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Comment from emptypage
You wrote, "He is drawn to the Spiritual aspect of Jesus life which he ...." It should be "Jesus' life."
You wrote, "...poured a glass of Cherry," SHERRY is the correct spelling.
You wrote, "Am I making a mountain out of a mole?'---First, "mole" should be "molehill." Second, you have double quotes at the beginning of the sentence and a single quote at the end. Need double at the end.
I'm not certain what is happening here, as I appear to have just jumped into the middle (or late beginning) of a book. It could be interesting, based on the description. I like the dialogue. Some parts, though, are a bit stilted. I encourage you to use "it's" instead of "it is" and to use naturally spoken contraction in all of your dialogue to make it more appealing to your readers.
Good start.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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You wrote, "He is drawn to the Spiritual aspect of Jesus life which he ...." It should be "Jesus' life."
You wrote, "...poured a glass of Cherry," SHERRY is the correct spelling.
You wrote, "Am I making a mountain out of a mole?'---First, "mole" should be "molehill." Second, you have double quotes at the beginning of the sentence and a single quote at the end. Need double at the end.
I'm not certain what is happening here, as I appear to have just jumped into the middle (or late beginning) of a book. It could be interesting, based on the description. I like the dialogue. Some parts, though, are a bit stilted. I encourage you to use "it's" instead of "it is" and to use naturally spoken contraction in all of your dialogue to make it more appealing to your readers.
Good start.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the corrections. My negligence and lack of editing caused these errors. I will fix them. It is one of the ending chapters of a novel. I will be submitting to professional editing before printing. Best regards and wishes.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This is a very good chapter.
It is well-written.
Nicely polished material.
Free of grammatical errors!
I see no need for improvement.
I think this is going to be a MUST READ book.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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This is a very good chapter.
It is well-written.
Nicely polished material.
Free of grammatical errors!
I see no need for improvement.
I think this is going to be a MUST READ book.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you Nichole. Since getting few good slaps, I am very careful about what I put out for readers. I am grateful to many viewers who forced me to change my attitude to writing a good prose. I appreciate your comments very much. May I use your comment on my book cover when I publish it in Print? If you allow me, I will need a permission e-mail from you to forward it to my publisher. Please send it to: niyuta@aol.com. Best wishes and regards.
Arun
