Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

I really like this one. I love hummingbirds. This is a good twist on the vine challenge and it will get my vote to be included in the anthology. Well done,my friend

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you so much, Douglas, for this kind and encouraging review for my vine haiku. I'm so pleased you enjoyed the poem, and I sure do appreciate your wanting to give it a vote for inclusion in the anthology. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from ameen786

Excellent

Another beautiful haiku from your mighty pen and as always, the satori is superb/unique, "Nectar bar,"-author notes are very educational, thanks.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you, ameen, for your kind review and comments for my vine haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your mentioning you liked the satori.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi IndianaIrish,

I loved reading your poem because they are always so interesting. You are great at writing them. I loved the picture that you put up with it too.
You write the most wonderful things.

Kat

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you, Kat, for your kind review and comments for my vine haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your very sweet compliments. Thank you for reading and Shari g your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by MizKat on 11-Apr-2017

You're very welcome Karyn. Kat

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

haha I was just out trimming my hummingbird vine. You are right. It is everywhere & will wreck wooden fences. Good job on the style of the haiku. Your words are correct in syllable count & paint a great picture. Great satori.

Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you, Janny, for your kind review and comments for my vine haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your mentioning you liked the satori.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written haiku. The trumpet vine is the himmingbird's favorite feeding place. It is also called after them drinking nectar from the flowered cups. An excellent painting, if it is your own work, you are a talented artist.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you, Sandra, for your kind review and comments for my vine haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your encouraging response. No, the gorgeous artwork is from Google.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend I enjoyed your haiku it is original and I love the closing line beautiful presentation all round I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you, Jill, for your kind review and comments for my vine haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your mentioning you liked the last line. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from artemis53

Excellent

Beautifully done. Yes. Those vines are hardy once established but besides fuchsia and a feeder those flowers are favorites for the Spring. That will be one more plant I need to add to my repertoire.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you, Artemis, for your kind review and comments for my vine haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your feedback.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Eternal Muse

Exceptional

Wow, wow, wow... This is incredible. A perfectly structured haiku, with all the trimmings.

I love every line. "trumpet vine's flowered cups" -amazing metaphor.

Your satori made me smile.

This is perfection.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you so much for your great review, generous rating, and very kind words for my vine haiku, Yelana. Few people want to give one of their cherished sixth stars to short poetry, so I'm extremely appreciative for your response. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and if the satori made you smile, I couldn't ask for a better compliment.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Indy:

What a beautiful picture of the hummingbirds and flowers. I enjoyed your haiku. The satori line, "nectar bar" struck me as quite unique. It is a pretty picture of spring. Thank you for sharing.

Kim

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you, Kim, for your kind review and comments for my vine haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your mentioning you liked the satori. Thanks for reading and your time to review.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Antoine Charlemaine

Excellent

Hey Kazza! Nectar bar! Noice. Very noice! I would NEVER think of that...yet you seem to dream these one-liners up with such ease. Is it hard work or do these ideas just pop into your mind??? I thought the picture added to the imagery very nicely.

We don't have hummingbirds in Australia...and I'm not sure about the trumpet vine, though it doesn't seem unusual to me, so perhaps I have seem something like it somewhere. Perhaps it's a cold weather vine...?

When do entries for this multi-author book thingy finish? It's going to be some book! How will it be published? Is there a publishing house already interested? I will be following the process with interest...

Ant xx

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Hi ya AntManofOz! Thanks for your great review and always kind words for my viney hairdo. It takes me about 3-5 days to write a haiku. I write, let it rest, revise, let it rest, and revise again. With this one, I had "nectar tasting" for the last line, and last night nectar bar just popped into my head. Lucky girl because that's a perfect satori for this one. Hummingbirds are one of my favorite flying critters. They are so amazing to watch their visible wings as they hover over my flowers or feeder. Their irredescent color sparkles in the sun, and it's so cool to watch them drink from their long bill. Come on over to Indiana in the summer and you can see them.

I'm not sure how many chapters there will be before the committee decides they have enough haiku for the anthology. They did say they wanted to have it printed by summer. I think they are self-publishing. Wanna get an autographed copy? LOL
Smiles, Ant!
KazzaVineyGirl :-)

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 10-Apr-2017

3 - 5 days! Wow! I wouldn't have the patience! I have a renewed and re-invigorated respect for your talent, missy. That's amazing. Your head must just be thinking 'hair-do, hair-do' all the time.

One thing concerns me, however, and I feel constrained to point this out, no matter how hard it may be to do so... Your hair bun writing appears to have fallen by the wayside. I haven't seen a hair bun in a long age. Is it right to neglect hair buns in preference to hair-dos? I'll leave that for your conscience to decide...

Summer...that's just around the corner (for you). Your name will soon be up in lights. I'll have an autographed copy on one condition - that the predominant author (that's you) hand delivers it.

But then, I suppose I should visit YOU in the summer, see the Hummingbirds and pick up my autographed copy at the same time. ...not sure how that ties in with the north of South Sudan, though...

See ya, KazzaVineyGirl. Good things grow on vines... Wine to cheer the heart of man. You'd be a Top Shelf drop, no mistake...

ShloshedAntMan (hic!)

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017

You must be reading my mind, SloshedAnt! I've been working on a hair-bun! How did you know?

I can bring your copy to the tent, but I don't think the hummingbird would travel well in my backpack...even though it's sand proof. We'll have to change our plans.

Good things grow on vines when there's someone to pick them when they're ripe. You're the best picker LOL
KazzaYellowTail (omg!)

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 10-Apr-2017

Yellow Tail, eh? Do you drink it, or did you research fine Aussie wine just to impress me? I prefer a nice sweet red, myself. How did you know? A good pinot-noir is my wine of choice (Tasmanian Stoney Rise is brilliant but expensive) but a Merlot is an acceptable second choice. Yellow Tail make a nice drop of Merlot.

But you're right...the fruit must be picked at precisely the right time. So, tell me. Are you ripe for the picking?

Change of plan? Yes, it looks like it may well be up to you to personally hand deliver my signed copy, after all... But we still have that annoying 15 hours to deal with. We are thwarted...

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017

LOL I've had Yellow Tail before and didn't have to google Aussie wines. Like you, I prefer those sweet red wines.

We Are Thwarted...lmaoooo sounds like a great title for a story or a song for Simon and Garfunkle. I'd love to hand deliver a book to you in Oz, the Sudan, or a rowboat in the middle of the Pacific. I'll bring the book, you bring your book. Deal?

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 11-Apr-2017

"We Are Thwarted" - A Tipsy Tale of Trepidation by Antoine Charlemaine.

The fateful day arrived at last. She alighted from the plane, book in hand. He spied her in the distance and knew her at once... She was the only one dressed in green with frizzy hair and carrying a book.

He glanced down at his own tome and gripped the volume tightly, smiling feebly. He'd waited for this day for a long, long time. He set the rickety four-pronged walking stick ahead of him and stepped onto the tarmac, keeping his eye on the electric wheel chair racing towards him. He wondered vaguely how much she must have paid to get THAT thing onto the aeroplane...

He staggered forward, wobbly step after wobbly step. She was closer, now, waving her book gleefully above her head. Too gleefully. She dropped it, chucked a quick 360 in her buggy and retrieved it. Tucking it under her petticoats, she tallied forth once more, undeterred.

He staggered forward, grateful at least one of them had remembered their motorised mode of transportation. In all honesty, he'd only half believed she'd even make the trip. Well, it wasn't every day a 95 year old made a journey like this to Hawaii...for coffee. But she was honouring a pledge she'd made some thirty years earlier...

He thought about it now, hobbling as fast as his bowed legs would permit him. He recalled her words... "I'll let you see mine when you let me see yours." Or something to that effect. He frowned. He never could quite recall exactly what she'd said but, hey! at 84 years of age, that hardly mattered!

The gap was closing. He felt his heart racing. He thought he could see her flushed cheeks. She held out the book. He held out his. He hoped she would remember how to stop that flying buggy...

The gap between them narrowed. Ten metres. Five. Good grief! She was upon him. He thrust the book at her as she raced past, screeching like a strangled cat. She thrust hers at him, and he grabbed it, releasing his hold on his four-pronged stick as he did. He reeled like a drunken sailor, tipping over and landing on the tarmac like a sack of potatoes. With his last gasp he drew her book to his heart, then died, thinking about what might have been....

She never saw her calamitous error. Pushing her buggy into full throttle rather than reverse, she barrelled forward like a bolt of green lightning. Sucked into the vaccumous vortex of a taxiing jet plane, she added such a thrust of fuel to its great engine that the plane did the return trip to the US in record time, thus shortening the time difference between Brisbane and Valso for ever after from 15 hours to a mere 12 hours.

The End

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 12-Apr-2017

Did my little story not please you?

reply by the author on 12-Apr-2017

I didn't see any replies Written yesterday! Thanks for replying again. Going to email you :-)

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 13-Apr-2017

Well that's pretty odd but I'm starting to think this may happen quite a lot. I've often sent you 'replies' (or replies to replies to replies) that I expect a response to and never receive. Is there a limit on the number of replies that can be sent? But then, you got my last message, apparently. Strange. I'll PM you with my missing message...

reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017

Nooooo...it was in my list of replies, but I wasn't notified by the site I had some. There were three of them I got the other day I didn't know I had.