Get Up and Dance!
Never challenge an old dancin' fool.74 total reviews
Comment from ameen786
Hey Sis, this is an excellent entry my friend with a great theme to accept challenges we face, be it dancing or facing other issues...we'll never know till we try; the repetition of ,"Get up and dance,"--adds to the joy of reading; thank you for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Hey Sis, this is an excellent entry my friend with a great theme to accept challenges we face, be it dancing or facing other issues...we'll never know till we try; the repetition of ,"Get up and dance,"--adds to the joy of reading; thank you for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Yes, Aneen, I shocked myself this morning when I sang and danced my poem around the house. I love the catchy chorus, "Get up and dance!" Thank you for yourvteview and for wishing me success in both contests..
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your story/poem contest entry. It flowed smoothly and I could feel my toes tapping. Thank you for sharing. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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I enjoyed reading your story/poem contest entry. It flowed smoothly and I could feel my toes tapping. Thank you for sharing. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Barbara, for your review of my toe-tapping story/poem and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from Janet Foor
I love it Andre. This was a joy to read. I love to dance and my husband has two left feet and no rhythm. At weddings and gatherings, I'm always dancing with my sister or the little ones.
Good luck with your 2017 Dancing Poetry Contest. I think you have a winner.
Blessings and happy Sunday.
Janet
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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I love it Andre. This was a joy to read. I love to dance and my husband has two left feet and no rhythm. At weddings and gatherings, I'm always dancing with my sister or the little ones.
Good luck with your 2017 Dancing Poetry Contest. I think you have a winner.
Blessings and happy Sunday.
Janet
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Janet, for your generous, six star review and wishing me success in the contest. The little ones are great on the dance floor! They inspire us.
Comment from gramalot8
Sis Cat... Ha ha ha... you have so described me. I admit... I'm guilty! I am a great chair dancer.... Lol. Maybe I'll try harder at next wedding to get up and really enjoy that dance! Thanks for sharing this with us. â?¤
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Sis Cat... Ha ha ha... you have so described me. I admit... I'm guilty! I am a great chair dancer.... Lol. Maybe I'll try harder at next wedding to get up and really enjoy that dance! Thanks for sharing this with us. â?¤
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Yes, gramalot8, I was a chair dancer until recently. Thank you for your review. Get up and dance at the next wedding!
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Cat. Good luck in the contest. Love the theme and content. You've hit the nail on the head with your delightful and upbeat poem. I've experienced just the circumstance you speak of her--bobbing the head and feet moving under the table at a wedding. Great job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Hi Cat. Good luck in the contest. Love the theme and content. You've hit the nail on the head with your delightful and upbeat poem. I've experienced just the circumstance you speak of her--bobbing the head and feet moving under the table at a wedding. Great job. Marilyn
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Yes, Marilyn, until recently I was bobbing my head and tapping my feet. I am glad I finally got up and danced. It gave me a great idea for this poem! Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from Grasshopper2
Andre,
You start your story with a positive image.
I see you sitting there
slumped in your banquet chair,
snap, snapping your fingers
as the wedding lingers,
and the bridesmaids and grooms-
men jive about the room.
Get up and dance!
Get up and dance!
Now, you're not fooling me.
NITPICK HERE -
With my [EYES] I can see
HERE IS WHY -
It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase [WITH MY EYES]. Consider adding a comma.
EDITED -
With my EYES, I can see
Excellent flow stanza to stanza.
that you're a dancin' fool.
You come here, mind the rule!
You use real-world speech here.
Can't stand no wallflower
whose head bobs for hours.
Repeating verse adds to the drama.
Get up and dance!
Get up and dance!
You use real-world speech here.
What you say? You're too old
and your knees getting cold,
then your back's out of whack?
What's next--a heart attack?
Pretty please. Just one song.
It won't last very long.
Get up and dance!
Get up and dance!
Now, you got up and danced,
grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat,
and the crowds gathered 'round
as we grooved to the sounds.
Got up and danced!
Got up and danced!
Whew! We've danced for hours.
Where'd you get the power?
I can't keep up no more.
My butt will hit the floor!
I got to get some sleep
and please don't you repeat,
Get up and dance!
Get up and dance!
Fun to read and watch the story unfold. Good luck in the contest.
Michael
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Andre,
You start your story with a positive image.
I see you sitting there
slumped in your banquet chair,
snap, snapping your fingers
as the wedding lingers,
and the bridesmaids and grooms-
men jive about the room.
Get up and dance!
Get up and dance!
Now, you're not fooling me.
NITPICK HERE -
With my [EYES] I can see
HERE IS WHY -
It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase [WITH MY EYES]. Consider adding a comma.
EDITED -
With my EYES, I can see
Excellent flow stanza to stanza.
that you're a dancin' fool.
You come here, mind the rule!
You use real-world speech here.
Can't stand no wallflower
whose head bobs for hours.
Repeating verse adds to the drama.
Get up and dance!
Get up and dance!
You use real-world speech here.
What you say? You're too old
and your knees getting cold,
then your back's out of whack?
What's next--a heart attack?
Pretty please. Just one song.
It won't last very long.
Get up and dance!
Get up and dance!
Now, you got up and danced,
grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat,
and the crowds gathered 'round
as we grooved to the sounds.
Got up and danced!
Got up and danced!
Whew! We've danced for hours.
Where'd you get the power?
I can't keep up no more.
My butt will hit the floor!
I got to get some sleep
and please don't you repeat,
Get up and dance!
Get up and dance!
Fun to read and watch the story unfold. Good luck in the contest.
Michael
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Michael, for your detailed, stanza-by-stanza review and analysis. I will add the comma. I wanted a poem that used real world speech like that of people I knew at the wedding. This ground the poem down to earth. I am glad you found this fun to read.
Thank you also for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a brilliant piece of poetry dear andre! it is positively motivating and plays a song of small events that change your way of thinking. bravo.
thnak you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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this is a brilliant piece of poetry dear andre! it is positively motivating and plays a song of small events that change your way of thinking. bravo.
thnak you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Rebekka, for your generous, six star review. I wanted to craft a poem that moved out of my comfort zone of haiku and tanka, and try a rhymed poem that moved and played like a song. Thank you for your good blessing as well.
Comment from Quantum Traveler
Once a Dancer...Always a Dancer...Sis Cat.
The Wall Flowers are Still Hangin' Out on the Wall.
Girls on One Side of the Room...Guys on the Other Side.
Kudos to your Cousin Carolyn.
Get Up and Dance...Excellent Image...the Writing Pulled it all Together.
It has Rhythm...It has an Outstanding Dance Beat and Pace.
I Can Hear the Music of the Band.
It Got Me Dancin' Sis Cat.
Very Well Done...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Once a Dancer...Always a Dancer...Sis Cat.
The Wall Flowers are Still Hangin' Out on the Wall.
Girls on One Side of the Room...Guys on the Other Side.
Kudos to your Cousin Carolyn.
Get Up and Dance...Excellent Image...the Writing Pulled it all Together.
It has Rhythm...It has an Outstanding Dance Beat and Pace.
I Can Hear the Music of the Band.
It Got Me Dancin' Sis Cat.
Very Well Done...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Phil, for your generous, six star review. I especially like these words:
"It has Rhythm...It has an Outstanding Dance Beat and Pace.
I Can Hear the Music of the Band."
Given that I "composed" the poem to be read aloud as a group of dancers dance to it and a band plays, it was important that it has a beat. I am glad it got you dancin'.
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Outstanding Sis Cat.
It's Nice to see a Posting where Everything Comes Together.
This is one of those Postings...Q.T...Phil.
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Phil, I am still flabbergasted that I pulled this off. Thanks for your encouragement.
Andre
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I think you got everybody Up and Off the Couch for this one Andre.
Gotta' Love It when that Happen.
The Best to You My Friend...Q.T...Phil
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Oh, thank you, Phil! I am glad my song and dance poem got everyone off the couch.
Comment from rama devi
This is charming, dear friend. groovy b eat...dancing poetic feet. Fun story line...with a twist in the 'tired' closing!
Great slant rhymes, especially:
Can't stand no wallflower
whose head bobs for hours.
Sounds super read aloud.
Also loved this:
What you say? You're too old
and your knees getting cold,
then your back's out of whack?
What's next--a heart attack?
Pretty please. Just one song.
It won't last very long.
Won't last long?? Ha ha ha!
Should do well in the contest.
Great presentation too.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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This is charming, dear friend. groovy b eat...dancing poetic feet. Fun story line...with a twist in the 'tired' closing!
Great slant rhymes, especially:
Can't stand no wallflower
whose head bobs for hours.
Sounds super read aloud.
Also loved this:
What you say? You're too old
and your knees getting cold,
then your back's out of whack?
What's next--a heart attack?
Pretty please. Just one song.
It won't last very long.
Won't last long?? Ha ha ha!
Should do well in the contest.
Great presentation too.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Rama, for your generous review. Because I will have to read this poem aloud before a thousand people as dancers dance on stage and the band plays it was important for me to practice and revise by reading my poem aloud over and over again. Once again, thanks.
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It's lyrical and wonderful. It'll sounds SUPER! :-)))
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Yes, Rama, it's amazing. I sung my poem in the shower!
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Yay! :)
Comment from RGstar
I hope this does well for you there. Like the movement. I am not sure if you are allowed to supply image with, but it gives a good visual to the theme.
As said, good movement to this.
Good luck in this competition also.
RGstar
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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I hope this does well for you there. Like the movement. I am not sure if you are allowed to supply image with, but it gives a good visual to the theme.
As said, good movement to this.
Good luck in this competition also.
RGstar
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, RG, for your review of my poem that has movement. The Dancing Poetry Contest do not allow pictures with submissions because they will create the moving picture by getting dancers on stage to dance to the winning poem as a band plays. Thank you also for wishing me success in both competitions.
