The Embarrassed Daffodil
'A Flower' Poem Contest Entry (5-7-5)3 total reviews
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. Your aproach to the contest challenge was creative. I have never thought of a daffodil bent over as being ashamed of ots name. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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A well-written contest entry. Your aproach to the contest challenge was creative. I have never thought of a daffodil bent over as being ashamed of ots name. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2017
Comment from chcbeck
A great way to look at a flower when it's head bows embarrased by its name.. Made me smile. A clever 5-7-5 a great contest entry good luck.
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A great way to look at a flower when it's head bows embarrased by its name.. Made me smile. A clever 5-7-5 a great contest entry good luck.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Daffodil, so pretty, <>her head hanging, a pity...
ashamed of her name.
Da/ffo/dil, so pre/tty, = 6 syllables
her head hanging, a pity... 7
ashamed of her name. 5
for a 5/7/5 contest the syllable count is very important. If you fix it I will change my review to a 5 stars.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Daffodil, so pretty, <>her head hanging, a pity...
ashamed of her name.
Da/ffo/dil, so pre/tty, = 6 syllables
her head hanging, a pity... 7
ashamed of her name. 5
for a 5/7/5 contest the syllable count is very important. If you fix it I will change my review to a 5 stars.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Gypsy! Believe it or not, I fixed the mistake very soon after I posted the poem, and you must have read it almost immediately. I'm glad it was you!
(Counting to five has always been a problem for me. Ask my kindergarten teacher.)
Cheers!
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HAHAHA!
