Perennials of War
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Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Good crisp believable dialogue. Your characters come alive as does the scene. Growing up we had a pool table in the rec room, so I can relate to the scene.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Good morning, Barbara
Good crisp believable dialogue. Your characters come alive as does the scene. Growing up we had a pool table in the rec room, so I can relate to the scene.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, Ahhh, here we go. The first hint of attraction between Shana and Anderson. Great. I liked this chapter a lot. Looking forward to happens next. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Hi Barbara, Ahhh, here we go. The first hint of attraction between Shana and Anderson. Great. I liked this chapter a lot. Looking forward to happens next. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. Shana and Anderson have a lot of issues ahead of them.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Superb, Barbara, I'm really enjoying your story. I enjoyed the little hint of attraction on Anderson's part, lol, no more lessons for Shana for a while! It was nice to have a little light moment amid the tension and intrigue, this is what makes the whole story believable. Well done, my friend! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Superb, Barbara, I'm really enjoying your story. I enjoyed the little hint of attraction on Anderson's part, lol, no more lessons for Shana for a while! It was nice to have a little light moment amid the tension and intrigue, this is what makes the whole story believable. Well done, my friend! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from royowen
Ah, it looks like Anderson is besotted by Shana, certainly being close to her, it's obvious he found it tough not to kiss, but like a good boy, restraints himself. It looks like they've straightened out the misunderstand, where to from here? Well done, Barbara, good scribing, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Ah, it looks like Anderson is besotted by Shana, certainly being close to her, it's obvious he found it tough not to kiss, but like a good boy, restraints himself. It looks like they've straightened out the misunderstand, where to from here? Well done, Barbara, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome Barbara
Comment from Sis Cat
"Her skin's soft."
Yep! That's all Anderson needs to know for now. That casual touch speaks volumes.
Then there was his sense of smell: "Anderson inhaled the scent of Shana's hair. Lavender. I can't do this."
Terrified of falling in love with Shana, he steps back and tells Helen to prepare dinner.
I love how you go slow and show the two struggling against their growing feelings towards one another. There is mutual attraction and fear of violating taboos and being subject to public scrutiny based upon perceived behavior.
I am really getting into your story. You are right, I care more about their possible romance than the history of the stolen painting. What the painting really is is a backdrop to the art of love unfolding before it.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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"Her skin's soft."
Yep! That's all Anderson needs to know for now. That casual touch speaks volumes.
Then there was his sense of smell: "Anderson inhaled the scent of Shana's hair. Lavender. I can't do this."
Terrified of falling in love with Shana, he steps back and tells Helen to prepare dinner.
I love how you go slow and show the two struggling against their growing feelings towards one another. There is mutual attraction and fear of violating taboos and being subject to public scrutiny based upon perceived behavior.
I am really getting into your story. You are right, I care more about their possible romance than the history of the stolen painting. What the painting really is is a backdrop to the art of love unfolding before it.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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It sure is. You've figured my writing out. Thank you.
Comment from Lu Saluna
The chapter was very well-written. Good conversational dialogue, just the right coyness going between Philip and Drew to know they have a little secret.
There was just enough intimacy to let the reader know there was definitely an attraction between Drew and Shana.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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The chapter was very well-written. Good conversational dialogue, just the right coyness going between Philip and Drew to know they have a little secret.
There was just enough intimacy to let the reader know there was definitely an attraction between Drew and Shana.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from MelB
Hi Barbara, a well written chapter. Just enough to keep the suspense going. There was a lot of sexual tension between Shana and Anderson.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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Hi Barbara, a well written chapter. Just enough to keep the suspense going. There was a lot of sexual tension between Shana and Anderson.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Heidi M
You did a great job showing how he's connecting with her on a physical level. You might want to consider showing how he's also attracted to her mind, character and personality.
I like how you're handling this story line.
(Did) you wait for Isaiah's
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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You did a great job showing how he's connecting with her on a physical level. You might want to consider showing how he's also attracted to her mind, character and personality.
I like how you're handling this story line.
(Did) you wait for Isaiah's
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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I will show more in bit and pieces. I off to make that correction. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sixty70
Yes, I think that Anderson shows he is at least attracted to Shana. Is she also attracted to him? She makes an issue of accepting the clothes because of the expense. Does she think she might have to repay him, or does she simply think it inappropriate?
SPAG:
Do (Did) you wait for Isaiah's answer? Did you
As far as I'm concerned(,) this discussion is
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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Yes, I think that Anderson shows he is at least attracted to Shana. Is she also attracted to him? She makes an issue of accepting the clothes because of the expense. Does she think she might have to repay him, or does she simply think it inappropriate?
SPAG:
Do (Did) you wait for Isaiah's answer? Did you
As far as I'm concerned(,) this discussion is
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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I will make those corrections. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mbroyles2
I truly am enjoying this story.This is our first hint of some chemistry between Shana and Anderson.
The household is starting to pick up the hint as well.
Great writing!
Michael
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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I truly am enjoying this story.This is our first hint of some chemistry between Shana and Anderson.
The household is starting to pick up the hint as well.
Great writing!
Michael
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I was worried about this post.
