Horse Chestnut
Nonet4 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author
I like how you describe of how the chestnut buds feel and when the buds open of how they look
like elegant street lamps
Very nice
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
Hello author
I like how you describe of how the chestnut buds feel and when the buds open of how they look
like elegant street lamps
Very nice
Gert
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Thanks for reading and the critique zanya
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hi you are welcome
Gert
Comment from w.j.debi
Good job on the nonet form. Your romanticised take on the chestnut make it endearing. Nice shape--like a chestnut. Good alliteration in the closing "conker cues."
t's probably my pronunciation--I am counting six instead of seven syllables in line three.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
Good job on the nonet form. Your romanticised take on the chestnut make it endearing. Nice shape--like a chestnut. Good alliteration in the closing "conker cues."
t's probably my pronunciation--I am counting six instead of seven syllables in line three.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Thanks for reading and critique zanya
Comment from tfawcus
This is a fine description of the horse chestnut and you have broken it, as required, into lines of decreasing syllabic length. I do feel, however, that the line breaks are somewhat arbitrary and artificial to fit the prescribed form. The flow is cut up in a way that does not really fit the expressive sense of the words. Your middle sentence is a marvellously descriptive simile:
"Flowers / like elegant street lamps /
soon adorn the horse / chestnut."
You can perhaps see what I mean though with the line break between horse and chestnut!
This would make a wonderful poem expressed in a different form to the one you have chosen for it.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
This is a fine description of the horse chestnut and you have broken it, as required, into lines of decreasing syllabic length. I do feel, however, that the line breaks are somewhat arbitrary and artificial to fit the prescribed form. The flow is cut up in a way that does not really fit the expressive sense of the words. Your middle sentence is a marvellously descriptive simile:
"Flowers / like elegant street lamps /
soon adorn the horse / chestnut."
You can perhaps see what I mean though with the line break between horse and chestnut!
This would make a wonderful poem expressed in a different form to the one you have chosen for it.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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Much appreciated engaging critique zanya
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This is a good Nonet poem.
Nice title, 'Horse Chestnut'- It's interesting.
Great choice of artwork!
Beautiful image.
I never written a Nonet.- It gives me something to think about.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
This is a good Nonet poem.
Nice title, 'Horse Chestnut'- It's interesting.
Great choice of artwork!
Beautiful image.
I never written a Nonet.- It gives me something to think about.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017
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And thanks for reading and critique zanya