2018 Bernie and Howie Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Howie and the Snack Ball"...stories and poems about the boys
47 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
This is very entertaining. It would make a great children's book--they love animal stories. I have one of those for my cat--it's not a ball rather it is like a Weeble Wooble (was a child's toy in the 70's). She bats it and then looks to me to shake the treat out of it. LOL --so cute, though.
Have a good Sunday.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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This is very entertaining. It would make a great children's book--they love animal stories. I have one of those for my cat--it's not a ball rather it is like a Weeble Wooble (was a child's toy in the 70's). She bats it and then looks to me to shake the treat out of it. LOL --so cute, though.
Have a good Sunday.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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thank you for dropping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement, 😀
~patty~
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fabulous story of Howie's adventures and he is such a cute puppy having fun! Dogs can be a bit jealous of each other, but all was well in the end, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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A fabulous story of Howie's adventures and he is such a cute puppy having fun! Dogs can be a bit jealous of each other, but all was well in the end, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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thank you for dropping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement, 😀
~patty~
Comment from judiverse
What a sweet picture. You really have fun with your doggies. This is a delightful story. Your dogs seem to be an endless source of stories, and this one is told very well indeed. Who can blame Howie for wanting the softest spot, the pillow. At least everyone is satisfied at the end, Human companion has her pillow, Bernie has the blanket, and Howie has his beloved snack ball. I have a similar thing for the kittens, but it doesn't seem to work very well. They're supposed to shake it so a treat will come out, but they don't get the hang of it. Great work with this. judi
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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What a sweet picture. You really have fun with your doggies. This is a delightful story. Your dogs seem to be an endless source of stories, and this one is told very well indeed. Who can blame Howie for wanting the softest spot, the pillow. At least everyone is satisfied at the end, Human companion has her pillow, Bernie has the blanket, and Howie has his beloved snack ball. I have a similar thing for the kittens, but it doesn't seem to work very well. They're supposed to shake it so a treat will come out, but they don't get the hang of it. Great work with this. judi
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi Judi; thank you for dropping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement, 😀
~patty~
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Hi, Patty. You're welcome, and I love your great stories about your dogs. judi
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written doggie story. They have their own unique character which we fall in love so quickly. They seem to know more about us than we think. My cat knows exactly when I open a can of tuna and she doesn't leave my side until I give her a share.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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A very well-written doggie story. They have their own unique character which we fall in love so quickly. They seem to know more about us than we think. My cat knows exactly when I open a can of tuna and she doesn't leave my side until I give her a share.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi Sandra; thank you for dropping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement, 😀
~patty~
Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
Kids are not at school, so I can't spend much time with my laptop as usual. I'm reviewing this through my phone. I hope it works. This was very fun to read. Very original like a story told from your pets POV.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi,
Kids are not at school, so I can't spend much time with my laptop as usual. I'm reviewing this through my phone. I hope it works. This was very fun to read. Very original like a story told from your pets POV.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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thank you for dropping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement. Howie and Bernie are always a source of inspiration,
~patty~
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Cute story of Howie and his treat ball and the interaction with Bernie. Nicely written from Howie's point of view, and it adds to the humour in this write.
cheers
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Cute story of Howie and his treat ball and the interaction with Bernie. Nicely written from Howie's point of view, and it adds to the humour in this write.
cheers
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from pome lover
you can certainly tell you're a dog person - writing from Howie's POV - very realistically, too. I think you hit the nail on the head with his thoughts. In fact, it was so realistic, I could just see him thinking it! good job. Also sly old Bernie - the silent, sneaky type. I bet they are something together.
A fun telling of a cute scenario. Good job.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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you can certainly tell you're a dog person - writing from Howie's POV - very realistically, too. I think you hit the nail on the head with his thoughts. In fact, it was so realistic, I could just see him thinking it! good job. Also sly old Bernie - the silent, sneaky type. I bet they are something together.
A fun telling of a cute scenario. Good job.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement,
~patty~
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you're welcome. fun read.
Comment from sunnilicious
Howie is an adorable little doggy. Awweee cute picture. Good narrative storytelling. Good visual imagery created. Creative. Fun. Adventurous even. Nice short story. Good work. Have a good weekend
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Howie is an adorable little doggy. Awweee cute picture. Good narrative storytelling. Good visual imagery created. Creative. Fun. Adventurous even. Nice short story. Good work. Have a good weekend
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Hi; thank you for stopping by to read and review. Your kind words of encouragement are greatly appreciated,
~patty~
Comment from Spitfire
His tongue curled in an upward motion and his teeth glistened in the dim light of the room. --great descriptive line.
You've captured the personality of Howie and the fun of the game.
I would suggest you tighten this by eliminating unnecessary words and vary sentence length:
Howie curled up in the blanket on the couch,his nose buried under a flap.The soft plaid flannel rose every so often as he sighed or huffed. He was a bit put out.
Also, avoid so much repetition of Howie. Use descriptive phrases instead.
On the TV was one of those court shows, and the people were arguing in annoying voices. How on earth could the Mistress enjoy this stuff? It was beyond Howie's comprehension. Peeking from under the flap of the blanket, Howie saw Bernie sneaking towards him. Bernie's small paws were inching slowly across the couch, and his little eyes beamed. Howie just knew Bernie wanted his blanket.
(Howie is repeated three times. How about the Terrier (or whatever breed) in this sentence:
Peeking from under the flap, the Terrier saw Bernie sneaking towards him.
This piece is a fun read.
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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His tongue curled in an upward motion and his teeth glistened in the dim light of the room. --great descriptive line.
You've captured the personality of Howie and the fun of the game.
I would suggest you tighten this by eliminating unnecessary words and vary sentence length:
Howie curled up in the blanket on the couch,his nose buried under a flap.The soft plaid flannel rose every so often as he sighed or huffed. He was a bit put out.
Also, avoid so much repetition of Howie. Use descriptive phrases instead.
On the TV was one of those court shows, and the people were arguing in annoying voices. How on earth could the Mistress enjoy this stuff? It was beyond Howie's comprehension. Peeking from under the flap of the blanket, Howie saw Bernie sneaking towards him. Bernie's small paws were inching slowly across the couch, and his little eyes beamed. Howie just knew Bernie wanted his blanket.
(Howie is repeated three times. How about the Terrier (or whatever breed) in this sentence:
Peeking from under the flap, the Terrier saw Bernie sneaking towards him.
This piece is a fun read.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your review. I have no problems with folks giving me constructive criticism.
~patty~
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very cute doggie story with great insight into what it is dogs must really be thinking. Well done descriptions of his actions as well. I enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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A very cute doggie story with great insight into what it is dogs must really be thinking. Well done descriptions of his actions as well. I enjoyed this, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 07-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
Thank you for stopping by to read and review, Debbie. As always, your comments and encouragement are greatly appreciated,
~patty~
