moment in time--nothing imagined or abstract here. The satori is perfect! Nectar Bar! Love it!
An excellent entry for the HC book.
Ray
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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I'm so pleased you enjoyed my vine haiku, PM. Thank you for the shiny gold star, your kind words, and I'm spcially glad you enjoyed the satori. Thanks for your encouraging response.
Smiles,
Kar :-)
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Hummingbirds Gather, uses fifteen syllables to capture the little bee-birds darting about those sappy flower buckets. Nice imaging.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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This haiku, Hummingbirds Gather, uses fifteen syllables to capture the little bee-birds darting about those sappy flower buckets. Nice imaging.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Bill, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks for mentioning you liked the imagery. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Poetic Friend
Oh how I love this poem! It is a perfectly-written haiku -- stunning imagery, excellent satori, and great usage of word economy (speak volumes with minimalism). I just adore the cleverness in the line "nectar bar." Wow, oh, wow!
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Oh how I love this poem! It is a perfectly-written haiku -- stunning imagery, excellent satori, and great usage of word economy (speak volumes with minimalism). I just adore the cleverness in the line "nectar bar." Wow, oh, wow!
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful review, generous rating, and kind words for my vine haiku, Poetic Friend. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and thank you so much for mentioning you enjoyed the imagery and the satori. I'm so pleased by your kind and encouraging comments.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'Hummingbirds Gather' is a lovely Haiku poem.
Each line is a perfect fit for the 5-7-5 format.
It has just the right amount of syllables.
The image is beautiful and goes well with the poem.
Thanks for sharing it.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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'Hummingbirds Gather' is a lovely Haiku poem.
Each line is a perfect fit for the 5-7-5 format.
It has just the right amount of syllables.
The image is beautiful and goes well with the poem.
Thanks for sharing it.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Nicole, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from patcelaw
It is a great deal of fun to watch hummingbird feeding at this vine. I planted on , but it did not liek the desert, seemed there was too much heat and the ground dried out much too quickly. Patricia
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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It is a great deal of fun to watch hummingbird feeding at this vine. I planted on , but it did not liek the desert, seemed there was too much heat and the ground dried out much too quickly. Patricia
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Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Patricia, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
