Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

IndianaIrish,

Good chosen words. Flowing very nicely. Comprehensibly written. Short and sweet hurray! Everything looked picture-perfect. Nothing too serious. Kind of fun!
This poem made for an enjoyable read.

There was nothing wrong that I could tell. The words you chose worked very well.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017

Thank you so much, Oatmeal, for your kind review and such nice comments for my vine haiku. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your comments. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

IndianaIrish, thank you for sharing this beautiful and educational haiku with your end notes. A fantastic picture to accompany such fine words and notes which are very much appreciated. I've seen this flower before but have never known what it is called so enjoyed reading your informative notes on the subject. I particularly like your end line as it gives a sense of fun and enjoyment to this piece just like socialising at a bar would do. Well done on this well written poem. ~DD

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017

Thank you, ~DD, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts, and I'm pleased you liked the fun of the satori line.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Nice play of words on 'bar'-- and why not? Birds need a place to meet and mate. LOL. And nothing is more mouth watering than nectar.
Love the image of the trumpet vine.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017

Thanks for your review and comments for my haiku, Shari. I'm delighted you liked the imagery, and thanks for taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very beautiful haiku you have penned with the lovely picture of the hummingbirds gathering together doing their thing. I love the imagery you used as well. love, Teri

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017

Thank you, Teri, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Wow. I would like some of this Trumpet Vine in my yard! I need flowers that are hardy, that just keep coming back. Great haiku, I love the 'nectar bar'...how apt! Looks like they flutter for a 'shot'..then they're good to go! Loved this, blessings...

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017

Thank you, Irish Rain, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for mentioning the satori, and love your "shot" comment.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

I take it you usually don't add artwork. Here on FanStory, it seems to be necessary to add artwork. I thank you for the lesson in your author's notes. It sounds like the plant is underappreciated by many folks. I think it looks beautiful, and probably smells good, too. As far as the haiku goes, it seems very factual. I enjoyed reading your author's notes as much as the poem. The presentation is excellent. I love hummingbirds. I always have. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017

No, Jesse, unless needed, I try to not include artwork with haiku. The goal of haiku is to share a moment in time with the reader and to have them use the words to form their own image of the scene. There is a short Japanese form called haiga which includes the haiku right on the artwork.

Thamk you for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your comments and kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by Jesse James Doty on 10-Apr-2017

I understand the goal of a haiku. I also understand FS's obsession with artwork accompanying (seemingly) all forms of poetry.

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

A very clever haiku which tells of the hummingbirds thirst for nectar.
I love the line.....at trumpet vines flowered cups, completed wonderfully with...
Nectar bar.
Have a lovely evening

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017

Thank you for your great review for my vine haiku, YNWA. I appreciate your kind words, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for mentioning the imagery and the last line.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

Gathering hummingbirds? Sounds like a buzzfest to me.
Seems to me, they ain't little birds, just big bees.
Truth is, they scare the nectar out of me, too.
Try makin' honey out of that, Humzilla!

Actually, Indy, I like hummingbirds. From a distance.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017

Thanks so much, hw, for your awesome review, generous gold star, and sharing your comments. I'm envisioning a 6'5 guy dodging and weaving a mini bird/large bee looking around for some sweetness. LOL I love hummers.

Thanks, ,hw. I always look forward to your reviews.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this lovely haiku about the trumpet vine. It IS a lovely vine, but you are so right - it is incredibly hardy. Your words depict the little birds enjoying themselves as they feast on the nectar,
~patty~š???

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017

Thank you, Patty, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

I love hummingbirds though we usually only have them in the fall for a very short time.

Nectar bar is a wonderful satori. Hummingbird and trumpet vine's are the kigo.

Well done.

teresa

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017

Thank you, Nicole, for your great review for my vine haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. Thanks for mentioning you liked the satori.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)