americana
a flash fiction5 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for the lovely tour! Each area has its own story and sweet memory. Love how you wove this piece together. Did you really mean "Vermond" or did you mean "Vermont?"
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the lovely tour! Each area has its own story and sweet memory. Love how you wove this piece together. Did you really mean "Vermond" or did you mean "Vermont?"
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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vermond-green world ha ha where is that typo? This is semi true story, I do have the land,pond,view and red door. just need time enough there to put together a little outdoor museum.I got the idea from the Shelburne museum in Vermont. This rich woman Elektra went all around vermont and dis-assenbled an old country store, a jail house, school room, moved a huge boat, a 1950's house with 57 chevy in the driveway and putthem all together in an outdoor museum. It is amazing, google it.Thanks for the review, cheers, j
Comment from Quantum Traveler
A Beautiful Read Judester.
It Certainly Fits Your Persona.
From the time Anna Whistled for Her Dogs until the Evening Serenade of the Crickets there was no lull in the Descriptive Masterpiece of your Story.
Kudos to You and Your Friend SaneJane.
A Thoroughly Enjoyable Read about Two Friends and the Patchwork of Americana.
Excellent and Outstanding Judester...Quantum Traveler...Phil...Cheers.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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A Beautiful Read Judester.
It Certainly Fits Your Persona.
From the time Anna Whistled for Her Dogs until the Evening Serenade of the Crickets there was no lull in the Descriptive Masterpiece of your Story.
Kudos to You and Your Friend SaneJane.
A Thoroughly Enjoyable Read about Two Friends and the Patchwork of Americana.
Excellent and Outstanding Judester...Quantum Traveler...Phil...Cheers.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the insightful and encouraging review Phil. Some things are true in that story and I would love to have enough time to actually pull it together. The idea is from the Shelburne museum in Shelburne Vt . A rich woman called Elecktra went all over Vermont buying and disassembling, then reassembling the buildings in a rolling field. Old railway stations, school, a huge boat, A JAILHOUSE, country store, even a 1950's house with a 57 chevy parked in the driveway. walking through the house is just like being plunked back in time with all the old labels on the food in the kitchen.Maybe google it I think you would find it interesting. Have a wonderful Sunday and thanks for the sparkly stars to light my way, cheers, j
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Your Story Made for a Nice Peaceful Sunday...Cheers My Friend...Q,T...Phil.
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Thanks for the encouraging message. I am practicing writing prose. Cheers, j
Comment from sanejane
You laid out a beautiful forest, and filled it with perfect things, made from materials accessed in all the right ways, then left it there for me to find and walk through. You took me right there. How did you do that? How did you know it as the perfect gift? By the time I reached the end of the trail I had goosebumps. It felt like my home. Then I read your dedication. I didn't cry when my daughter ran to my door, battered and terrified. I haven't cried since; I haven't been able to, but I'm crying now, and I thank you for all of it - for the beauty and the release, and for somehow knowing where I needed to be. You're an incredible friend.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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You laid out a beautiful forest, and filled it with perfect things, made from materials accessed in all the right ways, then left it there for me to find and walk through. You took me right there. How did you do that? How did you know it as the perfect gift? By the time I reached the end of the trail I had goosebumps. It felt like my home. Then I read your dedication. I didn't cry when my daughter ran to my door, battered and terrified. I haven't cried since; I haven't been able to, but I'm crying now, and I thank you for all of it - for the beauty and the release, and for somehow knowing where I needed to be. You're an incredible friend.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Okay, now I am crying. What a wonderful and heartfelt reply from you. It is semi true. I do have that land in vermont, the view ,pond and red door. I just do not spend enough time there to do this americana museum "en pleine air. I just thought we could take a little fantasy walk and I knew that you would appreciate the repurposing of our beloved culture. I hope that you and your daughter are doing well and know that I am thinking of you both.I have extended an open invitation to all fanstory writers to come and visit me in Vermont this summer. Can you imagine spooky stories by the fire at night with Kuch?, peaceful meditation in the forest with Rama?and fun painting projects with gypsy rose and us hitting all the second hand shops and a picnic by the pond. ha ha my dream team.Wishing you a peaceful Sunda, xxj
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Times were once much simpler than they are now.
For many those were indeed the good old days.
Interesting storyline.
Should make a good entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Times were once much simpler than they are now.
For many those were indeed the good old days.
Interesting storyline.
Should make a good entry into this contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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I am always pulling stuff out of the dump pile, and repurposing it. Once a friend came and was admiring a mirror in a frame that I had refinished and had over my mantle. I laughed and told her it was that beat up frame that she was throwing away last month.Thanks for the review Brett, Have a nice Sunday, cheers, j
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I enjoyed this piece very much. A lovely tone to it which was maintained throughout.
She walked pass the antique wooden - past.
You do a great job with setting the scene in the opening paragraphs. beautiful descriptions which continue throughout giving a real sense of place.
beside the horse shoe pitch - horseshoe?
star gazing - stargazing.
the strand of maples.She followed - need a space after the full stop.
had constructed one week-end - weekend?
reflecting the sun off it's silver sides - its.
set up permanently beside the water.. - delete one of the full stops here.
a couple years, they made great little hovels,- should end with a full stop rather than a comma.
the Hansel and Gretal cottage - Gretel.
serenaded by crickets in the grass - need end punctuation at the end here.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Hi there,
I enjoyed this piece very much. A lovely tone to it which was maintained throughout.
She walked pass the antique wooden - past.
You do a great job with setting the scene in the opening paragraphs. beautiful descriptions which continue throughout giving a real sense of place.
beside the horse shoe pitch - horseshoe?
star gazing - stargazing.
the strand of maples.She followed - need a space after the full stop.
had constructed one week-end - weekend?
reflecting the sun off it's silver sides - its.
set up permanently beside the water.. - delete one of the full stops here.
a couple years, they made great little hovels,- should end with a full stop rather than a comma.
the Hansel and Gretal cottage - Gretel.
serenaded by crickets in the grass - need end punctuation at the end here.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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wow, I always feel reprimanded with your reviews and I appreciate your eye for detail. Thank you for the review and corrections, cheers, judester
