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Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "haiku (at the road's bend)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
Sounds like a bad one. Three years ago my daughter was a passenger in a car that left the road and ran into a tree. She broke both hips.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Sounds like a bad one. Three years ago my daughter was a passenger in a car that left the road and ran into a tree. She broke both hips.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Yes, Thomas, my haiku has caused reviewers like you to recall family and friends either injured in collisions with tress or killed. These scarred trees shattered glass landmark the areas just off of roads. We often do not want to think of them when we drive past, but each scarred tree tells a story of misery and pain. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Thal1959
Very well done - if I understand the gist of this. It is speaking of a vehicle that crashed into a tree at the bend in the road, and the remnant glass chips are akin to the needles under a pine tree, which is scarred from the impact.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Very well done - if I understand the gist of this. It is speaking of a vehicle that crashed into a tree at the bend in the road, and the remnant glass chips are akin to the needles under a pine tree, which is scarred from the impact.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Right, Thal1959, if you walk instead of drive along roads you will see scarred trees and shattered glass where cars have crashed in the past. these are haunting remnants. Thank you for your review.
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You are always welcome, it was a pleasure.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
If not the whole earth, here a scarred tree is buried, at this road bend, accidentally glass and needles are scattered in a dump, even precarious state for walking down this space, dismal is nature here, good images written.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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If not the whole earth, here a scarred tree is buried, at this road bend, accidentally glass and needles are scattered in a dump, even precarious state for walking down this space, dismal is nature here, good images written.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Alcreator Litt Dear, for your review of the "good images written" in my haiku.
Comment from sue133
Another gem from you. An image beautifully expressed in a haiku. The message is .....the horrible destruction we humans impose on nature (I hope I've got it right?) It is very good. Susan
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Another gem from you. An image beautifully expressed in a haiku. The message is .....the horrible destruction we humans impose on nature (I hope I've got it right?) It is very good. Susan
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Susan, for giving my haiku its first review. You partly got it right. You have to read between the lines to put the story together. Thank you for your review.
