Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Chapter Sechs part drei"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
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Comment from chcbeck
There definitely was the feeling that Anderson had feelings for Shannon. The tension between them is spot on. Great read and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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There definitely was the feeling that Anderson had feelings for Shannon. The tension between them is spot on. Great read and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ciliverde
I know the feeling of playing pool with someone you're getting to know, and you kind of like them...and I'm getting that feeling here, so I think you're doing a nice job with this part of the story. Anderson is starting to have feelings for Shana...but less clear are Shana's feelings toward him. Maybe she's not there yet. Accepting the clothes will be a big step I think.
Well done,
Carol
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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I know the feeling of playing pool with someone you're getting to know, and you kind of like them...and I'm getting that feeling here, so I think you're doing a nice job with this part of the story. Anderson is starting to have feelings for Shana...but less clear are Shana's feelings toward him. Maybe she's not there yet. Accepting the clothes will be a big step I think.
Well done,
Carol
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Still an interesting story. Romance in the making. You are good at that. Love the way it glides along covering hidden thought. Well done as usual. /Ben.
Sometimes this year, Silent Hands of God will be out. Thomas Neilson Publisher, West Bow Division will present it with video and other. Best to you.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Still an interesting story. Romance in the making. You are good at that. Love the way it glides along covering hidden thought. Well done as usual. /Ben.
Sometimes this year, Silent Hands of God will be out. Thomas Neilson Publisher, West Bow Division will present it with video and other. Best to you.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Please let me know when it's out. Thank you for the kind review.
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I signed the contract today. Will let you know. Please tell the others. Tom will advertise it I'm sure.
Comment from barkingdog
I've missed a few chapters and see now that things are heating up with Anderson's feelings toward Shana. Attempting to halt his feeling, he ordered dinner. Like that will change anything. lol
You're doing a good job taking things slowly and allowing the plot to develop another layer.
I didn't see anything to correct.
:) e
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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I've missed a few chapters and see now that things are heating up with Anderson's feelings toward Shana. Attempting to halt his feeling, he ordered dinner. Like that will change anything. lol
You're doing a good job taking things slowly and allowing the plot to develop another layer.
I didn't see anything to correct.
:) e
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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I am always happy to hear form you. Thank you for the kind review.
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:) e
Comment from bookishfabler
Wow, that was short. I have been trying to catch up with my messages for a couple of days. I only have mornings since I am moving and still working in between. Great chapter. Wish it was a bit longer. Finally he is showing interest.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Wow, that was short. I have been trying to catch up with my messages for a couple of days. I only have mornings since I am moving and still working in between. Great chapter. Wish it was a bit longer. Finally he is showing interest.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
I think you are doing a fine job of letting us see Andersen's growing feeling for Shana. She was quite the tease when she looked over her shoulder just then. Men; it takes so little to get their attention. The imagery you created allowed the reader to be at the pool table.
A nit: but if you like them(+,) then they're
~patty~
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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I think you are doing a fine job of letting us see Andersen's growing feeling for Shana. She was quite the tease when she looked over her shoulder just then. Men; it takes so little to get their attention. The imagery you created allowed the reader to be at the pool table.
A nit: but if you like them(+,) then they're
~patty~
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barbara. Well one can certaainly see the romance bubbling to the surface in this chapter, my friend. The old "I'll show you how to play" ploy. LOL
Suggestion: This sounds too contrived. "After a large swallow, Shana faced Anderson." ( It doesn't flow well.) Try, "Shana paused and faced Anderson."
I don't think you should have that note at the bottom about romance and the future of the book. That is something that you should just let the story unfoldm and let the reader find out.
Good job once again, Barbara. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Hi, Barbara. Well one can certaainly see the romance bubbling to the surface in this chapter, my friend. The old "I'll show you how to play" ploy. LOL
Suggestion: This sounds too contrived. "After a large swallow, Shana faced Anderson." ( It doesn't flow well.) Try, "Shana paused and faced Anderson."
I don't think you should have that note at the bottom about romance and the future of the book. That is something that you should just let the story unfoldm and let the reader find out.
Good job once again, Barbara. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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I will rethink that note. I have it there because many people, especially reviewers new to me, see the romance tag and immediately think of some jump in the bed novel and are disappointed. My romances take a while to build. I will fix that correction. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kriver
Hi
This is a good chapter
You could have Shana as novice player
rip a gigantic hole in the felt table
oops . It would only cost a few $k to fix
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Hi
This is a good chapter
You could have Shana as novice player
rip a gigantic hole in the felt table
oops . It would only cost a few $k to fix
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Give her time, that's a good idea. Maybe she'll practice when Anderson't not around. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I never thought of pool as a romantic game, LOL. A well written chapter, my friend. This is going to be interesting. Looking forward to more~Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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I never thought of pool as a romantic game, LOL. A well written chapter, my friend. This is going to be interesting. Looking forward to more~Debbie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I figure anything can be romantic.
Comment from light
The subtle hint of romance shines in this chapter. Anderson is smart to change the subject. Your moving this story along smoothly. Great chapter.
Elaine
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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The subtle hint of romance shines in this chapter. Anderson is smart to change the subject. Your moving this story along smoothly. Great chapter.
Elaine
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
