Dead Butterfly and Sleeping Giant
Prose poem and haiku68 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
I like your Haibun or whatever variation it is.
Very well done, I love both prose and matching haiku. Excellent expressions, well chosen picture, thank you for sharing this, love, Y.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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I like your Haibun or whatever variation it is.
Very well done, I love both prose and matching haiku. Excellent expressions, well chosen picture, thank you for sharing this, love, Y.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Y, for stopping by and reviewing. I feared calling it a Haibun because it did not look like any Haibun I have seen, but reviewers are calling it a Haibun. Thanks again.
Comment from robyn corum
Andre,
This is lovely and so touching. It's always amazing the enormous quantities of love and faith and endurance and encouragement a mother carries -- and I'm a mother! *smile* Bless her heart! And yours, too! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Andre,
This is lovely and so touching. It's always amazing the enormous quantities of love and faith and endurance and encouragement a mother carries -- and I'm a mother! *smile* Bless her heart! And yours, too! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Robyn, and bless your mothering heart, too. Thank you for your review of my "lovely and so touching" tribute. Yes, I am amazed at the love, faith, and endurance my mother possessed.
Comment from royowen
I'm afraid I never had a poetic mum, but she was a skilled and inventive wth crafts, it wasn't till my forties I had a penchant for songwriting. So we share a common discovery. I enjoyed your prose/haiku, it's a beauty, very poignantly penned, and very reflective in its depth, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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I'm afraid I never had a poetic mum, but she was a skilled and inventive wth crafts, it wasn't till my forties I had a penchant for songwriting. So we share a common discovery. I enjoyed your prose/haiku, it's a beauty, very poignantly penned, and very reflective in its depth, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Roy, for your review of my "very poignantly penned" prose/haiku. I appreciate it.
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Well done Andre
Comment from oliver818
What a beautiful poem. I really had a good feeling of what you were describing. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!
Oliver
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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What a beautiful poem. I really had a good feeling of what you were describing. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!
Oliver
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Oliver, for your review. I am glad my poem gave to a good feeling of what I was describing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. I only start writing poetry when I was 56, at first it was not very good and my grammar knowledge was not of the best and I nearly quit after the first month. But my determined attitude drives me to keep on trying.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. I only start writing poetry when I was 56, at first it was not very good and my grammar knowledge was not of the best and I nearly quit after the first month. But my determined attitude drives me to keep on trying.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Sandra, for sharing your late-blooming story. Many reviewers have told me they starter writing in their forties and fifties. Thank you for your review of my "very well-written heartfelt poem."
Comment from dmt1967
This is a delightful story in a prose poem. I think mothers know best springs to mind. I liked the encouragement you got from your mum. It is a pity more mums don't see the true potential of their children. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a delightful story in a prose poem. I think mothers know best springs to mind. I liked the encouragement you got from your mum. It is a pity more mums don't see the true potential of their children. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Yes, dmt1967, I am glad my mother saw my true potential. Thank you for you generous, six star review of "a delightful story in a prose poem."
Comment from Pantygynt
"A rose by any othey name... etc." I suppose we need these titles, haibun, prose poem and the like so we can file our received experiences under the right heading. Whatever you call this makes no difference to what it is and that amounts to a beautiful reading experience. It is a lovely autobiograhical chapter summed up by a first class haiku, and whether you are a sleeping giant waking or not is neither here nor there. I think this is first class stuff.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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"A rose by any othey name... etc." I suppose we need these titles, haibun, prose poem and the like so we can file our received experiences under the right heading. Whatever you call this makes no difference to what it is and that amounts to a beautiful reading experience. It is a lovely autobiograhical chapter summed up by a first class haiku, and whether you are a sleeping giant waking or not is neither here nor there. I think this is first class stuff.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Pantygynt. for your generous review of my "first class stuff." I appreciate it.
Comment from dragonpoet
Mother's sometimes know more than you think they do. This rather long prose poem/haibun shows the love between you two. What a sad picture and how sad that the butterfly doesn't get to watch their offspring grow.
Sorry for your loss.
I also started writing again after my mother died in 2006.
dp
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Mother's sometimes know more than you think they do. This rather long prose poem/haibun shows the love between you two. What a sad picture and how sad that the butterfly doesn't get to watch their offspring grow.
Sorry for your loss.
I also started writing again after my mother died in 2006.
dp
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Isn't that something, DP, that we both started writing after our mothers died? Sometimes it takes a loss like that to awake the "sleeping giant" in their children. Thank you for your review.
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You're welcome.
dp
Comment from Bill Schott
This prose to prism piece says a lot about the enduring love and support of a parent. There are many stories about people who under-performed in school, but excelled in life. Great reflection on your mom and her support.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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This prose to prism piece says a lot about the enduring love and support of a parent. There are many stories about people who under-performed in school, but excelled in life. Great reflection on your mom and her support.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Bill, for your review of my story about "the enduring love and support of a parent."
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Moms wish and like to feel so about their children, many wish their children be before their eyes live in fame and not to leave the cocoons and fly, out of love-belongingness; finest example you've set in the Haiku about sacrifice, God wishes to teach us this way, you're great (no comparison to mom); I liked, enjoyed finest imagery, so 6-star you deserve for.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Moms wish and like to feel so about their children, many wish their children be before their eyes live in fame and not to leave the cocoons and fly, out of love-belongingness; finest example you've set in the Haiku about sacrifice, God wishes to teach us this way, you're great (no comparison to mom); I liked, enjoyed finest imagery, so 6-star you deserve for.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Alcreator Litt Dear, for what you describe as a well-deserved six star review about sacrifice. "God wishes to teach us this way," Thanks again. I am glad you enjoyed the imagery.
