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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku(harsh winds slice through air)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
3 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
harsh winds slice through airsnow falls on land and ocean (missing kireji or pause punctuation)
seagulls still forage (insightful satori)
Hello, my friend, your haiku gives the reader a clear winter mental picture and your words are effective in conveying the message.
Good job!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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harsh winds slice through air
seagulls still forage (insightful satori)
Hello, my friend, your haiku gives the reader a clear winter mental picture and your words are effective in conveying the message.
Good job!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, I feel for the poor gull still having to forage for food no matter what the conditions with land and ocean covered with a hard cold surface****kahpot
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Excellent, I feel for the poor gull still having to forage for food no matter what the conditions with land and ocean covered with a hard cold surface****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good 5-7-5 haiku you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording of the winds, snow falls and the seagulls. Very good imagery with the picture! I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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This is a very good 5-7-5 haiku you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording of the winds, snow falls and the seagulls. Very good imagery with the picture! I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your review.
