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11 total reviews
Comment from Commando
Commendable post, Kerry. The Artwork is awesome, and the message is crystal clear. As you know, "I'm outta 6-stars. However, your post is most deserving of
it. Sorry, my dear friend!
Bill
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Commendable post, Kerry. The Artwork is awesome, and the message is crystal clear. As you know, "I'm outta 6-stars. However, your post is most deserving of
it. Sorry, my dear friend!
Bill
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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It's quite O.K. Jungle Man, I appreciate your comments and review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
hahaha... good one :)
I love the picture and the words even better.
Virginia creeper<>peeks in window~ Excellent!!
[~]world darkens[~] in haiku, these dashes mean something follows, I would delete them.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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hahaha... good one :)
I love the picture and the words even better.
Virginia creeper<>peeks in window~ Excellent!!
[~]world darkens[~] in haiku, these dashes mean something follows, I would delete them.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Thank you Gypsy I appreciate your comments and review, I wiill delete the dashs, thank you
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Virginia Creeper ... more like Virginia Take-Over. :) Wow, what a picture! This creeping vine has really invaded every square inch of the surface of this structure.
I especially like "peeks in window". Yes, soon it would cover the window completely and then the "world darkens".
Well done, Kerry!
Connie
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Virginia Creeper ... more like Virginia Take-Over. :) Wow, what a picture! This creeping vine has really invaded every square inch of the surface of this structure.
I especially like "peeks in window". Yes, soon it would cover the window completely and then the "world darkens".
Well done, Kerry!
Connie
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Thanks
Comment from Apostle Janos
Virginia as in the state or the name? Anyway, nice image, I enjoyed your poem. As a possible correction, isn't the syllable count supposed to be 7/5/7?
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Virginia as in the state or the name? Anyway, nice image, I enjoyed your poem. As a possible correction, isn't the syllable count supposed to be 7/5/7?
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Thank you my friend, It is named from the State. Haiku is originated by the Japanese, their syllables to count to the English launguage is differrent, I will add a link you can check out. http://www.nahaiwrimo.com/home/why-no-5-7-5
If you ae interested in learning more about Haiku, Gypsy Blue Rose has a class, There also is a Haiku club, which this piece is posted for, in the FanStory Anthology Book, Anyone can join, my friend. If interested- Contact Gypsy and she wiil sign you up.
We welcome all.
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I'm just finding out about it and I am not specifically interested in any one form but I may check it out, since I like to learn.
Comment from Rasmine
Awesome looking vine. :P Kind of looks alive like it will cover you and consume you. Cool haiku, Kerry. I'm glad you joined and I became your fan; I like your writing
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Awesome looking vine. :P Kind of looks alive like it will cover you and consume you. Cool haiku, Kerry. I'm glad you joined and I became your fan; I like your writing
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Awww thanks Rasmine , your so sweet.
Comment from Dean Kuch
The Virginia Creeper vine is a fast growing, red-tinged vine that swallows nearly everything it takes root to--at least to the best of my knowledge.
Having said that, I get the irony in the concrete imagery created in your first two lines.
And it's only logical to assume that if the Virginia Creeper is covering everything, it would indeed blot out the outside world by covering the window casements as well.
Nicely done, Kerry.
~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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The Virginia Creeper vine is a fast growing, red-tinged vine that swallows nearly everything it takes root to--at least to the best of my knowledge.
Having said that, I get the irony in the concrete imagery created in your first two lines.
And it's only logical to assume that if the Virginia Creeper is covering everything, it would indeed blot out the outside world by covering the window casements as well.
Nicely done, Kerry.
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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You love the casement word huh lol. Thanks Dean I appreciate your kind words and review. I would of used casement, But I didn't know what it was till you told me, maybe others dont know either.
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Why, sure they do, Kerry.
Have you no faith in the intelligence of your fellow FanStorians, lol?
You're welcome... ;)
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LOL
Comment from Rlegel99
Oh my look at that artwork which works so well with your poem. This poem flows well. Imagine it would be dark with all that creeping in. Thank you for sharing this piece of poetry.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Oh my look at that artwork which works so well with your poem. This poem flows well. Imagine it would be dark with all that creeping in. Thank you for sharing this piece of poetry.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your kind words, Haiku club is open to all, if interested contact Gypsy Blue Rose my friend.
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, Kerry, if the Virginia creeper peeks in your window, your world will darken because it wound mean the creeper has covered your house. You'll need garden shears to escape. This is an effective and precise haiku I enjoyed immensely. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Yes, Kerry, if the Virginia creeper peeks in your window, your world will darken because it wound mean the creeper has covered your house. You'll need garden shears to escape. This is an effective and precise haiku I enjoyed immensely. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for your comments and review. lol need garden shears to escape, is very funny.
Comment from lyenochka
That's an interesting vine. I guess even nice looking plants can be destructive if too invasive. Good choice of words using the "creeper" part of the name to create a dark, horror effect.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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That's an interesting vine. I guess even nice looking plants can be destructive if too invasive. Good choice of words using the "creeper" part of the name to create a dark, horror effect.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Thank you, I much appreciate your comments and review.
Comment from emptypage
Boy....is that Kudzu??? I hate that stuff, though yours is pretty, LOL.
The haiku is perceptive and dead on in its description. You did a nice job. I love the image, too. Is it yours?
Good stuff.
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Boy....is that Kudzu??? I hate that stuff, though yours is pretty, LOL.
The haiku is perceptive and dead on in its description. You did a nice job. I love the image, too. Is it yours?
Good stuff.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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My home? No. my haiku? Yes The picture I found on line, It is creeping virginia, it is in the ivy family, It turns bright red in the Fall. I appreciate your kind comments and review.
