Perennials of War
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Comment from light
Anderson' last thought is telling. How is he going to continue to investigate the situation without putting her family in harms way? This is a good question.
Elaine
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Anderson' last thought is telling. How is he going to continue to investigate the situation without putting her family in harms way? This is a good question.
Elaine
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from joeruptak
I didn't get to read any other chapters but I got the gist
of the story from this one. It is a well-written and entertaining piece of work
I will try to find some of the rest of the story to really be able to enjoy this writing to:
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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I didn't get to read any other chapters but I got the gist
of the story from this one. It is a well-written and entertaining piece of work
I will try to find some of the rest of the story to really be able to enjoy this writing to:
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I hope Anderson is able to help Shana - but with the Russian Mafia involved, they've something to worry about. As Anderson reasons, it could endanger her family. And is their relationship going to blossom further?
Anderson opened his mouth as if to speak.
"Drew, let her speak.
Barbara - note above - Anderson is about to speak, and then he's called "Drew" -- I'm a bit confused here.
q
Romeo followed. - ALSO - there's a redundant "q" above this line.
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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I hope Anderson is able to help Shana - but with the Russian Mafia involved, they've something to worry about. As Anderson reasons, it could endanger her family. And is their relationship going to blossom further?
Anderson opened his mouth as if to speak.
"Drew, let her speak.
Barbara - note above - Anderson is about to speak, and then he's called "Drew" -- I'm a bit confused here.
q
Romeo followed. - ALSO - there's a redundant "q" above this line.
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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I was told by a lot of other reviewers that I should always write in narration Anderson, but can use Drew, in dialogue. It's short for Romeo, much like Rosaline and Rosa. I have kicked the 'q' out.
Comment from apky
"Please, I need to be alone and think about all of this." She left the patio.
q
Romeo followed.
~ that "q" needs to go, I think.
"How am I going to protect her and get the painting to its rightful owner without anybody getting hurt?"
Axel and Thor stood and laid their heads on Anderson's desk.
~ what would we do without Herrchen's best friends!
Another excellent chapter, Barbara.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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"Please, I need to be alone and think about all of this." She left the patio.
q
Romeo followed.
~ that "q" needs to go, I think.
"How am I going to protect her and get the painting to its rightful owner without anybody getting hurt?"
Axel and Thor stood and laid their heads on Anderson's desk.
~ what would we do without Herrchen's best friends!
Another excellent chapter, Barbara.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I always have at least one dog in my novels. I have kicked the 'q' out.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A well written chapter, my friend. Good dialogue and as always I love the inclusion of the dogs. Sounds like it may be too late to turn back now~Debbie
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A well written chapter, my friend. Good dialogue and as always I love the inclusion of the dogs. Sounds like it may be too late to turn back now~Debbie
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from LisaD123
This is an entertaining chapter. The dialogue is authentic and moves the action forward with good pace. The characters are clearly defined and the reader has an excellent sense of place and action. There is a random 'q' above 'Romeo followed' and I'm not sure how it snuck in there! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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This is an entertaining chapter. The dialogue is authentic and moves the action forward with good pace. The characters are clearly defined and the reader has an excellent sense of place and action. There is a random 'q' above 'Romeo followed' and I'm not sure how it snuck in there! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from MelB
q - remove
Romeo followed.
I'm guessing you never want to mess with the Russian mafia. I doubt they will give up, especially now that they know she wants the painting. Look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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q - remove
Romeo followed.
I'm guessing you never want to mess with the Russian mafia. I doubt they will give up, especially now that they know she wants the painting. Look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
Excellent work with this chapter. I agree, Shana has opened a Pandora's box and it is unlikely the Russians will walk away now they know she made it known she wanted the painting. Anderson has good reason to worry, the Russian Mafia is not a group you ever want to mess with. The tension is building nicely with this story and I do hope he somehow finds a safe way to help Shana.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Excellent work with this chapter. I agree, Shana has opened a Pandora's box and it is unlikely the Russians will walk away now they know she made it known she wanted the painting. Anderson has good reason to worry, the Russian Mafia is not a group you ever want to mess with. The tension is building nicely with this story and I do hope he somehow finds a safe way to help Shana.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
I guess this would be as good of a filler chapter as any. The calm before the storm. Your post is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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I guess this would be as good of a filler chapter as any. The calm before the storm. Your post is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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I needed to establish a few things and this post did it. I hope. Thank you for the kind review.
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you're welcome. Barbara.
Comment from Sis Cat
"How am I going to protect her and get the painting to its rightful owner without anybody getting hurt?"
That's a good question, because Shana is getting cold feet now and proposed dropping the search for the painting all together, but if the search for the painting ends, will Anderson's and Shana's budding relationship end as well now that she does not need to be protected. That remains to be seen.
end quotation marks needed: "Or the room I'm staying in.(")
Thank you for sharing another thrilling chapter.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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"How am I going to protect her and get the painting to its rightful owner without anybody getting hurt?"
That's a good question, because Shana is getting cold feet now and proposed dropping the search for the painting all together, but if the search for the painting ends, will Anderson's and Shana's budding relationship end as well now that she does not need to be protected. That remains to be seen.
end quotation marks needed: "Or the room I'm staying in.(")
Thank you for sharing another thrilling chapter.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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I will make that correction. Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
