Marriage vows
Regrets, rhyming poem12 total reviews
Comment from Harry Smith
The picture selection really complimented the poem. The poem is outstandingly well written with lots and lots of imagery and lots and lots of emotions. You told your life story in a poem. The reader was interested from the beginning until the end. You are a very good writer.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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The picture selection really complimented the poem. The poem is outstandingly well written with lots and lots of imagery and lots and lots of emotions. You told your life story in a poem. The reader was interested from the beginning until the end. You are a very good writer.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Welcome Harry! Well I?m speechless on account of your fantastic review, for which I?m very grateful. I am also delighted that you enjoyed the poem.. Trisha
Comment from Marisela Contona
This is a beautiful piece! It starts out on a positive note of the vows, and then it takes a sad turn, and describes a marriage that was not a happy one. I am sorry.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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This is a beautiful piece! It starts out on a positive note of the vows, and then it takes a sad turn, and describes a marriage that was not a happy one. I am sorry.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you, but I made my mistakes and can?t blame anyone else.. We really didn?t take time to know each other well. But your compliment about my poem was appreciated.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Your well penned verse is has a sad story to tell.
Two lives seemingly wasted, but not so, because you have your children and grandchildren.
Well done and good luck to you for Poem of the Month.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Your well penned verse is has a sad story to tell.
Two lives seemingly wasted, but not so, because you have your children and grandchildren.
Well done and good luck to you for Poem of the Month.
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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How right you are! The sons were my calm in the storms, although the storms were baggage for them.
Thanks for reviewing, Sharon
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your poem "Marriage Vows" You rhymed it well all the way through and you chose a lovely photo. Unfortunately marriage is a gamble, so we must take the good with the bad. Some can be lucky, but both have to work on it.
Best luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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I enjoyed reading your poem "Marriage Vows" You rhymed it well all the way through and you chose a lovely photo. Unfortunately marriage is a gamble, so we must take the good with the bad. Some can be lucky, but both have to work on it.
Best luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Exactly, it takes both to work on it. Unfortunately, if one partner refuses to talk about anything, it's harder. Yes, it is all a gamble, the stakes are often the kids, Do we split and they lose a mother,or father? Or do we stay and love the kids however the relationship is? It's a huge catch 22.
I appreciate your kind review, and great rating.. Marybell. Take care
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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We count our blessings as we can!
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from sue133
This is a heartfelt, honest poem that is easy for me to relate to. You express the emptyness of your marriage eloquently with carefully chosen imagery. I felt so sad at the end and have such deep sympathy for you. If I could help in any way, I would. Susan
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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This is a heartfelt, honest poem that is easy for me to relate to. You express the emptyness of your marriage eloquently with carefully chosen imagery. I felt so sad at the end and have such deep sympathy for you. If I could help in any way, I would. Susan
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Hello Susan. Thank you for your warm comments.. I know it's quite a common theme. True love is hard to find, in fact I think it's only 3-5 % of couples that find it. Don't feel bad for me, I've come to terms with it , and have several people who love me. Yours is a wonderful, selfless thought of help, just your understanding review is plenty. I appreciate your good rating too. Trisha
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I am so glad you have people around who love you. Susan x
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Thank you again, Trisha
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about the high and lows of marriage. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the words and picture. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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This is a very well written poem about the high and lows of marriage. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the words and picture. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much. I love those words "very well written" They mean more to me than the stars. I appreciate your kind comments, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
My first six goes to you for this excellently done piece about the pitfalls of marriage along with the troubles and trials of live and what it does.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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My first six goes to you for this excellently done piece about the pitfalls of marriage along with the troubles and trials of live and what it does.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Wow ! Barb you brought tears to my eyes. The piece has been called 'raw' , 'bit too personal' but i feel proud of my courage to write it. Thanks my friend ,for a great review and SIX stars - that's Utopia for me LOL
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It was exceptional
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I'll take it !!
Comment from MaggieF
Gosh this is a very honest poem, hard to read, it feels a but too personal but refreshing in its openness. Good rhyming scheme. The last line made me want to cry, but you did stay together through thick and thin, you had children and now grandchildren, so something worked. Good luck. MaggieF
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Gosh this is a very honest poem, hard to read, it feels a but too personal but refreshing in its openness. Good rhyming scheme. The last line made me want to cry, but you did stay together through thick and thin, you had children and now grandchildren, so something worked. Good luck. MaggieF
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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It was personal, but there are many others who can relate to it. One of those things in life, The good is the fact we had our kids, and we both loved them,. The ugly is that time has passed, we can't go back. Don't feel bad about the last line. True love only happens to a few couples. Thank you so much for reviewing and for the Stars,
Comment from Mustang Patty
This poem tells a sad tale, that is all too often true. Two people stay together because they made a vow - but neither of their lives are enriched by the other. Is it because of one-or both? Thank you for sharing,
A suggestion;
'enmeshed (-in) together, without any win' (the statement doesn't need the in - enmeshed encompasses the thought
~patty~
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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This poem tells a sad tale, that is all too often true. Two people stay together because they made a vow - but neither of their lives are enriched by the other. Is it because of one-or both? Thank you for sharing,
A suggestion;
'enmeshed (-in) together, without any win' (the statement doesn't need the in - enmeshed encompasses the thought
~patty~
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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It always takes two to compromise . He hurt too.its a sad case of not allowing the growth which brings enrichment.
Thanks for all of your review and comments and stars Of course. The 'in' is redundant. Silly me. Trisha
Comment from Badger_29
Writing our deepest can be cathartic, and can be a form of communication. You have covered a LOT of ground here, a lifetime. I can see that you both have that spark of goodness, purity, and love.
I gave you six because you wrote from the heart, a twisted tale of toil, pain and giving. You have set an exemplary example of motherhood here, and I applaud you.
Very well written. You are on my prayer list daily.
Your reward is secure. I truly believe that there is some "intrinsic" connection to the suffering here, and the reward in the afterlife. Psalms 126:5 says,
"They that sew in tears shall reap in joy"
By sharing this, you have not only given me something specific to pray for, but have given us an opportunity for fellowship, and strengthened MY faith, hope, and love.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Darren < : - D ~
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Writing our deepest can be cathartic, and can be a form of communication. You have covered a LOT of ground here, a lifetime. I can see that you both have that spark of goodness, purity, and love.
I gave you six because you wrote from the heart, a twisted tale of toil, pain and giving. You have set an exemplary example of motherhood here, and I applaud you.
Very well written. You are on my prayer list daily.
Your reward is secure. I truly believe that there is some "intrinsic" connection to the suffering here, and the reward in the afterlife. Psalms 126:5 says,
"They that sew in tears shall reap in joy"
By sharing this, you have not only given me something specific to pray for, but have given us an opportunity for fellowship, and strengthened MY faith, hope, and love.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Darren < : - D ~
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you SO much for your review - it struck the tear dam! It is very cathartic for me to write a poem like this. He and I both have had tough times. But I was torn between 'Damed' if you do, damed if you don't ' for the kids. At least they had a father. Your time taken to express such a touching reply is greatly appreciated. The big difference now is I've learned to love myself, instead of waiting from the outside. I'm honored for the 6 stars, your prayers, comments and reassurance. .blessings to you, Trisha
