Tanka Waka
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "tanka (full Luna lullaby)"A collection of Japanese short poetry
16 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Gypsy, I love this poem...times I remember and wish I could have back...sigh...just don't ever leave me....very nicely written sweet girl...I love your poem....and love your picture...love ya you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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HI Gypsy, I love this poem...times I remember and wish I could have back...sigh...just don't ever leave me....very nicely written sweet girl...I love your poem....and love your picture...love ya you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much, my dear friend, I know what you mean :( ... sigh ...
Love you back... mwah
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
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you are always so welcome sweet angel...big love xxoo
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is a lovely and romantic Tanka. Nothing more lovely than being with the one your love under a full moon on a warm summer night.
A tiny suggestion:
on Silver Lake on summer's eve
See what you think
Hugs, Lura
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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This is a lovely and romantic Tanka. Nothing more lovely than being with the one your love under a full moon on a warm summer night.
A tiny suggestion:
on Silver Lake on summer's eve
See what you think
Hugs, Lura
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much, my dear friend, I will Silver Lake is a place and I don't want to repeat the word 'to' so close together. Thank you, though.
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
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sorry, I did that wrong
the sentence as is except Summer's instead of Summer
Not focussing well.
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I know the feeling. :(
I love you, Sister Lura. I will be praying for you today.
Comment from cumulus365
You made this tanka version very easy to understand which makes me want to give it a try. The second part of the tanka is very loving. The last line gets me on the word "deliciously", I never thought that word can be applied to a feeling of nothing better. But I guess love means the feel is so good that one can devour it. Thanks for sharing your creativity.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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You made this tanka version very easy to understand which makes me want to give it a try. The second part of the tanka is very loving. The last line gets me on the word "deliciously", I never thought that word can be applied to a feeling of nothing better. But I guess love means the feel is so good that one can devour it. Thanks for sharing your creativity.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much, my dear friend,
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your love poem in the tanka form, embedded in the evocative artwork. Your alliteration of "l's" and "s's" added to the deliciousness! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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I enjoyed your love poem in the tanka form, embedded in the evocative artwork. Your alliteration of "l's" and "s's" added to the deliciousness! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much, my dear friend,
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
Comment from sandy montgomery
This poem reminded me of many camping trips with my hubby. Made me smile. Iove the art you used in your presentation. Your form was perfect and i enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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This poem reminded me of many camping trips with my hubby. Made me smile. Iove the art you used in your presentation. Your form was perfect and i enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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This is fictional Thank you, my friend,
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
Comment from Ric Myworld
A canoe ride with that special someone on a moonlit night, the sights, sounds, and that little, hint, of something sweet from warm breathing, tickling one's neck. Thanks for sharing another fine poem. :-)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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A canoe ride with that special someone on a moonlit night, the sights, sounds, and that little, hint, of something sweet from warm breathing, tickling one's neck. Thanks for sharing another fine poem. :-)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend, I always enjoy your reviews because they are kind and helpful.
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
Comment from Hitcher
A little slice of Tanka romance, the warm and fuzzy kind... Nice! The accompanying artwork was pretty cool too Gypsy. I live by the biggest fresh water lake in the southern hemisphere, Lake Taupo, google it, it will take your breath away : )
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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A little slice of Tanka romance, the warm and fuzzy kind... Nice! The accompanying artwork was pretty cool too Gypsy. I live by the biggest fresh water lake in the southern hemisphere, Lake Taupo, google it, it will take your breath away : )
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend.
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
Comment from Ulla
Ay ay ay ay, Gitana. This is just so sweet. What a lovely tanka describing the true love between two persons. There is nothing better. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Ay ay ay ay, Gitana. This is just so sweet. What a lovely tanka describing the true love between two persons. There is nothing better. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Thank you, bonita, you are always so kind to me with your reviews, I really appreciate them and you.
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
I immediately thought of our recently deceased poet here, Luna, but your poem is fine on its own with well-chosen words which convey a romantic picture and mood. Poem made me say "ahh" because of its well-phrased sentiments of being deliciously content with ones lover. A tanka in fine form. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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I immediately thought of our recently deceased poet here, Luna, but your poem is fine on its own with well-chosen words which convey a romantic picture and mood. Poem made me say "ahh" because of its well-phrased sentiments of being deliciously content with ones lover. A tanka in fine form. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Hello, my friend, thank you very much for the lovely review, you always make me happy with your kind words.
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
Comment from judiverse
This does suggest contentment. Lovely picture of summer evening on the peaceful lake. Love makes the picture complete, and the narrator wishes for nothing more. Silver Lake is a great name. It suggests the appearance of the moon shining down. Excellent flow. Beautifully done. judi
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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This does suggest contentment. Lovely picture of summer evening on the peaceful lake. Love makes the picture complete, and the narrator wishes for nothing more. Silver Lake is a great name. It suggests the appearance of the moon shining down. Excellent flow. Beautifully done. judi
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Hello, my friend, thank you very much for the lovely review, you always make me happy with your kind words.
namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~
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You're welcome. Have a wonderful day. judi
