Get Up and Dance!
Never challenge an old dancin' fool.74 total reviews
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Andre this is terrific, I love it, the energy, the whole wedding seen. The third stanza between the get up and dance cracked me up. lol "backs out of whack, what's next heart attack". lol I wish you lots of luck in the dancing poetry contest. That pretty amazing. ~Kerry~
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Andre this is terrific, I love it, the energy, the whole wedding seen. The third stanza between the get up and dance cracked me up. lol "backs out of whack, what's next heart attack". lol I wish you lots of luck in the dancing poetry contest. That pretty amazing. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Kerry, for your amazing review of an amazing, energetic poem. Thank you also for wishing me success in the contest.
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Your most welcome Andre
Comment from artemis53
I love the surprise within this piece as well as the dialect. Geez. I haven't heard mention of James Brown in years. All I can think of is "I feel good' which was a traveling song of mine ;)
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I love the surprise within this piece as well as the dialect. Geez. I haven't heard mention of James Brown in years. All I can think of is "I feel good' which was a traveling song of mine ;)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, Artemis, I studied the dialect poetry of Paul Lawrence Dunbar's "In the Morning" and James Brown's funky soul song "Get Up Offa That Thing" to create the beat and rhythm. Thank you for your review.
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed your poem "Get Up and Dance". We all have rhythm and dancing comes naturally to a toddler, they will bob to music. You told your story well. Your picture reminded me of the old 'Rock-n-Roll' days.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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I enjoyed your poem "Get Up and Dance". We all have rhythm and dancing comes naturally to a toddler, they will bob to music. You told your story well. Your picture reminded me of the old 'Rock-n-Roll' days.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Marybell, for your review and for wishing me success.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from ceramic
Tells of a very common and realistic situation, in this instance resolved in a delightful way. Underlying is the idea that we should live life to the fullest and not be bystanders. A simple theme done well.
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Tells of a very common and realistic situation, in this instance resolved in a delightful way. Underlying is the idea that we should live life to the fullest and not be bystanders. A simple theme done well.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, ceramic, I am so glad I stopped being a bystander and got on that dance floor. It was good for my heart and soul and gave me a great idea for this poem. Thank you for your review.
Comment from lyenochka
Love the energy in this poem! It does make me want to get up and dance! And then after the exhaustion, it switches to the past tense "Got up and danced!" Great music and rhythm and rhyme in this poem!
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Love the energy in this poem! It does make me want to get up and dance! And then after the exhaustion, it switches to the past tense "Got up and danced!" Great music and rhythm and rhyme in this poem!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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lyenochka, I am amazed that I pulled this poem off given that I usually write haiku, but I had so much pent up energy within me. Given that I composed it for the Dancing Poetry Contest I wanted a poem with rhythm that makes people want to "Get up and dance." Thanks again.
Comment from Jay Squires
Ha! Your cousin should be careful what she asks for. Confidence is a strange thing, eh, Andre? Ya kinda have to grow into it. I'm going to my 60th high school reunion in July. I know they'll have music ... and I am NO dancer. It's an ego thing too, isn't it? I'm sure everyone's watching and laughing at me. Ach! I wasted so much in high school by listening to that inner voice.
Your poem is so freeing and fun, Andre. I particularly liked the fulcrum change of "Got up and danced!/ Got up and danced!"
And this:
Now, you got up and danced,
grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat,
and the crowds gathered 'round
as we grooved to the sounds.
THAT was the FREEING moment. Before were the doubts and excuses, as heard by your cousin. But, wow, the freedom stanza before:
Got up and danced!
Got up and danced!
Bravo, Andre!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Ha! Your cousin should be careful what she asks for. Confidence is a strange thing, eh, Andre? Ya kinda have to grow into it. I'm going to my 60th high school reunion in July. I know they'll have music ... and I am NO dancer. It's an ego thing too, isn't it? I'm sure everyone's watching and laughing at me. Ach! I wasted so much in high school by listening to that inner voice.
Your poem is so freeing and fun, Andre. I particularly liked the fulcrum change of "Got up and danced!/ Got up and danced!"
And this:
Now, you got up and danced,
grabbed my hands and romanced
our four feet to the beat
'til our flesh released heat,
and the crowds gathered 'round
as we grooved to the sounds.
THAT was the FREEING moment. Before were the doubts and excuses, as heard by your cousin. But, wow, the freedom stanza before:
Got up and danced!
Got up and danced!
Bravo, Andre!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Jay, for your generous, six star review. I was going to skip the Dancing Poetry Contest this year because I did not have any recent personal experiences with dancing, but then I recalled the wedding last February and how cousin Carolyn bugged be to stop snapping my fingers and bobbing my head, but to get up and dance. When I finally did, I outdanced her and it was hard to get me off the floor because I kept returning to dance one more song. For me, it was a freeing experience as expressed in the line "Got up and danced."
And I hope you do the same at your sixtieth high school reunion.
Thanks again, Jay.
Comment from Hitcher
You and me must be cut from the same cloth friend, I do love dancing and once I hit the floor, it's mine until the last song plays : ) I thoroughly enjoyed your fun, energetic story in poem and wish you all the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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You and me must be cut from the same cloth friend, I do love dancing and once I hit the floor, it's mine until the last song plays : ) I thoroughly enjoyed your fun, energetic story in poem and wish you all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Hitcher, for your review. I find it hard to pull away from the dance floor because I wanted to dance all night, regardless of my age. I am glad you enjoyed my "fun, energetic story." Thank you for wishing me success in the contests.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Sis Cat *** got my favs too - dig that funky music - and poets - go way down
and do the twist - oh yahhhh! I was a dancing disco queen in the days. I danced
3-6 hours a night for fun. Hope you win this contest. I understand how you can
desire to dance and fret when you don't have a partner. Keep on dancin' and have fun. Seems like all the muscles feel better! Get up and dance!
Yes, my daughter discovered the alcohol and then she was dancing with the ladies around the dance floor. I had to drive home on a snowy night in April, Colorado. I drank ice tea. There were three anniversaries that night and love in the air.
God bless. I love to fly into your poetic nest! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Sis Cat *** got my favs too - dig that funky music - and poets - go way down
and do the twist - oh yahhhh! I was a dancing disco queen in the days. I danced
3-6 hours a night for fun. Hope you win this contest. I understand how you can
desire to dance and fret when you don't have a partner. Keep on dancin' and have fun. Seems like all the muscles feel better! Get up and dance!
Yes, my daughter discovered the alcohol and then she was dancing with the ladies around the dance floor. I had to drive home on a snowy night in April, Colorado. I drank ice tea. There were three anniversaries that night and love in the air.
God bless. I love to fly into your poetic nest! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, flylikeaneagle, for your generous, six star review. I shocked myself at the wedding when, after all of the excuses I gave, I got up and danced for hours. I love dancing so much and wish to do more of it. I am glad your dancing queen heart felt the funky beat in my poem. Thank you for your review. your memories, and for wishing me success in the contests.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I love the interaction of the repeating lines giving the piece a coaxing. The next to the last stanza was my favorite of them on the floor as others gathered to watch, that I can picture in my mind over all the rest. Some forced rhymes that worked in place.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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I love the interaction of the repeating lines giving the piece a coaxing. The next to the last stanza was my favorite of them on the floor as others gathered to watch, that I can picture in my mind over all the rest. Some forced rhymes that worked in place.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, for your generous review of my poem, repetitions, forced rhymes, and all. I am glad you liked the next to the last stanza.
Comment from nuthead
Fabulous use of rhyme and meter to create a snap-snap-snapping pace. The language is simple, real, believable. I can visualize the whole scenario playing out. A great memory to put to "music".
The refrain/chorus, "Get up and dance!" pulls the reader back again and again to the vivid visual of the "wallflower" being summoned to dance. The final refrain perfectly juxtaposed.
Lovely. Best wishes in the contests!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Fabulous use of rhyme and meter to create a snap-snap-snapping pace. The language is simple, real, believable. I can visualize the whole scenario playing out. A great memory to put to "music".
The refrain/chorus, "Get up and dance!" pulls the reader back again and again to the vivid visual of the "wallflower" being summoned to dance. The final refrain perfectly juxtaposed.
Lovely. Best wishes in the contests!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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sjharshenin, I am amazed that I pulled this poem off. Two days ago I considered not submitting to either contests because I thought my haiku mind lacked ideas, but then I remembered the wedding dance and I was off. Thank you for your review of my poem for its "Fabulous use of rhyme and meter to create a snap-snap-snapping pace."
