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Comment from Ric Myworld
Another fine poem, coupled with the sounds of early morning life, makes me want to be standing in the field with the horse and dog. I'll just find me a tree while the other do the hunting. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Another fine poem, coupled with the sounds of early morning life, makes me want to be standing in the field with the horse and dog. I'll just find me a tree while the other do the hunting. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Wow! Excellent review, my friend. Thank you very much!
Namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor
Haiku Society of America Member
~A New Waka Class Every Month~
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fine haiku about the loyalty and the hunting effectiveness of "man's best friend." When I first read your title "loyal friend runs" I thought your poem was about a friend abandoning someone in their time of need. Oh, the scalawag! Only upon closer reading of your poem and picture did I realize you spoke of hunting dogs. Your poem captures the activity of hunting season on a crisp Autumn morning. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is a fine haiku about the loyalty and the hunting effectiveness of "man's best friend." When I first read your title "loyal friend runs" I thought your poem was about a friend abandoning someone in their time of need. Oh, the scalawag! Only upon closer reading of your poem and picture did I realize you spoke of hunting dogs. Your poem captures the activity of hunting season on a crisp Autumn morning. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Wow! Excellent review, my friend. Thank you very much!
Namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor
Haiku Society of America Member
~A New Waka Class Every Month~
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine haiku for the autumn challenge
With good imagery and connection in the friend/prey
and a solid satori line
The only suggest I would offer
is be more specific in the imagery rather than general
Such as: hound/fox or setter/pheasant
loyal hound runs
ahead to flush the fox--
crisp Autumn morn
An excellent haiku
Well done
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is a fine haiku for the autumn challenge
With good imagery and connection in the friend/prey
and a solid satori line
The only suggest I would offer
is be more specific in the imagery rather than general
Such as: hound/fox or setter/pheasant
loyal hound runs
ahead to flush the fox--
crisp Autumn morn
An excellent haiku
Well done
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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I like your suggestion... I will use it. :)
Thank you for the excellent review and helpful feedback, my friend :)
Namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor
Haiku Society of America Member
~A New Waka Class Every Month~
Comment from Mark Schardine
The loyal friend never loses a step in the search for prey. The picture, though, suggests that the dog prefers to play rather than hunt, and the horse is content to watch the dog.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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The loyal friend never loses a step in the search for prey. The picture, though, suggests that the dog prefers to play rather than hunt, and the horse is content to watch the dog.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, my friend.
Namaste
Gypsy
Comment from MaggieF
I love this rural haiku, of course the technical side is on the button but I can imagine his dog running ahead in search of prey, mutual respect between them and of course the perfect time setting, Autumn. MaggieF
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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I love this rural haiku, of course the technical side is on the button but I can imagine his dog running ahead in search of prey, mutual respect between them and of course the perfect time setting, Autumn. MaggieF
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from DR DIP
What is a horse's prey? Gypsy lol I thought they ate hay?
Lovely background sound so apt. Interesting interpretation . Maybe a hunting dog and a carnivorous animal for the photo? Maybe I am being to anal about the picture chosen. Your haikus are getting deeper.
Oh I just read your author's notes that explains everything You don't usually have author's notes explaining your haikus? Nice write nonetheless
dip
Thanks for your explanation of your haiku I am reading it so different now
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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What is a horse's prey? Gypsy lol I thought they ate hay?
Lovely background sound so apt. Interesting interpretation . Maybe a hunting dog and a carnivorous animal for the photo? Maybe I am being to anal about the picture chosen. Your haikus are getting deeper.
Oh I just read your author's notes that explains everything You don't usually have author's notes explaining your haikus? Nice write nonetheless
dip
Thanks for your explanation of your haiku I am reading it so different now
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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dog's prey, not horse's prey ... hahaha I didn't explain anything I just said that dogs help hunters hunt and they are friends. The picture is just a pretty picture to go with the poem nothing less and nothing more. Do you like it? I thought it was neat the way the dog is communicating with the horse but the haiku is not based on the picture.
Thank you for reading, my friend.
Dr Dip, it's ''haiku'' for one or for many, for singular and for plural. H A I K U not H A I K U S
That is your mini lesson free of charge, you are welcome. HAHAHA!
Gypsy
Comment from Hitcher
I have just recently came back from a hunting trip, deer was what we were after and deer is what we came back with, only one but we were happy with that. We don't use dogs when we hunt deer but if we go after pigs... : ) I don't trophy hunt, meat for the freezer is all I seek when I go. Excellent Haiku Gypsy Blue rose, You've inspired me. I 'm going to write a hunters haiku just for you friend : )
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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I have just recently came back from a hunting trip, deer was what we were after and deer is what we came back with, only one but we were happy with that. We don't use dogs when we hunt deer but if we go after pigs... : ) I don't trophy hunt, meat for the freezer is all I seek when I go. Excellent Haiku Gypsy Blue rose, You've inspired me. I 'm going to write a hunters haiku just for you friend : )
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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yay! hunters haiku, I will be sitting on needles and pins until you finish it. hehehe
Thank you, Hitch :)
