Fence Posts
a metaphoric poem58 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
I like the optimisim displayed here, in spite of the horrific circumstances.
Sometimes a bit of blind faith is better than no faith at all. It's all about what gets you through the night...
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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I like the optimisim displayed here, in spite of the horrific circumstances.
Sometimes a bit of blind faith is better than no faith at all. It's all about what gets you through the night...
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Hangar.
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A pleasure.
Nothing wrong with a bit of blind faith
Comment from Hitcher
Looking at the accompanying artwork I'm thinking old school prison, it reminds me of the opening scene in the first X-men movie, A German prison camp with very similar post and barbed wire, separating the Jews- children from parents, a harrowing scene.
That said my mind is playing with the thought that your poem is about escaping from the realities of memories that are to terrifying to want to remember.I t is a creative thought provoking offering friend to say the least : )
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Looking at the accompanying artwork I'm thinking old school prison, it reminds me of the opening scene in the first X-men movie, A German prison camp with very similar post and barbed wire, separating the Jews- children from parents, a harrowing scene.
That said my mind is playing with the thought that your poem is about escaping from the realities of memories that are to terrifying to want to remember.I t is a creative thought provoking offering friend to say the least : )
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Hitch
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I can feel the desperation of the character in the poem dreaming of escaping to a peaceful life. S/he hope/dreams of what was left behind & hopes to find it or return to that place of happiness.
Your poem was sad. I like the short lines as they quicken the pace like one who wants to run away from something bad. The picture is interesting & fitting.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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I can feel the desperation of the character in the poem dreaming of escaping to a peaceful life. S/he hope/dreams of what was left behind & hopes to find it or return to that place of happiness.
Your poem was sad. I like the short lines as they quicken the pace like one who wants to run away from something bad. The picture is interesting & fitting.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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You got it, completely. Thank you.
Comment from MelB
Hi Victor Touche, this is a powerful poem! It looks like the walls and fence of a concentration camp and a plan to escape from it.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Hi Victor Touche, this is a powerful poem! It looks like the walls and fence of a concentration camp and a plan to escape from it.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Yes, Mel., yes. Thank you.
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS to you Victortouche. This photo emphasizes a place of a caged life yearning to be free and to fly away from this city that entraps one. I feel the passion and desire in your poem and deep commitment to sail away to better life.
WELL DONE INDEED. liberty justice
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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SIX STARS to you Victortouche. This photo emphasizes a place of a caged life yearning to be free and to fly away from this city that entraps one. I feel the passion and desire in your poem and deep commitment to sail away to better life.
WELL DONE INDEED. liberty justice
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Completely correct and I thank you.
Comment from DonandVicki
A very melancholy feel to this poem of yours. The photograph speaks of horror's unimaginable. Very dark and also speaks of hope and freedom.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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A very melancholy feel to this poem of yours. The photograph speaks of horror's unimaginable. Very dark and also speaks of hope and freedom.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Yes, correct. And reasonable to limit impression to more general emotions.
Comment from dragonpoet
This seems to be about two people opening up and finding each other to help one another heal wounds that keep them on dark and stormy seas. This fence opening lets them calm the seas for each other,
The short lines show the importance of each step in the process.
Keep writing
dragonpot
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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This seems to be about two people opening up and finding each other to help one another heal wounds that keep them on dark and stormy seas. This fence opening lets them calm the seas for each other,
The short lines show the importance of each step in the process.
Keep writing
dragonpot
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you.
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No problem.
Joan
Comment from LaRosa
the painful longing is palpable in this poem.
Hope, the most important to me, is even more poignant as I look at the picture of what appears to be a prison camp...possibly Nazi?
This reader feels the loneliness and despair and wonders who she/he longs to be with.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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the painful longing is palpable in this poem.
Hope, the most important to me, is even more poignant as I look at the picture of what appears to be a prison camp...possibly Nazi?
This reader feels the loneliness and despair and wonders who she/he longs to be with.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Yes, I believe this was a concentration camp.
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guess I missed the real point...freedom!
Comment from emptypage
I can feel the longing in this poem. That's impressive. But then, the second time I read it, I looked at the image. That longing was more than longing. It was desperation.
The words are so delicately "spoken"--I hear them--it is hard to reconcile them with the idea of that hateful, horrid image.
Excellent work.
Out of sixes... but I wish you an extra.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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I can feel the longing in this poem. That's impressive. But then, the second time I read it, I looked at the image. That longing was more than longing. It was desperation.
The words are so delicately "spoken"--I hear them--it is hard to reconcile them with the idea of that hateful, horrid image.
Excellent work.
Out of sixes... but I wish you an extra.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Thank you, you did get it. All. :)
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Victor,
This was an interesting free verse poem on (metaphorically) mending fences. I like the ideas you've put forth about crossing oceans and sands to come to point of surpassing those fence posts in the light of the morning sunrise. (Hope I got that right!)
Thanks for sharing.
Kim
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Hi Victor,
This was an interesting free verse poem on (metaphorically) mending fences. I like the ideas you've put forth about crossing oceans and sands to come to point of surpassing those fence posts in the light of the morning sunrise. (Hope I got that right!)
Thanks for sharing.
Kim
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Smile. I never criticize alternate interpretations. In fact, I often learn from them. Thank you.
