Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "haiku(diffused light)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Ella25
It is a beautiful haiku, Ulla. The image is striking like you there, walking in the forest and feeling the warmth of the sun, shining through the trees. Beautiful. The words crest the image. Excellent work. With love, Ella
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It is a beautiful haiku, Ulla. The image is striking like you there, walking in the forest and feeling the warmth of the sun, shining through the trees. Beautiful. The words crest the image. Excellent work. With love, Ella
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, I can see and feel the diffused light shining softly through the green canopy. I can imagine myself in a forest of pines or in the tropics. Your words are concrete and descriptive. Your satori speaks of the majesty such a view brings upon life.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
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Yes, I can see and feel the diffused light shining softly through the green canopy. I can imagine myself in a forest of pines or in the tropics. Your words are concrete and descriptive. Your satori speaks of the majesty such a view brings upon life.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
Comment from Ric Myworld
What a great picture and poem combination that lets the rays shine through to look like lights of a cinematography's color spectrum spraying on a screen. Great job. :-)
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What a great picture and poem combination that lets the rays shine through to look like lights of a cinematography's color spectrum spraying on a screen. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This makes absolute sense, now that I can picture what you do in Spain. I thought about that all night. I love the mountains and know how different various rages are. Where you are, being akin to Southern Cal, is very different than my rugged Rockies; but the Western slope of Colorado may be a closer comparison, because they do have fruit trees there. I haven't been anywhere like that for years, but I do imagine it is gorgeous and so is this poem, my friend. Great work. Bruce.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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This makes absolute sense, now that I can picture what you do in Spain. I thought about that all night. I love the mountains and know how different various rages are. Where you are, being akin to Southern Cal, is very different than my rugged Rockies; but the Western slope of Colorado may be a closer comparison, because they do have fruit trees there. I haven't been anywhere like that for years, but I do imagine it is gorgeous and so is this poem, my friend. Great work. Bruce.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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I can't believe how I've overlooked this wonderful review. Bruce, I'm mortified. Thank you so much for the wonderful recognition. All the best, Ulla:))
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No problem, Ulla. I forget all the time or accidentally delete something without properly responding. I never mean to, but I can sure do that a lot. Thanks for all of your support. I hope your family and you are all doing very well. Take care. Bruce.
Comment from ronnie k
If it true that a picture are art has a thousand words you have reached out and taken every word, period and comma from this picture and designed an excellent poem.
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If it true that a picture are art has a thousand words you have reached out and taken every word, period and comma from this picture and designed an excellent poem.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
Comment from Sasha
Very nice work with this. I like that you don't stick to the traditional syllable count. Great connecting first two lines with a perfect satori. Lovey illustration to go with this one too.
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Very nice work with this. I like that you don't stick to the traditional syllable count. Great connecting first two lines with a perfect satori. Lovey illustration to go with this one too.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I think you did a wonderful job with your Haiku on trees. You talk about the light filtering through, and how that stimulates growth of new life. It has wonderful imagery, and invokes emotion about nature. Great job,
Rhonda
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I think you did a wonderful job with your Haiku on trees. You talk about the light filtering through, and how that stimulates growth of new life. It has wonderful imagery, and invokes emotion about nature. Great job,
Rhonda
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
