Get Up and Dance!
Never challenge an old dancin' fool.74 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is a delightfully written story poem. Good luck in the contest. My oldest daughter started taking ballroom dancing classes about 12 years ago and she love it. She even went to Itaaly with her studio for a world competition and won a silver medal Patricia
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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This is a delightfully written story poem. Good luck in the contest. My oldest daughter started taking ballroom dancing classes about 12 years ago and she love it. She even went to Itaaly with her studio for a world competition and won a silver medal Patricia
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Wow, Patricia, that's great news about your daughter! Thank you for your review of my "delightfully written story poem."
Comment from Neonewman
What a wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered for this awesome little writing prompt Sis Cat. It's absolutely whimsical and elegant in flow. Best of luck in the votes.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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What a wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered for this awesome little writing prompt Sis Cat. It's absolutely whimsical and elegant in flow. Best of luck in the votes.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Steve, for your review of "a wonderfully crafted piece." I wanted a poem that was fun, humorous, and had a beat. Thank you for wishing me the best in the votes.
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You certainly delivered my friend. The pleasure was all mine.
Comment from Gma48
I love the vitality of this poem. You can feel the beat as the poem moves & unfolds the story. We can all relate!
In the last full stanza, the rhyme between ...sleep and repeat is a little weak. My suggestion would be .....Got to get off my feet and please don't you repeat. I love the refrain and how it changed when the dancing occurred.
Enjoyed it.
Gma48
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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I love the vitality of this poem. You can feel the beat as the poem moves & unfolds the story. We can all relate!
In the last full stanza, the rhyme between ...sleep and repeat is a little weak. My suggestion would be .....Got to get off my feet and please don't you repeat. I love the refrain and how it changed when the dancing occurred.
Enjoyed it.
Gma48
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Gma48, for your review and rhyme suggestion. I took your idea and changed it to
I got to rest my feet
and please don't you repeat,
Either way, I feel it works better than "I got to get some sleep."
Thank you for the review and suggestion.
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Gma84, I changed my mind and agree with your suggestion because it is more fun when spoken aloud by a tired dancer:
Got to get off my feet
and please don?t you repeat,
Thanks again for the valuable suggestion.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Andre. This is different and a fun read from start to finish. Your explanation after the poem is interesting. did you read it alreadyor am I misunderstanding? If you did how did it go? Bless you, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Hi, Andre. This is different and a fun read from start to finish. Your explanation after the poem is interesting. did you read it alreadyor am I misunderstanding? If you did how did it go? Bless you, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Bob, I am submitting my poem tomorrow. I will hear in August if it wins. Thank you for your review. I am glad you found this a different and a fun read.
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That's okay isn't it, Andre? That I found it fun, I mean?
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Yes, yes, yes, Bob, it's more than okay you found this fun. It is required and is the main criteria I used to write this.
Comment from estory
I thought this was great. You had a great upbeat tone, and the rhythm was quick and up tempo. I loved all these 'Get up and dance! Get up and dance!" choruses reprised throughout this piece. It kind of mimicked the shuffling of the feet in the steps of the dance on the floor. nice touch of humor in that your partner starts off not wanting to dance, and then outdances you. nice little twist. estory
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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I thought this was great. You had a great upbeat tone, and the rhythm was quick and up tempo. I loved all these 'Get up and dance! Get up and dance!" choruses reprised throughout this piece. It kind of mimicked the shuffling of the feet in the steps of the dance on the floor. nice touch of humor in that your partner starts off not wanting to dance, and then outdances you. nice little twist. estory
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, story, for your review. I am glad you found the tone upbeat and the humor touching.
Comment from Pantygynt
I hope for your sake they don't change their style
and go fox-trotting mile after mile
but if they keep boppin'
and you not stoppin'
that prize you'll be coppin'
in a little while.
Best of luck in the big one.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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I hope for your sake they don't change their style
and go fox-trotting mile after mile
but if they keep boppin'
and you not stoppin'
that prize you'll be coppin'
in a little while.
Best of luck in the big one.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Pantygynt, for your humorous, rhymed review and for wishing the best in the big one.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
What a motivational write, it really does make you want to get up and dance.
A fast beat throughout which pulls the reader along beautifully.
Have a great evening
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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What a motivational write, it really does make you want to get up and dance.
A fast beat throughout which pulls the reader along beautifully.
Have a great evening
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, YNWA, for your encouraging review of my motivational write. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written upbeat poem it is hard when you go to a wedding without a mate to find someone there to Dance with that ends up in a night of great dancing until one cannot anymore.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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A very well-written upbeat poem it is hard when you go to a wedding without a mate to find someone there to Dance with that ends up in a night of great dancing until one cannot anymore.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, Sandra, weddings are nights of great dancing. I danced solo, in couples, in groups--I don't care as long as my feet kept moving. Thank you for your review of my upbeat poem.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Andre, this is just such a fun poem. I love it. The rhythm is outstanding, wonderful. You must have such fun writing this. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Hi Andre, this is just such a fun poem. I love it. The rhythm is outstanding, wonderful. You must have such fun writing this. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, Ulla, I had fun writing it. It was my number one criteria. If it wasn't fun, I through it out. I'm going for a good rhythm and laughs. Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best.
Comment from nomi338
The outstanding excellence of this piece shows that you put in work, that plus your undisputed skill as a writer combined with sheer inspiration to make this piece so good I was about to accuse you of plagiarism. It is so good that I was surprised and just a wee bit jealous to find that there exists a writer today that is as gifted as Dunbar, Hughes, and other giants. My hat is completely off to you my brother. Quite clearly, you have outdone yourself
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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The outstanding excellence of this piece shows that you put in work, that plus your undisputed skill as a writer combined with sheer inspiration to make this piece so good I was about to accuse you of plagiarism. It is so good that I was surprised and just a wee bit jealous to find that there exists a writer today that is as gifted as Dunbar, Hughes, and other giants. My hat is completely off to you my brother. Quite clearly, you have outdone yourself
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, nomi388, thank you for your compliment of comparing me to Dunbar and Hughes. I studied Dunbar's "In the Morning" and read Hughes jazz poems to figure out how they achieved it. I grew up hearing their poems in my house as my mother was a poet herself and she had us recite "In the Morning" at school. I hated it then as a kid, but I love it now as an adult who writes poetry. I want to write poems that people will read and enjoy a hundred years from now. Look what these folks did for "In the Morning."
This is the type of poetry I want to write--poetry that people will embrace and take into their own heart.
Thank you for your generous, six star review and compliments on my writing.
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No worries, it was well deserved.
