Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Chapter Sieben part zwei"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
32 total reviews
Comment from bookishfabler
Hi there. I opened up Fanstory this morning to 4 pages of messages and over 40 posts to review. I can't get to all of them, so I'm going through the ones I have that are books I love. Thank goodness I have all afternoon today.
I need to be alone and think about all of this." She left the patio.
q
Romeo followed. (There is an unwanted "q" here.)
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi there. I opened up Fanstory this morning to 4 pages of messages and over 40 posts to review. I can't get to all of them, so I'm going through the ones I have that are books I love. Thank goodness I have all afternoon today.
I need to be alone and think about all of this." She left the patio.
q
Romeo followed. (There is an unwanted "q" here.)
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 06-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the catch. A 'q' is a strange letter to be left there. LOL I appreciate the help.
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Yes it is.
Comment from Tpa
Another enjoyable chapter. Like past chapters, this has a mystique, which anxiously awaits for the next. Anderson lifting that folder had broadened my interest as to the nature of that file.
Superb writing, wish you well.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Another enjoyable chapter. Like past chapters, this has a mystique, which anxiously awaits for the next. Anderson lifting that folder had broadened my interest as to the nature of that file.
Superb writing, wish you well.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
I am not sure if Shana is aware of it or not, but I think she is in danger. She may not realize it, but thank God Drew does. He will keep her and her family safe. Also, it looks like he will be trying to get the painting back to its rightful owners.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hello, my friend,
I am not sure if Shana is aware of it or not, but I think she is in danger. She may not realize it, but thank God Drew does. He will keep her and her family safe. Also, it looks like he will be trying to get the painting back to its rightful owners.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
Another good addition to the story here. Shana feeling out of her depth and Anderson not wanting to let go...
She left the patio.
q
Romeo followed. - delete the errant 'q' here.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi Barbara,
Another good addition to the story here. Shana feeling out of her depth and Anderson not wanting to let go...
She left the patio.
q
Romeo followed. - delete the errant 'q' here.
All the best
G
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. The 'q' no longer has residence in my post. LOL
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sounds like good thinking on Shana's part, but unfortunately, even giving up the painting won't keep the Russians from trying to get rid of Shana who is now seen as the threat. Great chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Sounds like good thinking on Shana's part, but unfortunately, even giving up the painting won't keep the Russians from trying to get rid of Shana who is now seen as the threat. Great chapter. :-)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
It appears Shana is between a rock and a hard place. The dialogue was spot on as it pushed the story forward.
Question: Why the use of German numbers?
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Good morning, Barbara
It appears Shana is between a rock and a hard place. The dialogue was spot on as it pushed the story forward.
Question: Why the use of German numbers?
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I need to have my posts labeled so I can keep them in order for ME and only for me, when I put it all back together. LOL FS won't let you use the same 'title'' over an over again. English is my first language. I speak fluent Spanish and acceptable German. I am upset because if I write another story, I am out of languages for my titles. I have already used all combinations I can think of for chapter # part # in English.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barbara. Good to read another fine chapter of your book. This painting has caused a lot of trouble. Perhaps you should figure a way to get it back soon however. The reader will only let you draw this out so long before they will get anxious.
Good imagrs and dialogue throughout. Like:" Anderson lifted a folder that held his speech, opened it, and then slammed it shut. "How am I going to protect her and get the painting to its rightful owner without anybody getting hurt?"
Suggestions: " She removed her phone from her pocket. "I'll do it right now."(You need something in here like when she finished she said,) As she put the phone away, she said, "I left a message. He'll get back to me." Otherwise the reader does a double take when you skip to putting the phone away so fast, I think.
And here again: "Anderson opened his mouth as if to speak. (You should add on something like "but Helen said, etc....etc.. before she says "Drew, let him speak."
Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi, Barbara. Good to read another fine chapter of your book. This painting has caused a lot of trouble. Perhaps you should figure a way to get it back soon however. The reader will only let you draw this out so long before they will get anxious.
Good imagrs and dialogue throughout. Like:" Anderson lifted a folder that held his speech, opened it, and then slammed it shut. "How am I going to protect her and get the painting to its rightful owner without anybody getting hurt?"
Suggestions: " She removed her phone from her pocket. "I'll do it right now."(You need something in here like when she finished she said,) As she put the phone away, she said, "I left a message. He'll get back to me." Otherwise the reader does a double take when you skip to putting the phone away so fast, I think.
And here again: "Anderson opened his mouth as if to speak. (You should add on something like "but Helen said, etc....etc.. before she says "Drew, let him speak."
Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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I made the changes. There will be more much going on before they recover the painting if they do. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kriver
Hi,
This chapter sort of just
ends very abruptly
The chapter is OK
just not much action
Over all it is a good chapter
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Hi,
This chapter sort of just
ends very abruptly
The chapter is OK
just not much action
Over all it is a good chapter
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well-written Shauna doesn't realise the danger that she could be in I but I do understand her reason for many years the painting hasn't been with the family why bother now, lets hope Anderson can protect her from the enemy I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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This is well-written Shauna doesn't realise the danger that she could be in I but I do understand her reason for many years the painting hasn't been with the family why bother now, lets hope Anderson can protect her from the enemy I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Heidi M
Whether Shana is aware of it or not, she has a target on her back. She may not realize it, but Drew does. And now he is tasked with keeping her and her family safe, as well as trying to get the painting back to its rightful owners.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Whether Shana is aware of it or not, she has a target on her back. She may not realize it, but Drew does. And now he is tasked with keeping her and her family safe, as well as trying to get the painting back to its rightful owners.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
