Tanka Waka
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Tanka: Cherry blossoms must fall"A collection of Japanese short poetry
53 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
How'd I miss this? Wonderful work, dear Dean.
Love the closing note. Pitch perfect. Love the rich phonetics, especially all the L, W, and S sounds and soft C in ancient as well as subtle consonance of R, M and T.
Beautiful insight. Beautiful imagery, beautiful tone and tenor. Outstanding word economy. Beautiful presentation.
A six.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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How'd I miss this? Wonderful work, dear Dean.
Love the closing note. Pitch perfect. Love the rich phonetics, especially all the L, W, and S sounds and soft C in ancient as well as subtle consonance of R, M and T.
Beautiful insight. Beautiful imagery, beautiful tone and tenor. Outstanding word economy. Beautiful presentation.
A six.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much for reading this, rd. I deeply appreciate your stellar review and comments.
You most likely missed it because it wasn't very highly promoted; just one point and .27 cents, I think, was all I was able to get this tanka up to at the time of its posting.
Still, better late than never, right?
On a side note, it has been selected by the Tanka Society of America for publication in their year-end anthology, so I'm very excited about that, and quite honored, too!
Thanks so much again.
Love & Light,
~Dean
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Wonderful news! Congrats! much deserved.Kudos! Proud of you!!! Yipeeeeee~
Warmly, rd
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wow.... this tanka is stunning... I read it a couple of days ago but I waited because I didn't have sixes and this is six worthy.
I love everything about it, from the fine form to the awesome presentation. Good job, my friend,
Gypsy
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Wow.... this tanka is stunning... I read it a couple of days ago but I waited because I didn't have sixes and this is six worthy.
I love everything about it, from the fine form to the awesome presentation. Good job, my friend,
Gypsy
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
Comment from Ulla
Wow Dean, this is a great Tanka and thank you for the extensive notes that put the whole thing into perspective. Amazing.
Our cherry trees are at the hight of their blossom. The whole valley is ablaze with them. Brings your poem into another kind of understanding. All the best. Ulla:))
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Wow Dean, this is a great Tanka and thank you for the extensive notes that put the whole thing into perspective. Amazing.
Our cherry trees are at the hight of their blossom. The whole valley is ablaze with them. Brings your poem into another kind of understanding. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
Comment from Chrissy710
Wow Dean You never cease to amaze me with your incrediblly informative notes and beautiful work .This is a lovely Tanka and says a lot with several meaning attached. no sixes left but worthy of one so hereâ?•¸? my friend another to make up .Cheers Christine ( lovely musicToo )
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Wow Dean You never cease to amaze me with your incrediblly informative notes and beautiful work .This is a lovely Tanka and says a lot with several meaning attached. no sixes left but worthy of one so hereâ?•¸? my friend another to make up .Cheers Christine ( lovely musicToo )
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read my tanka, Christine.
I really appreciate your positive response, and I'm even more grateful that you enjoyed it.
Take care, and thanks again.
~Dean
Comment from barbara.wilkey
One of my favorite places to be is in Washington DC when they cherry blossoms are in bloom on Tidal Basin. Your poem puts an entirely new meaning to those gorgeous flowers. Once again your talent shines through.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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One of my favorite places to be is in Washington DC when they cherry blossoms are in bloom on Tidal Basin. Your poem puts an entirely new meaning to those gorgeous flowers. Once again your talent shines through.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Yes, Washington D.C. is gorgeous during that time of year, Barbara.
Thank you for taking the time to read my tanka.
I really appreciate your positive response, and I'm even more grateful that you enjoyed it.
Take care, and thanks again.
~Dean
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Beautifully worded and not an axe in sight. The history lesson in the notes is much appreciated I thought they were all called Kamikaze (divine wind) I did not realize that there were special aircraft called Oka. The theme is cohesive, the syllable count correct, no gerunds running rampant through the piece and the juxtaposition of the blossoms and the warriors is lovely. If the pivot line were stronger, I'd a given it a six. rosehill (Wendy)
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Beautifully worded and not an axe in sight. The history lesson in the notes is much appreciated I thought they were all called Kamikaze (divine wind) I did not realize that there were special aircraft called Oka. The theme is cohesive, the syllable count correct, no gerunds running rampant through the piece and the juxtaposition of the blossoms and the warriors is lovely. If the pivot line were stronger, I'd a given it a six. rosehill (Wendy)
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read my tanka, Wendy.
Nope, no axes to grind in this one, LOL.
I really appreciate your positive response, and I'm even more grateful that you enjoyed it.
Take care, and thanks again.
~Dean
Comment from TAB_that's me
This has exceptional imagery in and wisdom too. I like the Japanese reference to sacred solemn oaths.
My last six.
teresa
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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This has exceptional imagery in and wisdom too. I like the Japanese reference to sacred solemn oaths.
My last six.
teresa
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read my tanka, Teresa.
I really appreciate your positive response, and I'm even more grateful that you enjoyed it.
Thanks too for the six, I am honored you felt it was worthy of your last one.
Take care, and thanks again.
~Dean
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is quite a devastating weapon the Japanese invented. The Tanka about the cherry blossoms speaks to the beauty of life and brevity here on earth as is the brevity of the blossom on the tree. Similarly, the Ohka plane has brevity as well, one flight to do its job.
The last two lines of your Tanka emphasize the dedication the Japanese had to their cause during their war. A one-way, suicide bomber, must be a dedicated warrior. An excellent Tanka
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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This is quite a devastating weapon the Japanese invented. The Tanka about the cherry blossoms speaks to the beauty of life and brevity here on earth as is the brevity of the blossom on the tree. Similarly, the Ohka plane has brevity as well, one flight to do its job.
The last two lines of your Tanka emphasize the dedication the Japanese had to their cause during their war. A one-way, suicide bomber, must be a dedicated warrior. An excellent Tanka
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thanks for taking the time required to read my tanka, Lura.
I appreciate your feedback.
Have a wonderful weekend.
~Dean
Comment from pharp
Dean,
This is a beautifully penned Tanka
and a remarkable presentation.
Powerful message and as always thanks
so much for the author's notes. Sorry that
I am all out of six stars. I am still trying to
get caught up. I am just about there. Thanks for sharing. Blessings...Portia
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Dean,
This is a beautifully penned Tanka
and a remarkable presentation.
Powerful message and as always thanks
so much for the author's notes. Sorry that
I am all out of six stars. I am still trying to
get caught up. I am just about there. Thanks for sharing. Blessings...Portia
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read my tanka, Portia.
As always, I deeply appreciate the positive response.
Take care, and God bless,
~Dean
Comment from Thal1959
Very well done, Dean. I had thought the Kamikaze occurred at the very end of the war as a last resort, but I never heard of the glider aircraft being used like this.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Very well done, Dean. I had thought the Kamikaze occurred at the very end of the war as a last resort, but I never heard of the glider aircraft being used like this.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thanks, David.
I appreciate your comments.
Enjoy your weekend.
~Dean
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Same to you, Dean.
