This is the Deep
Free verse34 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
What great alliterations! I sense something much deeper than the physical sea. In the "widow's weeds of dread" I think of how paralyzed we are by worry and those worries seep into our dreams. But I wonder why it is "lost" no more.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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What great alliterations! I sense something much deeper than the physical sea. In the "widow's weeds of dread" I think of how paralyzed we are by worry and those worries seep into our dreams. But I wonder why it is "lost" no more.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing this and giving your interpretation of it. It was, perhaps, a bit obscure! I had in mind death with unfulfilled dreams - or something along those lines. I got a bit carried away! LOL
Comment from ronnie k
I have waited to be able too rate your wonderful poems, well I have not waited in vain, this is almost a tale of a romance with the open seas this is just one of the many please fill free too share the six with my other reviews.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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I have waited to be able too rate your wonderful poems, well I have not waited in vain, this is almost a tale of a romance with the open seas this is just one of the many please fill free too share the six with my other reviews.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing this and giving your interpretation of it. It was, perhaps, a bit obscure! I had in mind death with unfulfilled dreams - or something along those lines. I got a bit carried away! I'm most grateful for the six stars. Much appreciated! LOL
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So much life is going on deep down that only a few ever get to see. I enjoyed reading this poem. I have always been intrigued by the deep dark part of the oceans. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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So much life is going on deep down that only a few ever get to see. I enjoyed reading this poem. I have always been intrigued by the deep dark part of the oceans. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing this and giving your interpretation of it. It was, perhaps, a bit obscure! I had in mind death with unfulfilled dreams - or something along those lines. I got a bit carried away! LOL
Comment from Sis Cat
I love the deep, aquatic imagery of this free verse poem with scattered rhymes. I feel like I am on the bottom of the ocean in a trench with strange life forms:
"where dreams, like plankton,
swirl through weed."
Your poem is vivid and imaginative. It also has a playfulness about it that mimics the sea creatures.
This closing line resonated with me:
"Dreams drowned in deed,
or lack of it;
a loss, but lost no more."
I feel some of the ache and loss of dreams drowned. Your poem takes on a somber closing note on failed dreams.
Thank you for sharing your exceptional poem.
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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I love the deep, aquatic imagery of this free verse poem with scattered rhymes. I feel like I am on the bottom of the ocean in a trench with strange life forms:
"where dreams, like plankton,
swirl through weed."
Your poem is vivid and imaginative. It also has a playfulness about it that mimics the sea creatures.
This closing line resonated with me:
"Dreams drowned in deed,
or lack of it;
a loss, but lost no more."
I feel some of the ache and loss of dreams drowned. Your poem takes on a somber closing note on failed dreams.
Thank you for sharing your exceptional poem.
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Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Very many thanks, Sis Cat, for your in-depth review and commentary on "This is the Deep", last week. Much appreciated as always. Best wishes, Tony
