Ducks
A Blank Verse Sonnet26 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
I like your poem, it flows well and has great imagery. I especially like the last couple of lines, very well written. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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I like your poem, it flows well and has great imagery. I especially like the last couple of lines, very well written. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Oliver.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This photo reminded me of a park here in Townsville where we often walk. Lovely descriptive blank verse sonnet (how clever are you) that flows easily as the ducks in the pond.
I like in the 3rd verse how you bring it back to you, the writer, the painter, capturing the scene. Well done Tony, lovely read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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This photo reminded me of a park here in Townsville where we often walk. Lovely descriptive blank verse sonnet (how clever are you) that flows easily as the ducks in the pond.
I like in the 3rd verse how you bring it back to you, the writer, the painter, capturing the scene. Well done Tony, lovely read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Valda, and for pointing out the parts you liked best. Tony.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written blank verse sonnet. A favorite time of day at sunset at the lake. Watching the ducks and their reflection in the last rays of light. They have nothing to say, about the day gone by.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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A very well-written blank verse sonnet. A favorite time of day at sunset at the lake. Watching the ducks and their reflection in the last rays of light. They have nothing to say, about the day gone by.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing my blank verse sonnet, Sandra, and for your summary of it. Tony
Comment from alf collier
I very much enjoyed this blank verse. Not one beat of meter was lost in the delivery and you stayed true to the telling of your words. Such a beautiful overview of the scene that took this reader on a tranquil journey. Thank you!!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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I very much enjoyed this blank verse. Not one beat of meter was lost in the delivery and you stayed true to the telling of your words. Such a beautiful overview of the scene that took this reader on a tranquil journey. Thank you!!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing my blank verse sonnet, Alf, and for your kind comments. Tony
Comment from frierajac
It seems so very proper, almost too much so until the last couplet which puts an edge on it. I especially like the 8th line with the enjambment. It seems odd to me that people often think of ducks as being painted, I do this as well.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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It seems so very proper, almost too much so until the last couplet which puts an edge on it. I especially like the 8th line with the enjambment. It seems odd to me that people often think of ducks as being painted, I do this as well.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Very many thanks, frierjac. I appreciate your comments. Tony
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Tony,
Tackling a blank verse sonnet is quite the task. (One not in my foreseeable future lol) You have pulled this off well and the picture must surely be the inspiration for the poem. I have a question about just one line:
Mine own is drab, composed of grayling shades, (here, a grayling is a fish - so this actually works for me, but then you speak of pen and ink, which leads me to believe that you might have meant graying?) I just wanted to ask in case it was a simple typo.
Thank you for sharing.
Kim
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Hi Tony,
Tackling a blank verse sonnet is quite the task. (One not in my foreseeable future lol) You have pulled this off well and the picture must surely be the inspiration for the poem. I have a question about just one line:
Mine own is drab, composed of grayling shades, (here, a grayling is a fish - so this actually works for me, but then you speak of pen and ink, which leads me to believe that you might have meant graying?) I just wanted to ask in case it was a simple typo.
Thank you for sharing.
Kim
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Very many thanks, frierjac. I appreciate your comments. A rather more cheerful poem than Westminster Bridge! I wasn't sure how 'grayling' would work here. Both the butterfly and the fish are drab - unless the sunlight happens to catch them. Tony
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A grayling is a butterfly, too? How cool! :) Thanks, Tony!
Comment from Irish Rain
Just beautiful again. 'There is no more to say.' Would that we could take life lessons from these wise ducks. I love this Mr. Tony, blessings...
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Just beautiful again. 'There is no more to say.' Would that we could take life lessons from these wise ducks. I love this Mr. Tony, blessings...
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing my blank verse sonnet, Judy, and for the six stars. Best wishes from me and the ducks. Tony
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It is beautiful Mr. Tony...with a great message.
Comment from nuthead
Your poem creates a scene, vivid in imagery. Serene, and contemplative. Sounds like a place I would enjoy very much.
I love the clear imagery in these lines:
"They come in pairs, complete with silhouettes,
each painted likeness mirrored upside down."
So pleased the ducks responded to your question.
"Quack!" Duck speak = Indeed! A good day to you as well, Sir. :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Your poem creates a scene, vivid in imagery. Serene, and contemplative. Sounds like a place I would enjoy very much.
I love the clear imagery in these lines:
"They come in pairs, complete with silhouettes,
each painted likeness mirrored upside down."
So pleased the ducks responded to your question.
"Quack!" Duck speak = Indeed! A good day to you as well, Sir. :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this one, Shirley! Ducks have much to teach us! Tony
Comment from krys123
Greetings, Tony;
-on how well-equipped you make the words flow so smoothly through each line and I've always been fond of blank verse poetry for me as it's a true poetic form.
-I was very fond of your imagery where you had pictured the ducks own reflection
of themselves in the water painting a duality of them swimming along.
-In uplifting and enlightening piece of poetry that brings deity and laughter all during the reading and definitely near the end.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one, Tony, wherever you can find love and share with others.
Alex
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Greetings, Tony;
-on how well-equipped you make the words flow so smoothly through each line and I've always been fond of blank verse poetry for me as it's a true poetic form.
-I was very fond of your imagery where you had pictured the ducks own reflection
of themselves in the water painting a duality of them swimming along.
-In uplifting and enlightening piece of poetry that brings deity and laughter all during the reading and definitely near the end.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one, Tony, wherever you can find love and share with others.
Alex
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this one, Alex! Ducks have much to teach us! Very many thanks for the kind words and six stars. Tony
Comment from IndianaIrish
You always write such wonderfully crafted BV poetry, Tony. Your tale of the ducks is entertaining and I especially liked the couplet in your sonnet. Also, the mirrored likenesses upside down is a wonderful image with superb wording of the ducks on the pond. A wonderful poem to read this morning as the ducks return.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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You always write such wonderfully crafted BV poetry, Tony. Your tale of the ducks is entertaining and I especially liked the couplet in your sonnet. Also, the mirrored likenesses upside down is a wonderful image with superb wording of the ducks on the pond. A wonderful poem to read this morning as the ducks return.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this one, Karyn! Ducks have much to teach us! Very many thanks for the kind words and six stars. Tony
