Get Up and Dance!
Never challenge an old dancin' fool.74 total reviews
Comment from Rubylou
Great entry for this contest. I can see myself as the wallflower. I am not comfortable dancing-only with my grandchildren. They can;t tell the difference. LOL
I really like the upbeat flow of your words. I could sense the snapping of fingers as the story unfolds. I also like the repeated line, " Get up and dance."
Rubylou
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Great entry for this contest. I can see myself as the wallflower. I am not comfortable dancing-only with my grandchildren. They can;t tell the difference. LOL
I really like the upbeat flow of your words. I could sense the snapping of fingers as the story unfolds. I also like the repeated line, " Get up and dance."
Rubylou
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Rubylou, for your review. I am glad you like the upbeat flow of my words and can sense the finger snapping.
Comment from bookishfabler
This was fun. I thought the whole time I was reading it that it could be made into a song. Have you ever thought of writing lyrics?
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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This was fun. I thought the whole time I was reading it that it could be made into a song. Have you ever thought of writing lyrics?
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Heidi, I designed the poem to be read aloud and accompanied by music for the Dancing Poetry Contest. In effect, these words are already lyrics. Thank you for your review of a fun poem.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Dancing can change your life. What I've learned is, it's not about how good you are technically. It's about your soul coming through and about having fun.
Thanks for a great poem and artwork.
Bill~
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Dancing can change your life. What I've learned is, it's not about how good you are technically. It's about your soul coming through and about having fun.
Thanks for a great poem and artwork.
Bill~
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Yes, Bill, dancing is about your soul coming through and about having fun. I hope I conveyed that in my poem. Thank you for your review.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Sis Cat, A fun poem illustrated with vivid imagery. I can see the wedding scene, the dance floor, and the people sitting around the tables. Your poem is fast paced and has a quick musical beat. I especially liked:
Now, you got up and danced,
grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat,
and the crowds gathered 'round
as we grooved to the sounds.
(Fantastic - Vibrant. I think that I see the crowd clapping their hands.)
S, your poem made me smile. Silky rhyming. Wonderful complementary artwork choice. A pleasure to read. Good luck in the FS and SF poetry contests. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Hello Sis Cat, A fun poem illustrated with vivid imagery. I can see the wedding scene, the dance floor, and the people sitting around the tables. Your poem is fast paced and has a quick musical beat. I especially liked:
Now, you got up and danced,
grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat,
and the crowds gathered 'round
as we grooved to the sounds.
(Fantastic - Vibrant. I think that I see the crowd clapping their hands.)
S, your poem made me smile. Silky rhyming. Wonderful complementary artwork choice. A pleasure to read. Good luck in the FS and SF poetry contests. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, LateBloomer, for your generous, six star review. I surprised myself when, after much coaxing, I danced for hours. I am glad my poem made you smile. Thank you also for wishing me success in the contests.
Comment from June Sargent
Great story in a poem - fun and inspiring for us older folks to just get up and dance! As long we still have the ability to hear the music, then we should get off that thing and just - dance! Thank you for sharing. I loved it.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Great story in a poem - fun and inspiring for us older folks to just get up and dance! As long we still have the ability to hear the music, then we should get off that thing and just - dance! Thank you for sharing. I loved it.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, June, we should get off that thing and dance. Thank you for your generous review of a "great story in a poem."
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Sis, I really like this poem. It is well written in language that suits the theme.
I particularly like the following stanza -
Now, you got up and danced,
grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat
and the crowds gathered 'round
as we grooved to the sounds........ 'til our flesh released heat, Great line - clever!
Good contest entry - Good Luck - warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Hi Sis, I really like this poem. It is well written in language that suits the theme.
I particularly like the following stanza -
Now, you got up and danced,
grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat
and the crowds gathered 'round
as we grooved to the sounds........ 'til our flesh released heat, Great line - clever!
Good contest entry - Good Luck - warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Dorothy, for your review, warm regards, and for wishing me success in the contests. Yes, reviewers love the stanza you quoted.
Comment from joeruptak
I am old and gray
but I really danced today
I danced like I did once before
my legs are tired and my feet are sore.
This is a wonderful poem. As I read it I felt as if I were right there
thank you for a wonderful read and great memories
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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I am old and gray
but I really danced today
I danced like I did once before
my legs are tired and my feet are sore.
This is a wonderful poem. As I read it I felt as if I were right there
thank you for a wonderful read and great memories
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, joeruptak, for your generous, six star review of my poem which brought back great memories. Thank you also for starting your review off with rhymes.
Comment from Bucketlist
I've tried twice, but the system repelled it for brevity. So I'm adding more words,.I was totally amused by this poem. You described me to a T. My younger years too shy and now I can't because of Parkinson's. Good advice in this poem. Nothing to dispute or change. Thanks
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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I've tried twice, but the system repelled it for brevity. So I'm adding more words,.I was totally amused by this poem. You described me to a T. My younger years too shy and now I can't because of Parkinson's. Good advice in this poem. Nothing to dispute or change. Thanks
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Bucketlist, for your encouraging review. I am glad my poem "tototally amused" you and brought back memories.
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De rien, or je vous enpris - as they say in French
Comment from c_lucas
Time to give in to aging can be delayed by exercising. This is very well written with an interesting flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Time to give in to aging can be delayed by exercising. This is very well written with an interesting flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, c_lucas, for your review. I am glad you found this a good read. We all need to exercise more
Comment from cumulus365
This is a nice story poem you achieved. By using the repeated verse "Get up and Dance" between the stanzas give the feeling of the music rhythm playing. I like the beginning describing the setting and the mood. Your six-line stanzas are well done with end rhyme pattern of aa, bb, make it nice to read. I hear music in your verse grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat, from alliteration "f" and assonance if "e", You conveyed in stanza 4 that you ended up having a very good time whereas in the beginning in stanza 1 you hesitated to join. You show rather tell which is a good poetic technique for the readers to watch your wild side in stanza 7. I like your technique of the crowds gathered 'round/as we grooved to the sounds. I like your using metaphor dancing fool to increase the meaning of your fun side. You captured your vision of transferring your excitement to the reader of this poem. You picked a nice topic for the entry contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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This is a nice story poem you achieved. By using the repeated verse "Get up and Dance" between the stanzas give the feeling of the music rhythm playing. I like the beginning describing the setting and the mood. Your six-line stanzas are well done with end rhyme pattern of aa, bb, make it nice to read. I hear music in your verse grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat, from alliteration "f" and assonance if "e", You conveyed in stanza 4 that you ended up having a very good time whereas in the beginning in stanza 1 you hesitated to join. You show rather tell which is a good poetic technique for the readers to watch your wild side in stanza 7. I like your technique of the crowds gathered 'round/as we grooved to the sounds. I like your using metaphor dancing fool to increase the meaning of your fun side. You captured your vision of transferring your excitement to the reader of this poem. You picked a nice topic for the entry contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Cumulus, for your review. That stanza where I finally got up and danced is reviewers' favorite because they can see it. I strived to transfer my excitement to the reader. Thank you also for wishing me the best with this contest entry.
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You are welcome. I hope sometime you could give me a critique to see what I miss. All the best.
