Humanity Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Desert Fare"A science fiction book about genetic engineering.
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Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
I felt like I was watching an episode of I'm Celebrity, get me out of here. I could not eat insects. Sometimes I'm even afraid of them :)
The dialogue feels very natural and it made me smile in parts. I hope Koko ad her child will be safe and she'll reunite with her husband.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi,
I felt like I was watching an episode of I'm Celebrity, get me out of here. I could not eat insects. Sometimes I'm even afraid of them :)
The dialogue feels very natural and it made me smile in parts. I hope Koko ad her child will be safe and she'll reunite with her husband.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the honest review! I know it sounds creepy, but it is part of survival training. You should read some of Feral from Malanda's work. He's got some really gross recipes.
I appreciate your time and review,
Rhonda
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Oh, it just reminded me of the show. I often write about creepy stuff. In one of my first versions of the Yegons, one of my characters lived locked in a dark loft, abused constantly, and when he ran to the forest and lived there, he ate insects.
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Ahhh, okay. Yes, another fantasy/sci fi lover!
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. I continue to find this story interesting and unique. I'm enjoying each and every chapter. I would find it kind of hard to eat insects, though. LOL
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Excellent. I continue to find this story interesting and unique. I'm enjoying each and every chapter. I would find it kind of hard to eat insects, though. LOL
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Right, I don't imagine having to do it, either, but survival is survival!
Thanks for the review,
Rhonda
Comment from lyenochka
Another great chapter, Rhonda! (and just the right "digestible" length!). The picture gave me an inkling of what was for supper. Perhaps you could add a little about the flavor? When I was very young I had tasted fire-roasted grasshoppers/crickets and to this day, I remember how crispy and metallic tasting they were. I haven't had more since!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Another great chapter, Rhonda! (and just the right "digestible" length!). The picture gave me an inkling of what was for supper. Perhaps you could add a little about the flavor? When I was very young I had tasted fire-roasted grasshoppers/crickets and to this day, I remember how crispy and metallic tasting they were. I haven't had more since!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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I will ask Fez about the flavor. I have never tried one myself!
Thanks for the review and comments.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Excellent writing. I was drawn to your picture that accompanied your post. My birth sign is Scorpio so naturally, I am attracted to any picture of a scorpion.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Excellent writing. I was drawn to your picture that accompanied your post. My birth sign is Scorpio so naturally, I am attracted to any picture of a scorpion.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Mine, too!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Excellent as always and this one really gives us something to ponder over. Your presentation is excellent and the spots you stop leave us wanting more
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Excellent as always and this one really gives us something to ponder over. Your presentation is excellent and the spots you stop leave us wanting more
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much, Barb!
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Rhonda, your chapters, your stories always intrigue me. They keep me reading to the very end and into your very informative author's note. This chapter puts forth the intelligent aspect of Sani. I enjoy his renderings of life and situations of life. I believe he has Archie's attention about all things possible.
The conversation while dining on insects was quite evotive. The thoughts in each mind were of course different especially Ayala's. I'm still hoping that somewhere in the future, they both fall in love with each other. I believe Archie is having feelings for that quite haven't shown up yet. Ayala, I feel is looking at him in a much different light since this journey began. I also hope that Todd and Koko are reunited again, especially with her having a baby.
So my friend, with all of this being said, this is such an exceptional story of hope, promise and determination of these four people. Very well written Rhonda.
Take my friend as I look forward to the next chapter.
Your friend always,
Jim
ps; when I was in China in '10, I had eaten fried butterfly cocoons. Quite different but also quite tasty. Most people of our culture thinks that I am crazy. I haven't told them the other things I have eaten while spending a month over there!!!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Rhonda, your chapters, your stories always intrigue me. They keep me reading to the very end and into your very informative author's note. This chapter puts forth the intelligent aspect of Sani. I enjoy his renderings of life and situations of life. I believe he has Archie's attention about all things possible.
The conversation while dining on insects was quite evotive. The thoughts in each mind were of course different especially Ayala's. I'm still hoping that somewhere in the future, they both fall in love with each other. I believe Archie is having feelings for that quite haven't shown up yet. Ayala, I feel is looking at him in a much different light since this journey began. I also hope that Todd and Koko are reunited again, especially with her having a baby.
So my friend, with all of this being said, this is such an exceptional story of hope, promise and determination of these four people. Very well written Rhonda.
Take my friend as I look forward to the next chapter.
Your friend always,
Jim
ps; when I was in China in '10, I had eaten fried butterfly cocoons. Quite different but also quite tasty. Most people of our culture thinks that I am crazy. I haven't told them the other things I have eaten while spending a month over there!!!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the six stars, Jim!!
Thank you for the wonderful support and comments. You are right on the money on all of it, so I can tell you carefully read the story.
Cool about your experiences in China. I try to be open minded about trying new things, but I don't know if I could do the crickets. haha.
Take care, my dear friend,
Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda--all this talk about insects is making me hungry--I think I'll go craw under the house and find assorted grubs, fry 'em up in a little butter, and PORK!
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda--all this talk about insects is making me hungry--I think I'll go craw under the house and find assorted grubs, fry 'em up in a little butter, and PORK!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Yes, I thought that would catch your fancy! haha. I sent Fez a note and asked him to review. We'll see...
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Yeah, I guess his internet is spotty.
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Yeah, and he's started a small store there in the Philippines, so he's busy with other things now. haha.
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Good for him , and I hope it works out for 'Fez the Grocer, Or Whatever'!
Comment from mbroyles2
We're learning more about the ladies as they start to trust Archie and begin a bond.
Archie is starting to see his father in Sani, even though he has his doubts about the tommyknockers.
Great chapter that sets the suspense for when they arrive at the camp.
Michael
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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We're learning more about the ladies as they start to trust Archie and begin a bond.
Archie is starting to see his father in Sani, even though he has his doubts about the tommyknockers.
Great chapter that sets the suspense for when they arrive at the camp.
Michael
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful review, my friend.
Yes, the poor old guy seems quite delusional, but has a method to his madness!
Thanks for reading.
Rhonda
Comment from apky
"..They probably figured where were heading when we didn't go to the authorities." ~ where WE were...?
I continue to enjoy this story and it gets
more engulfing each time around. Well done.
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"..They probably figured where were heading when we didn't go to the authorities." ~ where WE were...?
I continue to enjoy this story and it gets
more engulfing each time around. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you, my friend. I'll go back and fix the mistake. Thanks for finding it!
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
After they've Ben holed up during the say, they take off and start travelling at night to conserve both moisture and to avoid being detected by their pursuers! Koko and Ayala are introduced to the consumption of insects, they expect that their antagonists were plotting an ambush they suspected, well done, blessings, Roy
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After they've Ben holed up during the say, they take off and start travelling at night to conserve both moisture and to avoid being detected by their pursuers! Koko and Ayala are introduced to the consumption of insects, they expect that their antagonists were plotting an ambush they suspected, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Roy! I appreciate the read and review! Take care,
Rhonda
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You too Rhonda
